Rebirth of the famous family in the entertainment industry

Chapter 582 An Unexpected New Script (1)
Cheng Siqi had dinner and was originally perfecting her script in the study.

The phone at the table rang, and she connected it directly, and asked with a soft smile, "Have you finished watching?"

"It's over."

"Huh?" Hearing that he didn't speak for a while, Cheng Siqi inevitably became a little nervous, "Not good?"

"Not counting," Jiang Yuan opened the curtains, looked at the quiet night, tapped the metal railing with his slender fingers, thought for a while, and said, "Not satisfactory."

According to his polite tone, the translated meaning is barely passable.

Cheng Siqi reached out and pressed her eyebrows, "What's the problem? You said, I'm reading the script right now in front of the computer."

"Do you remember the passage I emphasized several times?"

"Huh?" Cheng Siqi thought for a while, but didn't say anything further.

Jiang Yuan reminded her, "Pudovkin."

"Oh," Cheng Siqi was slightly stunned, nodded and said, "Remember."

"Retell what he said."

"Oh," Cheng Siqi stretched out her hands to scratch her hair, frowned and said slowly, "The screenwriter must always remember this fact: every sentence he writes will appear on the screen in some form in the future." Therefore, the words and sentences they wrote are not important, what is important is that his descriptions must be able to be expressed in appearance and become the image of the shape."

From the beginning of her creation of "Qingcheng", Jiang Yuan did repeatedly emphasize this passage to her. Cheng Siqi has read it many times and remembers it clearly.

"That's right." Jiang Yuan said in a slightly serious tone, "Look at your script, starting from the first paragraph of the text."

Cheng Siqi dragged the mouse and clicked on the place he said.

Jiang Yuan's voice was deep and slow, "In your first paragraph, you used such words as 'jubilantly, proudly, anxiously, and timidly', so abstract, can it be reflected on the screen?"

"..." Cheng Siqi had nothing to say.

"Script writing is not writing a novel. We must avoid declarative text as much as possible. Whether it is explaining the plot or describing the characters, it should be visualized," Jiang Yuan said in a deep tone, "like cheering, the actions shown are shouting, jumping, and excitement Bending down and laughing, there should be specific movements and expressions, such as being arrogant, the specific movement and demeanor, it is also the same as being overwhelmed and looking timid. Shouldn't the overwhelmed look be reflected in turning around in place and looking timid? Shrinking? Pursing lips? Seeing the crowd retreat unconsciously? All these should be visualized rather than abstracted.”

"..." Cheng Siqi held the mouse and was speechless for a long time.

"You used a lot of abstract words like this, from beginning to end," Jiang Yuan concluded, "The document you gave me was in the format of a literary script, but you used a lot of novel text, which inevitably seemed nondescript."

"..." Cheng Siqi stretched out her hand and scratched her hair, listening to him criticizing each word in a serious manner, she wished she could find a crack in the ground and sneak in.

"Why don't you speak?"

"I'm listening to you, and your criticisms are very correct." Cheng Siqi said quickly, "I will correct it."

"Don't worry," Jiang Yuan seemed to snort softly, and then changed the topic, "Everyone who wrote the script will make this problem at the beginning, so don't feel ashamed. After talking about the others, let's improve together."

"Oh." Cheng Siqi obediently responded again, with a very modest tone.

She actually liked her script quite a bit, but Jiang Yuan asked her to recite the text from the beginning, which made her feel like she was directly back in class, naturally without any sense of expansion.

"Tell me about the structure of your script." Jiang Yuan thought for a while, "The beginning is progressive and the end is closed."

"You think it's not attractive?" Cheng Siqi was finally able to speak, and said solemnly, "But my story tends to be straightforward, and it's difficult to set a suspenseful beginning."

She pursed her lips slightly, and her tone was a little annoyed. Jiang Yuan on the other end seemed to chuckle happily, and said solemnly: "Well, it seems that I have done some homework."

"I remember everything you said." Cheng Siqi was afraid to leave him with the impression that one ear went in and the other came out, so she hurriedly said something.

"good."

"Ok?"

"I said the attitude is good." Jiang Yuan continued, "The main line of your story is fine, warm and beautiful, soothing and concise, with touching emotions in it. When I talk about structure, I mainly want to talk about the problem of structural clues."

"Single clue?" Cheng Siqi asked back.

"Do you think it's okay?"

"This structure is very suitable for the creation of movie scripts." Cheng Siqi thought for a while.

"Well," Jiang Yuan did not veto her, and changed the topic, "Let's talk about the relationship between the characters first. Although a movie is only more than two hours long, although the sparrow is small and complete, compared to TV, movies are Finely crafted art, from the protagonist to the supporting role, should have a role to play, even a small role with soy sauce has its own meaning of existence."

"En." Cheng Siqi responded.

"A film and television drama is completed by the artistic cooperation of the main and supporting roles. In this sense-there is no 'protagonist without a supporting role' in the script, and it is impossible to have a 'protagonist without a supporting role'," Jiang Yuan paused slightly. , "I say so, understand?"

"Do you think there are fewer characters in the story?" Cheng Siqi thought about it, "There are three main supporting roles."

"Well, but your supporting roles didn't serve the protagonist," Jiang Yuan smiled, "They have a weaker sense of existence, they are not portrayed enough, they are easily overlooked, and they don't play a good role in contrasting the protagonist, which will make the whole The story isn't rich enough."

"I..." Cheng Siqi was speechless.

She has only been in the entertainment circle for a total of three years in her past and present lives. She has studied acting and participated in only two films in total. Her qualifications and experience are pitiful, so she naturally has many shortcomings.

"Your movie belongs to the series of pure love of youth. It is more literary and artistic. For the current film industry, it is too pure. The plot is soothing, there are few conflicts, and there are not enough bright spots to make it a hit." Jiang Yuan thought for a while, and then said .

What he said was the truth.

When a good script is considered to be put on the screen, the first thing to look for should be something that can be packaged. Of course, the pure love of childhood sweethearts is one, but this alone is not enough.

(End of this chapter)