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"Yes." The guy didn't seem to choose to spy on himself.

The moment she was lying on the bed and thinking about it, she had been thinking about the problems that bothered her during the week of study, and the problem of shame made her a little absent-minded.

Rather than being unable to face it, it is better to say it is my real method.

Even though she maintained her superficial daily conversation, the girl's reserve made it impossible for her to treat each other the same way as before.

Besides, the other party was originally a hacker who monitored her for half a month. Although it was not malicious, it also brought her great trouble.

Having a wonderful encounter with such a person may also cause your heart to be moved for a moment because of the previous behavior.

Was it a bit too casual when I got an electric shock from looking at each other...

It's so annoying.

"Are you free to come over? Or I will find you."

"No, ╭(╯^╰)╮I'm very tired from studying this week, and I want to take a break. Is there anything urgent?"

"Well, about writing novels. I'll send you the manuscript for reading!" After sending the message, Weston directly sent【Eternal Tribulation of ReincarnationのThe Great Magister New Edition.docx】to the other party.

Less than three seconds later, the message [The other party has received the file] appeared on the computer.

She clicked on the manuscript file in an instant, and the world on the computer opened. She sat up from the bed and began to read it seriously.

"A black-haired young man in a deacon's uniform...that's me..."

From the first [-] episodes, it was okay. The standard mode of traveling through different worlds was funny and nonsensical at the beginning, without any connotation.

But after [-] sessions, the painting style began to change suddenly.

What is the main god planning, the protagonist of the family is opposed to the main god of the family.

"Is this a conflict?" The setting is not good. Since God is already invincible in this world, defeating will also give people an unscientific feeling. It is better to set a powerful adventurer as the villain .

After the [-]th quarter, the elf teacher appeared, and the loop continued endlessly.

Instantly messed up.

"Isn't the protagonist too paranoid?" The message sent to Weston by Setsu could not be read any further.

Leaving aside the writing style, the setting of the plot alone did not meet her reading taste at all.

"How do you understand my feelings! When your life is not guaranteed, isn't it human instinct to become stronger? Get the hell out of me, all morals and ethics." Weston replied dissatisfied.

moment:"……"

Isn't this guy obsessed with writing novels?

And even if that's the case, if you want to be paranoid, you have to be more paranoid. What's wrong with the last round of choosing to pick up the elf teacher?Was all previous efforts an illusion?

"Read it carefully."

"Oh." Setsuna suppressed the thought of being poisoned, from the [-]th festival to the subsequent battle on the [-]th floor, returning to the arrest, the main god teased again, the protagonist was finally forced to rebel, and the woman in the BOSS military uniform finally appeared.

At the end of reading, Setsuna took a deep breath.

Rao, who has always been weak, couldn't help complaining.

"You set the woman in military uniform too strong, right? The protagonist can't kill the other party at all, and he doesn't want to let the other party go. This is obviously plot killing." Setsuna expresses his dissatisfaction from the reader's point of view.

Weston stood on the author's side: "How superficial your thinking is, such a setting makes the second volume possible."

"I think publishing the first volume will be cut in half. The battle of the final boss was originally based on a hot-blooded routine. The protagonist and the goddess defeated before teamed up to defeat the explosive ending of the final boss. This is in line with the reading experience of the public!"

"Do you have any suggestions?" Weston said guiltily.

"You made the appearance of the woman in military uniform so ironic that readers were very upset, but you should have defeated her to make readers feel refreshed. If you have watched "Attack on Titan", you should know the villains in it Every time the giant eats people, it turns the main character into a desperate situation and transforms into a carefree fight. This can also turn all the depression that had been foreshadowed before into the refreshment after release.

But you just set the military uniform Ji as a former companion, and finally forced her to die, so that even if you defeat her, you can’t find any happy feeling, and the previous unpleasant feeling will only keep the reader from releasing it. The depression, and finally abandon the book after spraying you.

There is also a very problematic ending. The identity of the protagonist is still not finished in the end, and ambiguous words will only make people feel confused!No matter what you plan to pave the way for, if you don't get the attention of others in the front, will anyone watch it in the end? "

Weston: "..."

Chapter 23 new

After the girl was forcibly fed poison, the sharp words she made made Weston speechless.

He has already erased the deliberate words about the leader last time, it was just a very vague expression, isn't that okay?

"A novel like yours will either take the line of chess players whose blood is king in the first [-] chapters, or it can only follow the rational school. But if you follow the rational school, you still want to be as funny as the blood comics, giving readers a feeling of neurosis. "

"I am like this, I can't change it!"

Setsuna:【O__O "…】

Set moment was a little speechless, obviously the other party sent the novel for her to evaluate, so she just followed the reader's idea and said there was something wrong?

And why does he treat the protagonist of his book as himself, which is strange in itself.

"Why don't you just come over and directly guide me how to write." Weston sent another message.

When Shu Mo saw this news, his expression suddenly became strange.

What this person has been saying all this time is not just for the foreshadowing of this sentence, is it?

He still had the idea of ​​wanting to tear himself down, this guy was very bad, he knew his predicament but pretended not to know.