College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 89 Tolerance (1)
(2004 Beijing volume)

composition test questions
Write an article on the topic of "inclusiveness".

[Notice]

① "Tolerance" means tolerance, generosity, indifference, and tolerance, and it also means to accommodate and accept different opinions.If this question is written from only one aspect, it is also fine. ②Except for poetry, there is no limit to the style of writing. ③ No less than 800 words.

Question Analysis
The 2004 Beijing college entrance examination composition question is a very open proposition composition.The proponent has already defined the connotation of "tolerance": "tolerance" means tolerance, magnanimity, indifference, and generosity, as well as the meaning of accommodating and accepting different opinions.Therefore, the focus of this question lies in the examinee's ability to choose appropriate and novel materials to explain the proposition.When writing an argumentative essay style, you can examine the level, selection and depth of the students' discourse.Writing a narrative is a bigger test for candidates. Candidates tend to fall into the situation of mediocre selection of materials. It is a big challenge for candidates to write brilliantly.Therefore, it is easy to choose an argumentative essay style for this question. Argumentative essays can be talked about in ancient and modern China and abroad.In terms of material selection, candidates can stand at the height of history and select classic examples in history, or they can look to the future and select materials from the perspective of today's world.In modern society, "tolerance" has become the need of social development, and many hot styles of social life are related to it.Candidates only need to combine their own situation and choose a familiar style and subject matter that suits them.

Writing Ideas Tips
When conceiving specific ideas, candidates can start from their own life experiences, search for social phenomena in memory and examples from reading, and then choose a certain angle to cut into the topic, analyze the benefits of tolerance, and further point out that being able to be tolerant is a person with morality , A cultivated performance.Questions can also be conceived from the perspectives of culture, genre, style, ethnic group or even country.

For high school graduates, topics like "inclusion" should have a lot of content to write about, and many angles to choose from.For example, "tolerate other people's minor faults", "be considerate of others, don't care about everything", "don't be petty", "seek common ground while reserving minor differences", "tolerance is the only way to have diversity", etc., are all good ideas.

Full score sample essay
Inclusive
(Candidate No. [-] in Beijing)

After a lapse of 17 years, the "17-year cicada" in the United States jumped on the branches again and sang loudly.People may not be able to bear this sudden restlessness.And one critic once said: "Who can stop these lives who have waited for 17 years in the dark to sing for life in the sun?"

一
When: During the Vietnam War

Location: A village in Vietnam
American soldier Jack is a member of the U.S. Marine Corps. Because the United States was caught in the Vietnam War and couldn't extricate himself, Jack has not seen his hometown and relatives for many years.During a patrol, Jack's detachment was raided by the Vietnamese army. Jack left the team due to injuries and was hunted down by the Vietnamese army.Jack fled in a panic under the cover of the jungle, running and lost the road, and in front of him was only a retracted suspension bridge.Jack suddenly felt the panic that his life was about to end.At this time, a sixteen or seventeen-year-old Vietnamese boy appeared on the other side of the suspension bridge. "Raise the gun and force him to put down the drawbridge, you damn vietnamese!" Jack had an idea, but before he raised the gun, the little boy put down the drawbridge.Without time to think, Jack rushed over immediately.He approached the little boy, still holding the gun.The little boy shivered and just said: "I miss you alive!" Jack seemed to see the face of his younger brother praying for himself... After that, Jack was sent back to China because of his injuries. , this song is so sweet in Jack's heart.

two

Time: 2004

Location: a city in Iraq

Jack's son Jerry put on a military uniform and patrolled the land of Iraq. Regardless of his father's anti-war sentiment, he came to this land of war and witnessed the loss of many lives.He gradually couldn't figure out the original intention when he came, and became confused.When he raised his gun and pointed at an Iraqi girl who attacked them, he couldn't pull the trigger. He just remembered what his father told him when he came home.In an instant, the explosion sounded, and Jerry fell into a pool of blood.When Jerry's ashes were delivered to Jack, the 17-year-old cicada sang again, making Jack bitter and tearful.

In the face of life, the 17-year-old cicada sang its incomparable love.Human beings tolerate this kind of "noise" because of their love for life, but human beings themselves have made the most stupid choice-war.Jack learned tolerance for life because of the release of Vietnamese boys, but Jerry lost his life because of tolerance for life: everything originated from war! The 17-year song of the cicada, the song of life, the song of anti-war, and the song of tolerance!

Push aside the dark clouds of war, let tolerance bring peace to life!
score review
Sophisticated thinking is the biggest feature of the article.Candidates passed two short stories: the tolerance of Vietnamese children made Jack a firm anti-war faction; influenced by his father, Jerry couldn't pull the trigger when facing Iraqi girls, but he paid the price of his life for it.The comparison of the two is thought-provoking.The ending is closely related to the title and issued a call, clearly expressing the theme of anti-war.

Inclusive
(Candidate No. [-] in Beijing)

(One)

When I was a child, my mischievousness and willfulness made the whole family helpless, but my mother could always control my naughtiness with stories and suppress my willfulness with lullabies.

It is often said that a mother's love can contain everything.My mother used her love to contain my naughty, willful, and everything about me.

Tolerance means tolerance, magnanimity, indifference, and magnanimity, like a mother's love.

(two)

Jerusalem has the Wailing Wall - the holy site of Judaism.The Jews wept silently and mourned silently for the suffering of their own nation.

Jerusalem has mosques - the homes of Muslims.There they praise their Allah. The verses of the Qur'an resounded through the sky.

There are churches in Jerusalem - Catholic missions.Believers express their piety and gratitude to God here.The choir sang incessantly.

This is the swan song of Jerusalem, the chorus of weeping, chanting and singing.

As the birthplace of the three major religions, Jerusalem miraculously accommodates them.These three different and even sometimes tit-for-tat religions present an incredible harmony here, as if they were natural.Jerusalem is showing us her amazing, incredible tolerance.

Tolerance means to accommodate and accept different opinions, like the swan song of Jerusalem.

(three)

There is such a magical nation in the East.

They are the descendants of the dragon, with dreams of flying into the sky;

They have the same yellow skin, black eyes, the same kindness and aloofness; they are the children of the Yellow River and the descendants of Yanhuang.

They have created a miraculous culture, broad and endless, capable of embracing all rivers and embracing everything.

This is the Chinese civilization - "inclusive" civilization.

There have been frequent "foreign races" invading here, domineering, threatening to subvert the culture here and rewrite the civilization here.

However, they were accepted here tolerantly and did not care about them.And digest them slowly and tolerate them.Turn them into your own nutrition, and add a strange and magnificent touch to yourself.

Invasion again and again, domineering again and again, digestion and tolerance again and again... Not only has this place not been subverted, but it has become more plump and strange, with flesh and blood.

This is the power of Chinese civilization - the power of tolerance.

Relying on their extraordinary capacity for tolerance, the descendants of China endured hardships and sufferings, shouldered humiliation, and marched forward unyieldingly, so there was China, the sons and daughters of China swaggered forward, and the moment of flying to the sky to realize their dreams.

Relying on the extraordinary ability of tolerance, the Chinese nation will "peacefully rise", and people are exclaiming "Beijing Consensus"!
China's tolerance creates a miracle in the world.

(four)

Inclusive, like a mother;

tolerance, like poetry;

Inclusive, can witness;
Tolerance can make dreams come true.

"Inclusive", inclusive of everything...

score review
In the form of subtitles, the student subtly expressed the rich connotation of tolerance: tolerance, generosity, carelessness, and generosity, like a mother's love; tolerance and acceptance of different opinions, like the rhyme of Jerusalem.Tolerance creates miracles in the world.The structure of the article is novel, the form is scattered but the spirit is not scattered, and the language is beautiful, which is a masterpiece in the examination room.

Inclusive
(Candidate No. [-] in Beijing)

In the early morning, the sun shines softly on the bedroom floor through the curtains. The kind curtains do not block the sun, but let it in tolerantly.The tank of goldfish on the window sill is swimming happily, thanks to the sunshine.I poured a bag of small fish I just bought into the fish tank, and the "old residents" and "new friends" touched each other's tails as acquiescence. I suddenly felt that tolerance made the whole world so harmonious.

In the bright sunshine, I was about to paint with colors. When I squeezed the red and yellow pigments together and mixed them thoroughly, the two pigments abandoned their old colors and appeared on the palette as a common orange.Red is no longer "open teeth and claws", it absorbs the gentleness of yellow and gives up its own toughness; yellow is no longer "aggressive", actively absorbs the brilliance of red, and hides its own light: the newly produced orange is exactly Because of the mutual tolerance of red and yellow, it becomes both gentle and bright, without losing the eye-catching red and the bright yellow.It seems that red and yellow haven't completely disappeared, they just hide some of their own shortcomings and tolerate each other.

Tolerance is needed in life.We cannot blindly express ourselves, or even exclude others. "The strong have their own strong hands", if you want to make continuous progress, it is necessary to accept others humbly and tolerate others generously.

I once read a philosophical essay about a deaf-mute child who tried to learn English by turning on the tape recorder very loudly, which caused dissatisfaction from the neighbors at first.Gradually, the neighbors tolerated that poor and brave child, because not every child has the courage to start over after suffering from an illness, and not every disabled child can be met and tolerated, why not try our best to Do you understand the one around you?He is also one of the objects of your tolerance.

(End of this chapter)