College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 107 Fragment of "Human Words" (2)
"There is a fish in Beiming, its name is Kun, and the size of the Kun is unknown for thousands of miles; when it turns into a bird, its name is Peng. The back of the Peng is unknown for thousands of miles..." I read Zhuangzi's "Xiaoyao" How many people in "You" are not impressed by his unconstrained, pursuit of absolute freedom?Zhuangzi's essays are eclectic and ever-changing, breaking the restrictions of secular concepts and forms, showing a philosophical spirit that is completely different from realistic ideas, a style that is completely different from other proses, expressing his The core of his thoughts - the spirit of absolute freedom.Mr. Lu Xun, a great writer of a generation, called his articles "Wang Yang's swaying, graceful and graceful, and the works of the late Zhou masters, there is no one who can be the first."It is really free and easy to be a writer and a person.However, looking deep into it, it is not as free and easy as we imagined.Although the Kunpeng described in the article has a huge body and seems to be able to fly unrestrained in the sky, once it leaves the strong wind on the sea, it cannot fly in the sky at all.

This state of being free and easy on the surface but constrained in nature is actually the true face of Zhuangzi's life.If you live in it, you should be bound by it; if you think beyond the outside, you can be free and easy. "Zhuang Shengxiao is fascinated by butterflies in dreams", the freedom he yearns for is just like the unrestrained scene of butterflies flying among flowers, that is, to roam in the imagination of dream me and dream butterfly.This may be the highest state in his life state!

In contrast, Shi Tiesheng is different.He lost his due freedom of action due to illness.A dignified man, he could only continue writing his life while sitting in a wheelchair. At that time, he couldn't accept this fact, so he stayed behind closed doors all day long, venting all the grievances in his heart to his mother, complaining about the injustice of God.But after a long time of thinking and his mother's care, he slowly walked out of the circle from the shadow of losing his freedom.It wasn't until his mother's death that he really saw through everything in this world.Thus, he completely jumped out of the painful quagmire of losing freedom, and started to live in the world.

Indulging in the unfreedom in front of us will only intensify our inner confusion and disappointment in the future of life. Once we "go beyond the outside" and walk out of the narrow heart, we will enter a free paradise and a vast universe. At this time, looking at the setbacks and sufferings experienced in life, it turns out that they are just a small ditch and a hurdle on the road of life.

In this world, there is a lot of grandeur. Although we cannot enjoy the absolute freedom of Zhuangzi, we can still live a cheerful life like Shi Tiesheng. "Mountains are heavy and rivers are full of doubts, and there is no way out, and the willows are dark and the flowers are bright, and there is another village." Looking at many things from a different angle, stepping out of the limitations of thinking will be different, and it will give people new enlightenment.

If we can pursue freedom and enjoy life like Zhuangzi, then there will be more beautiful "butterflies" in this world, and fewer people who are desperate to live because of their horns.If we can taste life and pursue life like Shi Tiesheng, then there will be more beautiful "earth altars" in the world, and fewer people who suffer unspeakably because of fighting for fame and fortune.

score review
This article is a relatively unique argumentative essay.Candidates quoted the materials of the questions, subtly extracted their own views from them, and then used the scalpel of dialectical materialism to approach the souls of Zhuangzi and Shi Tiesheng.The selection of the article is precise, the reasoning is thorough, and the language is easy to understand, which is easy for readers to understand and accept.

The cornerstone of thinking towards success
(a candidate from Hubei)

"Into the inside, out of the outside" is our basic way of understanding and discovering the world, and also the cornerstone of our thinking towards success.

--Inscription

Being "inside" has life, and going out "outside" shows talent; being "inside" is sincere, and going out "outside" is not hypocritical; entering "inside" for things to see the essence, and going out "outside" to follow the law, so I think of the following Three shots:
Lens [-]: Innovation as Literature

He - a student, is writing a composition.The teacher requires "innovation", because only "innovation" can produce beautiful essays.So he closed the door to "innovate"!

As everyone knows, innovation must be based on a deep understanding of life.I don’t know how many nights Xia Yan walked dozens of miles to the Japanese cotton mill to observe the life of the bonded workers, and finally wrote the astonishing work "Based Workers"; , wrote "Xiao Erhei Married" and other well-known chapters.Just imagine how can a writer write articles that have been passed down through the ages if he doesn't deeply appreciate life and think about the true meaning of life?Therefore, it is said: for writing, one must enter into it and taste the ups and downs of life; outside of it, grasp the pulse of the times and innovate in writing!

Shot [-]: Be a simple person
She - a young lady, is wearing heavy makeup.Everyone likes to be beautiful, because everyone has a heart for beauty.So she used dirty money obtained by illegal means to disguise herself.

In life, we should be sincere and not vain.The so-called sincerity means that we should be practical, sincere and simple in life, and we should not pursue extravagant life or live a hypocritical life.Comrade Lei Feng lived a diligent and thrifty life, and acted sincerely with the purpose of serving the people wholeheartedly. A great life was created by every real little thing; Wu Tianxiang, the contemporary "Lei Feng", cared about the poor all the year round, and was on the journey of helping people out of poverty all the time. , with love and simplicity set up a beacon of life.Only by being a simple person and putting it into your life can you make your life shine.On the contrary, if you are greedy for vanity, you will only harm yourself and others.Mathilde coveted vanity for one night, but paid the price of ten years of youth; Cheng Kejie coveted momentary enjoyment, but degenerated into a sinner of the people and was punished by law.Let's be a simple person who blends into people's lives together!
Lens [-]: In-depth exploration
They - a group, are conducting research on the subject.The society is envious of its achievements, because career achievements are a stepping stone to attract everyone's attention.So they use plagiarism to whitewash themselves.

When appreciating nature and understanding society, we must endure loneliness, study painstakingly, and explore deeply from the outside to the inside, instead of using plagiarism to take shortcuts and whitewash ourselves.Science has no room for hypocrisy and pride.Newton was hit on the head by an apple falling from a tree, so he delved into the reason why the apple could fall, and thus came up with the amazing "law of universal gravitation"; He thought about the function of water vapor, invented the steam engine, and opened a new chapter in the rapid development of human beings.It can be seen from this that when we understand things and society, we must not only integrate appearances and facts into them, but also go beyond them and sum up the laws of things in time to achieve success.

Therefore, following the principle of harmony and unity of "inside and outside" in everything, the road to success must not be far away.

"Inside it, out of it" may not be the fastest way to solve a problem, and it may not be the only way, but it must be the best way of thinking and the cornerstone of our thinking towards success!

score review
The author uses a metaphor as the title to guide the whole article, and uses three lenses to understand life, society, and its "inside" and "outside" from the perspectives of "writing", "people", and "things". Dialectical Relations.The concept is ingenious, the form is lively and lively, which is impressive.In addition, the precise selection of materials and examples of positive and negative comparisons are also a major feature of this article.

classic case
Xia Yan, Zhao Shuli, Lei Feng, Wu Tianxiang, Newton, Watt, the lady who used illegal means to get dirty money to dress herself up, Mathilde who was greedy for one night of vanity but paid the price of ten years of youth, greedy for momentary enjoyment but degenerated The "exit" and "entry" of the lives of Cheng Kejie, the sinner of the people, and others

(a candidate from Hubei)

Wang Guowei has such a discussion in "Human Words": "A poet must enter the universe and life, and he must go beyond it. He must enter it, so he can write it. Go outside, so he can see it. It’s because it’s inside, so it’s alive; it’s outside, so it’s high.”

From this passage, we can not only see the unique way of writing of this master of Chinese studies, but also feel the wisdom of life deeply contained in it: people do things, and only by being able to see them can we be invincible land.

The so-called "entering" is what we often say "getting in".It is necessary to devote ourselves wholeheartedly when doing things, so as to ensure our determination and efficiency in doing things.Floating on the surface is the mortal enemy of success. The result of a little taste is that we are like the mole in the fable.

There is a familiar story about Rodin who almost locked his guest Zweig in his studio while he was working.From this incident, it is not difficult to see how much Rodin devoted himself to his work. He "drilled into" his work and forgot the whole world.Zweig later recalled that he learned more in Rodin's studio that day than in school.This "entry" state is as important as knowledge.Throughout the past and present, all successful people have the determination to "enter". "Entering" has the eighteen vats of ink that Wang Xizhi finished writing, "entering" has Xuanzang's journey of tens of thousands of miles to learn the scriptures, and "entering" has dozens of sacks of manuscript paper that Chen Jingrun calculated.With "entry", everything is possible to succeed.

Of course, the "entry" mentioned here does not mean blindly reckless, but to coordinate with the "exit".

There is such a line in Su Shi's "Tixi Linbi": "I don't know the true face of Lushan Mountain, but I only live in this mountain." This poem best explains the necessity of "going out".When we do things, subjective consciousness plays a leading role, and no one can guarantee that there will be no mistakes in human thinking.Xunzi said: "A wise man thinks a lot, and he will make a mistake." When we make a mistake, if we cannot correct it in time, we may go astray. When we wake up, we can only lament that "one mistake will cause eternal hatred".Therefore, when doing things as human beings, it is very important to jump out of the subjective circle and examine ourselves from the perspective of a bystander, so that we can make fewer mistakes.

The British mathematician Dofanville has devoted more than 30 years of energy to calculate the value of pi to more than 800 decimal places.But later generations found that he made a mistake when he was in the 300th place, that is to say, his efforts in the next two decades were in vain.There is no room for sloppy science. If Dufanville can often and objectively review his own steps and data during the work process, he may not leave this regret.Science is like this, why is life not like this?I often hear people regret what they did not do well or what they should not do.You know, no amount of regret after the fact will help.We should learn from doing things and have a better understanding of the meaning of "out".

Some people say that we cannot determine the length of life, but we can increase its depth; we cannot change the quantity of life, but we can improve its quality.We must grasp "in" and "out", use "in" to increase the depth of life, use "out" to improve the quality of life, and create a successful life between in and out.

score review
Candidates introduce topics from the materials, and talk about the "exit" and "entry" of life. The language is mellow and sophisticated, and the discussions are lively.Another feature of this article is that it is rich in examples, or citations, or examples, or positive and negative arguments, or hypothetical reasoning, with sufficient arguments, clear writing, insightful insights, and very convincing.

classic case
Luo Dan, Wang Xizhi, Chen Jingrun, Dofanville, etc.
exterior and interior

(a candidate from Hubei)

Facing the vast universe, what you see is a black background with stars dotted, which is very beautiful.But when you see everything in front of you and praise the beauty of the stars and the legend of the moon, can you understand its true meaning?The stars in front of you are so small, would you think that the size of the small stars is larger than the moon or even larger than the earth?After you understand this, when you look at the starry sky again, you will be full of praise for the mystery of the universe, and your evaluation will no longer be limited to a certain appearance!
Of course, we always start with the appearance of things, but the appearance does not represent the essence.Some people are beautiful on the outside, but their hearts are dirty; some people are disabled, but they have a heart like gold.Jiang Qing, who was born as an actor, can be said to be beautiful in appearance, but under the cover of this beautiful appearance is a vicious heart, a heart that usurps power and ruins the country and the people.On the contrary, Zhang Haidi, who was paralyzed in a high position, relied on the perseverance to fight against the disease, and still wrote about her bright life in the hospital bed and wheelchair, becoming a model admired by the world.I think that the connotation of any thing needs to be analyzed and tasted like tea, in order to taste its interest, style and spirit, and taste its inner vitality, prosperity and tenacity, which will infect you and let you have more Passion for life.

To taste life and understand the world, one must be good at seeing the inner world through the surface.A beautiful flower must have a healthy internal structure; a person's thoughts and will can be expressed through a look and an action; a confident person must have a smile on his face and hold his head high; a united and strong In the nation, there must be countless kind, friendly and hardworking people.So when a person stands in front of you, you don't need to pay too much attention to his delicate facial features or tall figure, please observe his eyes, expressions, behaviors and mental outlook!This is helpful for you to recognize whether the beauty in front of you is high and worthy of appreciation; or it is only an empty shell that is only limited to the appearance.

"Inside it, out of it" is the best way for us to know things and the world. "Being inside, there is vitality. Going outside, there is magnificence." When we know things, we must first enter inside, so that we can come into contact with living things and obtain first-hand materials.Just imagine, how do people who have never seen a horse know that a horse gallops like the wind?How do people who have never eaten grapes know the sour taste of grapes?Only by going deep into the living world can we have a perceptual understanding of everything.When we have a perceptual understanding of things, we should also "beyond the outside".Only by being outside of everything can we compare things, see the differences and laws between things and in life, and only then can we appreciate the interest in things and love for life.Only in this way can we truly understand the true meaning of life.

"Into the inside, out of the outside", let's savor our living world with heart!
score review
The article is clear in thinking and well-structured, mainly using factual arguments and positive and negative comparative arguments to clarify the point of view.Candidates carefully select the cases of Zhang Haidi and Jiang Qing, and compare and contrast them, so that the superiority and inferiority can be seen from each other, and the advantages and disadvantages are obvious.At the end, it ends with a call of "'Inside it, out of it', let's savor our living world with heart", which concludes the full text, which is clear and intriguing.

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