College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 45 busy

(2004 Shanghai Volume)

composition test questions
Write an article on the topic of "busy".

Requirements: (1) Prepare the topic yourself. (2) About 1000 words. (3) Don't write it as poetry.

Question Analysis
Compared with the topic composition "miscellaneous" in Shanghai's college entrance examination in 2003, the topic of "busy" further expands the extension of the proposition concept, involves a wider living space, and focuses on guiding students to pay attention to current affairs and politics, stay close to life, connect with society, and pay attention to people. On the outside, the writing space is larger.Nowadays, Chinese society is developing vigorously, and people are busy building a well-off society and creating civilization. Students in this hot era can hear and see all aspects of society, and feel the pulse and breath of life. Therefore, candidates have something to say, There are feelings to express and reasons to describe.

Writing Ideas Tips
"Busy" has many meanings. "Busy" is a dynamic, from which reality can be analyzed; "busy" is a kind of spirit, from which life can be analyzed; "busy" is a variable, from which philosophy can be explained.Candidates can describe their own day to show the theme of students being happy or helpless because of the busyness of the exam. They can also write about the busyness of a judge and a thief in a contrastive way: one is busy serving the people, the other is busy harming the interests of others, Reveal that different "busy" have different meanings.

Full score sample essay
atypically busy

(a candidate from Shanghai)

一
Xiao Li has a shrewd mind, and he likes to use his golden abacus to see if he can make some pocket money from it.But such a small fight all day long, Xiao Li felt that it was too worthless.No, while he was watching the news, he was making money calculations on the sofa.

It's SARS again!Xiao Li, who was thinking hard and unable to find a way out, was annoyed by the news, so he got up and turned off the TV.But after sitting back on the sofa, the sixth sense developed by long-term careful calculation made Xiao Li restless, always feeling that he had missed something.

At this time, his girlfriend Xiaofeng opened the door and came in with a bag of Banlangen.

"Xiao Li, the spread of SARS has been serious recently. Many patients came to the hospital. Two of them were diagnosed with SARS. I decided to stay in the hospital recently. This is the Radix Banlangen issued by the hospital. Remember to drink it on time. Wear a mask when you go out. , remember it!"

Xiao Li just stared at Banlangen and didn't respond to Xiaofeng.Xiaofeng was so angry that she went back to the hospital immediately.

two

Xiao Li is worthy of being a shrewd person.A pack of banlangen inspired him a lot.The next day, he was busy.

He first investigated several places where SARS spread most seriously, and listed four major "financial regions": Beijing, Inner Mongolia, Shanxi, and Guangdong.Then he bought a large amount of white vinegar and Banlangen, and hurriedly flew to Inner Mongolia.If you say that the Mongols are bold, Xiao Li made a windfall within a few days.Thinking of the high level of consumption in Beijing, Xiao Li is even more amused.But I don't want to, at the feet of the emperor, everyone is very conscious, but Xiao Li is defeated.Gritting his teeth, Xiao Li decided to go to Guangzhou and take another gamble.Because of his quick mind, he specially selected small villages to sell Banlangen and other medicines, and the villagers willingly paid for him, and even frantically snapped them up.

For several days, Xiao Li ran non-stop in the four major "financial districts".Several times, Xiaofeng didn't have time to answer his calls.Xiao Li said: "The whole country is full of SARS, busy!"

three

The hospital has received suspected SARS patients for several days.

Xiaofeng has not had a good rest for several days.Those originally watery eyes were flushed red, seemed to be mixed with a few streaks of blood, and the eye circles were dark.The hair is also a little messy, maybe it hasn't been carefully taken care of for several days.

"Xiaofeng, hurry up! Another patient has been brought in!"

Before the words fell, Xiaofeng, who had just closed her eyes and leaned against the back of the chair to take a rest, jumped up like a spring and rushed towards the infirmary.This scene has been performed countless times, and Xiaofeng is used to it.

What makes her most disturbed now is that no one answers the phone calls to Xiao Li.In fact, she just wanted to say to Xiao Li: "I'm sorry! SARS is causing a lot of trouble. I can't accompany you recently. I'm busy!"

score review
The article is well thought out.The first part always writes about Xiao Li and Xiao Feng's "busy", the second part writes about Xiao Li's "busy", and the third part writes about Xiao Feng's "busy". There is a lingering rhyme.The selection of materials for the article is typical, and the combination of overview and description makes the characters distinctive and ready to come out.

please be busy
(a candidate from Shanghai)

In "Dream of Red Mansions", Tanchun got up with Yaxing and wanted to create a poetry club, so everyone thought about having an individual name for each, and Baochai figured out such a name for Baoyu-"rich, noble and idler".

Yes, it is very happy to be a wealthy and idle person, but if there is no Sister Feng to take care of the housework and be so busy, wouldn't the Jia family be ruined faster?By that time, Baoyu will be lucky if he is not busy being a "lu beetle", so where can he be free?
It can be seen that busyness is the premise of leisure, just as production is the premise of consumption.If you want to live a leisurely life, you have to be busy first!

When the nation is in peril, you must be busy.

Farmers should be busy farming and producing food; soldiers should be busy fighting and attacking the enemy;Recently, some people have belittled Lu Xun and advocated the leisurely humor of Lin Yutang and Zhou Zuoren. I think this is not the case.At that time, the Japanese army marched south, and the national army collapsed thousands of miles away. It was the time for the survival of the nation and the autumn for the people with lofty ideals to serve the country.Lin, Zhou and others don't know how to be busy with state affairs, but they think of themselves as leisure, which is really shameful.You must know that you are not busy today, and he will be reduced to a subjugated slave, so how can he be at ease?In contrast, Lu Xun used the time that others used to drink coffee and chat, and was busy writing articles without sleeping or eating.

Yes, the life we ​​have today is entirely due to the work of people with lofty ideals like Lu Xun back then.If there were idlers like Lin and Zhou at that time, the consequences would be unimaginable.

Some people may say, now that the world is peaceful, can we be less busy?I disagree.Ouyang Xiuyun: "Worry and labor can rejuvenate the country, and Yiyu can perish. It is a natural principle." If we have achieved this point in front of us, we will relax and think that "the golden soup is solid, the golden city is thousands of miles, and the success of the descendants and emperors will last forever." , then it will be too late to be busy at the end.

But I would like to add this: being busy is a means to life, not an end in life.Don't be too busy, being busy doesn't mean giving up all your leisure time.In some big cities—such as Tokyo, Japan, people work day and night. According to statistics, each person works an average of more than ten hours a day (excluding after get off work). Does this mean that their living standards will definitely be improved?I'm afraid not necessarily.There, the incidence of depression and mental illness is high, so busyness must be moderate.

Please be busy!It's fun to be a "rich and idle person", but if everyone is idle and no one is busy with work, how can it be done?In short, in times of crisis, you must be busy; in times of peace, you must not slack off and relax.You should be busy without overdoing it, right?
score review
This article uses the "rich and idle person" mentioned by Baochai to Baoyu as an introduction, and the main idea of ​​this article is drawn out of Sister Feng's busyness. accumulation.The article has a clear idea. First, it uses a comparative method to explain that people with lofty ideals must be busy when the nation is in peril;The structure of the article is rigorous, showing the maturity of the author's writing skills.

busy, exhilarating
(a candidate from Shanghai)

Being busy is a step in life. Everyone is busy with different things, but it can't be a waste of time. If you want to be busy, you must be busy and be busy.

Busy is a question mark.Being busy seems simple, but there is a lot of knowledge in it.Being busy is an indispensable part of life, but it is not simple how to be busy and enjoy being busy.Life is like a map. We have been walking on our own map. From time to time, a crossroad appears in front of us. Where should we go? Facing the crossroad where the vertical axis and the horizontal axis intersect, how should we choose?Don't worry, calm down and analyze it. The most important thing is to choose the coordinate axis that suits you.That's what being busy is all about. Only by choosing what you should be busy can you be busy meaningfully.Busy is a question mark, and this question mark always reminds us to be busy meaningfully and enjoy ourselves.

Busy is an ellipsis.The four seasons are regularly alternating between cold and warm, and nature has been constantly busy according to this law, and so have people.Find a goal for yourself, keep busy for the goal, keep this busy, and when the goal has been achieved, then find another goal.Continue this busyness, like an ellipsis, endlessly busy.Turning over the long scroll of history, we can see that Newton is busy with his experiments; Edison is busy thinking; Xu Xiake is busy recording and playing; Lu Xun, the vigor and power of literature, is busy fighting non-stop with his unique sword and gun.Busy is an ellipsis, if you set a goal, keep busy!This kind of busyness will definitely bring out the vivid colors of life.

Busy is an exclamation point.People in the world are busy with their own business, and so is nature.The little bee is busy and rewarded with honey, so what about people?Madame Curie's work was completed with the discovery of radioactive elements; Einstein's work was marked with an exclamation mark with the advent of the theory of relativity; Zhang Heng's busyness made the world admire him because of the birth of the seismograph.Everyone should be productively busy, instead of being idle all day long.Life is limited and short.Therefore, everyone should be busy with his own exclamation mark in his limited life, and he should be busy with a wonderful chapter of his life in his limited life.

Busyness is an indispensable part of everything, the world, and life.The earth is busy turning day and night, time is busy passing day and night, and what about us?As the most advanced animals in this world, what are we busy with?We must be busy to be meaningful and valuable, and we must be busy to produce our own splendor.Our favor cannot always be a question mark, but an ellipsis and an exclamation point.To be busy is to be very busy, and to be very busy.

score review
The article closely follows the word "busy" and connects "busy" with "joy". place.In the process of elucidation, the idea is relatively new and ingenious, and three kinds of symbolic punctuation marks are used as the discussion level of the central point of view, which is both vivid and simple, so as to push the elucidation of the topic to a deeper level.

busy busy busy nai ruohe

(a candidate from Shanghai)

I staggered forward with my luggage on my back, on the road of life.Sometimes, when I look up at the front, it is the same back as me: silent and busy.However, what is the difference between before and after?
A wise man is busy thinking, a fool is busy talking, a businessman is busy making a profit, and a doctor is busy saving people.Being busy is just a process, not a result.What is the result?
Many people have no time to think because they are too busy.I was so busy that I forgot the green grass where I caught crickets when I was a child, and I was so busy that I had no chance to quietly smell the fragrance of tea.When Tian Ran slipped away in their hearts, he didn't look back, only flashy and ostentatious.

Even, it was too late to regret.

I always think that something is missing where I live.

I saw the bustling subway, people getting off and getting on with deadpan faces; I heard the children who were much younger than me talking about who was richer; I smelled the smell of the city, tobacco, air conditioning, sweat; I felt Everyone's pulse beats the same, busy and fast.

Complying with the busyness, fast food came into being.On the other hand, spiritual fast food has also emerged in due course.

We can never read Qian Zhongshu and Tolstoy like we read comics, so, in this busy era, they hide behind the stage.Baby Anne, Jin Yong, and Qiong Yao have become very popular. From hard-edged books to movies and TV with huge investment, this fast food is delicious and convenient, so it is naturally very popular.It's just that "slow" meals like "Notre Dame de Paris" and "Red and Black" can only have to be covered with dust.How many people will read Sturm again and think of the silver shimmering Immensee?

The characteristic of modern people is that they are busy, and it is impossible to touch such a collection of calligraphy. Even the pen holder has been replaced by the computer keyboard, and the printed characters without beauty have replaced the smart and flying Chinese characters that have been passed down for thousands of years.Efficiency has been greatly improved, but is this luck or sorrow?
Busyness makes our society develop rapidly, and busyness also makes our hearts have nowhere to fall back on.The simple human feelings in the past are becoming weak, the classics in the past are being forgotten, and the feeling of savoring and appreciating the beauty of famous artists has become a luxury. The cans are high above.

Maybe I haven't been lying on the green grass under the tree for a long time, and there are signs that no trampling is placed in the green space in the park, but I don't have time to go to the countryside to feel the real nature.

Busy busy Xi Nairuohe.

Many people are already too busy to know they are busy.Career and academic success became the only pursuit, so that they had no time to appreciate the beautiful scenery along the way.

How much I wish I could get on the train of life, holding fragrant tea, looking at the mountains and rivers outside the window, my busy blood is still flowing, but my heart can return to the leisurely time before.

score review
The title of the article is brilliant, and the focus of the full text is on the word "naihe". It is not only a feeling of dissatisfaction with various social phenomena that are "busy" for the sake of profit, but also a criticism of the negative effects of "busyness". a warning.The intention is deep, which shows the examinee's ability to observe and think about the surrounding life in daily study.

(End of this chapter)