College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 95 The Raven and the Eagle (2)
My dear friend, not all birds can sing, not all flowers can bear fruit, not all seedlings can grow into trees, not all soils can grow crops, Not all roles are suitable for you to play.It is true that a painter is desirable, and a musician is certainly enviable, but, my friend, perhaps, these are not your occupations.I know that you have a strong body, tenacious perseverance, keen eyesight, and a calm mind, all of which determine that you should become a soldier, a scientist, and an entrepreneur.That's where you are.

My dear friend, please don't complain about the injustice of life. You see, the crow no longer blindly wants to be an eagle soaring. It knows that its intelligence should be used to get the spring water at the bottom of the bottle.Look, it succeeded in doing this, this is a clever crow!
Hope to see a brand new you!
The sea laughs
×year×month×day

score review
The novel form is the outstanding feature of this paper.In addition, the theme of the article is prominent, the language is beautiful, the level is tight, and the structure is rigorous.Two letters are equivalent to two parts, the first part raises the question, and the latter part solves the problem.Various rhetorical methods such as metaphor, questioning, duality and repetition are also used in the article.

wonderful words
My dear friend, not all birds can sing, not all flowers can bear fruit, not all seedlings can grow into trees, not all soils can grow crops, Not all roles are suitable for you to play.

give yourself a sky

(a candidate from Henan)

If I were born as a tree, I should be thriving;
If I were born as a secluded grass, I would be luxuriant and green.

If it's grass, don't envy the towering trees, you can still grow into a piece of emerald green; if it's a sparrow, don't envy the eagle's fighting and flying, you can still find happiness among the branches; Don't envy the waves of the sea hitting the shore, you can still flow freely in the mountain stream.As a human being, don't envy others' god-given opportunities, be yourself and give yourself a sky.

Qi Baishi's shrimp and Xu Beihong's horse seem to be an insurmountable mountain in the painting world.If you deliberately imitate, you must learn to walk in Handan.But after Qi Baishi, how many shrimps danced freely in the clear waves of paper; after Xu Beihong, how many horses galloped out of the plain.All we have to do is express ourselves and show our style.If life is a mountainous peak, if you walk your own way, even if you can't climb to the top, you can still experience the beautiful scenery on the way, so why feel sad that you can't reach the top.On the long sandy road in the Sahara, the footprints of Sanmao Wuhui were left behind. Her life is like a smiling well in the yellow sand of thousands of miles; In the beautiful scenery of Sun Moon Lake in Alishan, there was a memory of Lin Qingxuan who had no regrets. His life was like a white cloud flying into the blue sky... Only dare to show yourself, only dare to stand in your own blue sky. Only when the world is flying high, life will shine with dazzling brilliance.

The writer Turgenev once said that it is someone else's business to find out how much you are worth, and the important thing is to be yourself.You are not darker than a star, not lower than a tree, you are born to be useful, others can have the grand plan of "hanging clouds and sails to help the sea", but we can have the beauty of "dark fragrance, floating moon and dusk".The poet said, I am the best wheat on this mound.yes!You don't have to envy the brilliance of others, but bravely show your true self, you are the best.

Maybe there will never be such a football genius on the football field where Maradona was born, but there can still be more unknown players there. Running for the sweat of youth and no regrets; maybe there will never be such a thinker in Plato's Athens Academy, but there are more scholars who work silently there, happy to defend the truth.

Although I have no wings, I still have a clear sky above my head.

score review
Candidates write from the natural world, from things to people, and successively give examples such as Qi Baishi's shrimp, Xu Beihong's horse, Sanmao, Xi Murong, Lin Qingxuan, Maradona, etc., which are interlinked and clarify the purpose of the topic.In addition, the use of rhetoric such as duality and parallelism makes the article eye-catching as soon as it appears, and wins the favor of the marking teacher; at the end, "Although I have no wings, I still have a clear sky above my head", which contains philosophy and is thought-provoking. , and make the article have an intriguing philosophical beauty.

wonderful words
If I were born as a tree, I should be thriving;
If I were born as a secluded grass, I would be luxuriant and green.

Celebrity Quotes
It's someone else's job to find out how much I'm worth.The main thing is to be able to give of yourself. ——[Russia] Turgenev
There will be times when the wind and the waves cleave, hang the clouds and sail straight to the sea. ——Li Bai's "Difficult Journey"

Sparse shadows and slanting water, clear and shallow water, dark fragrance floating in moon dusk. ——Lin Bu's "Small Plum in the Mountain Garden"

classic case
Qi Baishi's shrimp, Xu Beihong's horse, Sanmao, Xi Murong, Lin Qingxuan, Maradona, etc.
What suits you is the best
(A Candidate from Hebei Province)

The eagle hits the sky, the fish flies in the shallow bottom, the tiger roars deep in the mountains, and the hunchback walks in the desert. It is because of the choice of the suitable position that life is created to the extreme; Only by our own way can we create beautiful scenery and wonders; the willow shadows of Diaoyutai, the insect singing of Xishan, the bells of Tanzhe Temple, and the reed flowers by the pond, because of the choice of value, we have achieved a good reputation. Your own way is the best and you can realize your own value.A crow envied the eagle's beautiful movements of swooping down to catch the lamb, and imitated the eagle's movements to practice desperately. After a few days, the crow felt that he had practiced very well, so he swooped down from the tree and pounced on a goat. On its back, it wanted to complete the perfect movements like an eagle. However, its body was too light, its claws were entangled in wool, and its wings were not strong enough to be caught by the shepherd. Not only did it fail to catch the lamb, Instead, someone else took control of his life, and the crow's blind imitation performed a tragedy.

From ancient times to the present, such incidents have emerged endlessly.

There was a toddler in Handan in ancient times. When he saw other people walking gracefully, he took great pains to study and learn from others.As everyone knows, he is not suitable at all. In the end, he not only failed to learn the gait of others, but also forgot his own original gait. Isn't it ridiculous and sad!The ugly Dong Shi wanted to have the face of sinking fish and wild goose, and the face of closed moon and shameful flowers, but he couldn't do anything about it.One day I happened to see Xi Shi holding her heart, her face was uncomfortable, but her expression was very cute, so she imitated Xi Shi and made herself even uglier, and people hated her appearance...

This is still the case in modern society. Without Andy Lau's handsomeness and Leslie Cheung's charm, he insists on putting on a cool pose and cutting his hair, making himself unsightly.What's more, it is even more unbearable to modify yourself with Zhang Hanyun's "Sweet and Sour is me".Because none of them found a way that suits them, they ended up like this in the end.

Taishan is strange, Huashan is dangerous, Huangshan is beautiful, Emei is beautiful, roses are fragrant, and lilies are beautiful, because they choose the one that suits them. You have hibiscus like faces and willows like eyebrows. It is Xiaojiabiyu, who is also beautiful; you gallop in the political arena, Yuema shopping mall, I play piano, chess, calligraphy and painting, and the world is amazing... We are each a beautiful landscape. Only by finding the one that suits us can we become the best of ourselves.

score review
The article is brilliant, expressive, with a wide selection of materials, combining ancient and modern times, making good use of parallelism and duality, the structure is in harmony with each other, and the transition is natural. The article has a topic at the end-the one that suits you is the best, so that the article structure is complete. The ending is powerful, and it can be called a masterpiece in the examination room.

wonderful words
The eagle hits the sky, the fish flies in the shallow bottom, the tiger roars deep in the mountains, and the hunchback walks in the desert. It is because of the choice of the suitable position that life is created to the extreme; Only in your own way can you create a beautiful landscape.

classic case
Learning to walk in Handan, imitating Dong Shi, etc.
做 真正 的 自我
(a candidate from Henan)

Even if the secular wall blocks your great pride, it cannot stop your sonorous steps.To be the true self is Tao Qian's five-dou poetry soul; even if the heavy night covers your starry sky, it can't stop the light in your heart.To be the true self is Wen Tianxiang's swan song alone; even if the barriers of time block your strong body, it cannot stop your loyal belief.To be the real self is Qu Ping's Lisao in the water.

Wudou Poetry Soul
Picking chrysanthemums under the eastern fence, leisurely seeing Nanshan.With the ups and downs, the flowing clouds came to the beautiful peach blossom garden; the wind and rain came to the quiet mountain stream with the longing; Bow down, you give up the filthy world and the glory and wealth, just to be your true self and stay away from the intriguing officialdom.On the bank of the river, beside the chrysanthemums, you are in the midst of it, this is elegant and free, this is freedom.

Hurry up!To be the real self is Tao Qian's five-dou poetry soul.

solo swan song
No one has died in life since ancient times.

The infinite indignation and sorrow of the fall of the country's rivers and mountains, the former prosperous palace has long been turned into ruins, and you are like a lonely cloud in the sky with nowhere to go.The rivers and mountains are still the same for thousands of miles. When you look down and look back, you can see people displaced and bones everywhere, and infinite sentimentality wells up in your heart.But if you are your true self, you would rather die than surrender, and your line of tears will become the eternal swan song in the lonely ocean.

nice!To be the true self is Wen Tianxiang's swan song alone.

Lisao in the water
The whole world is turbid and I am pure alone; everyone is drunk and I am alone awake.

Memories flow along the Miluo River, through the Spring and Autumn Period, and across the Warring States Period. When Qin conquered Yingdu, you were extremely sad and indignant. In the sigh, in the cry, in the grief, although you were burdened with too much helplessness and bitterness, but Be your true self and express your loyalty to the motherland and noble character with your life.

Sad!To be the real self is Qu Ping's Lisao in the water.

A ray of fragrance, a free and easy, true self, showing nobility and arrogance, that is Tao Qian's five fighting poetic spirit!

A river of spring water and an elegy, be your true self, full of rivers and oceans, that is Wen Tianxiang's swan song alone!
A page of history and a mirror, to be the true self, to show rationality and loyalty, that is Qu Ping's Lisao in the water!

score review
The article is well-conceived and brilliantly written.The opening sentence summarizes the full text, and the main body is elaborated in the form of three subheadings, echoing from the beginning to the end, and the structure is rigorous.The use of rhetorical techniques such as parallelism and personification shows talent and literary talent.

wonderful words
Flowing clouds came to the beautiful Peach Blossom Spring accompanied by ups and downs; wind and rain came to the quiet mountain stream with longing; red light shone through the clouds and mist and shone on the mountain villages and alleys of the Jin Dynasty...

The infinite indignation and sorrow of the fall of the country's rivers and mountains, the former prosperous palace has long been turned into ruins, and you are like a lonely cloud in the sky with nowhere to go.

Celebrity Quotes
Picking chrysanthemums under the eastern fence, leisurely seeing Nanshan. —— Tao Yuanming
Since ancient times, no one has died in life, and he has kept his heart to reflect the history. ——Wen Tianxiang The whole world is turbid and I am pure alone; everyone is drunk but I am sober alone. —— Qu Yuan

classic case
Tao Yuanming, Wen Tianxiang, Qu Yuan

two flowers

(A Candidate from Hebei Province)

There is a flower in the garden.The reason why it is called a flower is because it is a tall locust tree, standing tall and big under the blue sky, opening up a piece of heaven and earth refreshingly.The fog in the morning is too thick, and the flowers hug and squeeze each other.The scent of the flowers is too strong, turning into a rich white, and then soaked in the clear wind, strands and strands, hanging down in a loose and orderly manner, tinkling and shaking into thin wind chimes in the sun.

Such beautiful flowers arouse the joy and yearning of how many children every March.

However, my little cousin Lele said: "I want to plant a flower too."

"What kind of flowers does Lele want to plant?" I teased her.

After looking around the courtyard, she pointed to a dusty flower pot in the corner and said, "Here, that's it."

When I saw it, I almost fell down laughing.It was a pot of half-dead asparagus bamboo, which was abandoned by my mother.Not to mention the thin and soft stems, trivial and tiny leaves and weak spirit, whether a single asparagus can bloom is enough for my little cousin to ponder.

"Impossible. You have to know that asparagus is asparagus, and locust tree is locust tree. Asparagus will never become a flower."

Lele kept a stern face and kept silent, huffing and wheezing all by herself to move it into his "sphere of influence".

From then on, there are enchanting locust trees outside the window, and sick asparagus bamboo inside the window.

Spring has passed.The poplars are leaning, the grass is green, the paper kites are fluttering, and the children are laughing.Only my little cousin makes a plan for growing flowers, strictly implements it, and will never be lazy.

Summer is over.There are bursts of lotus fragrance, insects singing, flowers blooming everywhere, branches and leaves are lush.There is only my little cousin who loves and protects the flowers, loosens the soil and waters them.

Autumn passed.The autumn wind is rustling, the fallen leaves are layer upon layer, the fruits are numerous, and the aroma of rice is alluring.Only my little cousin talked to flowers and became crazy about flowers.

Winter is over.The snow is covered, the Qiongzhi trees, everything is silent, and the family gathers happily.There is only my little cousin, sitting opposite the flowers and accompanying each other.

It's spring again.Lele's flowers did not grow, but she fell ill.The second mother said to me: "Really, what kind of Laoshizi flower do you raise? If asparagus bamboo can grow into flowers, isn't it a joke?" Speechless.When I went to see her, it was the March when the pagoda trees were in full bloom.I was afraid that she would be sad, so I wanted to close the curtain.She shouted: "Don't pull it, sister, go and bring me my asparagus."

She pointed to asparagus bamboo and said, "Isn't it pretty, my flower?" I thought to myself, how can there be any flowers?Could it be that he was burned out?She pointed to the tip of the newly sprouted bud and said, "Isn't this a flower?" I saw that the tip of the stem was about to open, as if it hadn't bloomed yet, and a trace of green came out from the center—is it really a flower?It's really a flower!My eyes became hot, and I hugged her and said, "It's a flower, asparagus and pagoda tree, they are two equally beautiful flowers."

Inside and outside the window, a dark fragrance floats.

score review
During the tight exam time, it is very rare for candidates to be able to write such beautiful and elegant prose calmly and unhurriedly within the tight and limited exam time.Although the article does not clearly point out the materials of the test questions, it is not difficult to find that the candidates internally buckle the meaning of the materials, and vividly show the story of a little girl who is persistent in planting flowers (asparagus).In addition, the fresh and fluent language and the use of a large number of redundancies are also a highlight of this article.

wonderful words
The fog in the morning is too thick, and the flowers hug and squeeze each other.The scent of the flowers is too strong, turning into a rich white, and then soaked in the clear wind, strands and strands, hanging down in a loose and orderly manner, tinkling and shaking into thin wind chimes in the sun.

(End of this chapter)