Mana: Before The Rise

➤ Story Evaluations

World: Tell No Lies.

Task: Evaluate the Message the Story is trying to Convey.

Genre: Female-Protagonist, Tragedy

Difficulty: ★★★

Synopsis: She was r.a.p.ed, but no believed her and this is Her story.

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The Story is considerable a Sad one, Telling the tale of a young teenage girl fighting against the demons the hunt everyday life. Her parents cared but didn't trust her words just like her close friend that also couldn't believe her.

How that must have hurt.

When she was already struggling with Trust issues, she was left to judgement of society. She could not take the pressure. In the original version the female leads just claimed suicide due to depression. As and evaluator I Saw fit to change the reason for death to something more complicated then a teen buckling under pressure and thus committing suicide due to send a message.

The Message should have been sharper and attack real problems not just, 'Oh' society failed her, so she died.

The original Message, meant to say the Society has failed this person and wanted to spread awareness about its failures. Saying we failed to protect a teenage girl. Everything about the story pointed to such a truth. Which honestly isn't bad, but, just makes things so much worse due to the character and female herself not finding any type of conclusion other then to die.

Now the message changed, due to the female leads reason to kill herself. It is saying since society had failed, she had chosen death because society is not worth her time. Her dreams where proof of the change and it gave people to think about. That she had taken her life not because of society but because of her weak self that she found in Faith Ward.

A Weak Self wanted to get rid of to spread her wings, Faith Ward was holding her back. It was not her hate for society that killed her but it nor her fear of it, it was Faith herself. Most would consider death would be her running away from her problems.

But, no that's not its Faith accepted her problems in reality, she didn't run from them. Although she did not solve them either. Reality is not any better than a dream nor is it any different. People can choose where they want to be regardless of where that is.

It can be said that in death the Female lead freed herself from her cages.

Evaluation Points:

Story: ★★★

Characters: ★★

Setting: ★★

Plot: ★★★★

Rating: ★

Ending Comments: None.