How to Develop a Sick Brother Control

The black cat straightened up a little bit and looked at Kazuya intently.

"This, first of all, let's talk about the problem that you haven't won any newcomer award. I think this is really normal, because you can't reach the level of the newcomer award. By the way, I have been to the fantastic library newcomer award submission. In the last round, I finally failed in a one-on-one competition, so I can tell you responsibly that your work is likely to be brushed down in the first round."

"If it's the novels I created before that are not secondary creations, there is still a chance. There aren't so many additional settings that don't match the original..."

The black cat pursed his lips and argued.

"It's not that this work of yours is a second creation!

Of course, it is indeed a problem that you have too many settings. Not to mention your secondary creation settings that do not match the original work, your own setting draft is too long!

When the setting draft accounts for half of the full text, how can you make readers interested in reading your article? Yes, the routines and plots of the current battle novels are basically the same, the only difference is the setting.

But your setting is too blunt. It takes half a book to introduce the fighting method and content, instead of trying to integrate the setting into the plot more effectively. This is too blunt. "

"If this is the case, I understand, I can modify it, and I have already thought of some paragraphs that can better combine the setting with the plot, and it is not the case that half a book of settings is required every time. ."

The black cat's face became a little red, and some tears seemed to be flashing in her eyes, but she finally suppressed her sadness and tried her best to explain all this to Heya.

"Although this is the case, but the editor can't see what you think, and readers will not buy this kind of thing so much, let's take your setting as an example, many of your settings are meaningless. The setting, 'the power of darkness' or something, has appeared so many times in the novel, but I still don't understand what it is. I feel that the sense of existence is not as good as your usual, ah no, those middle two just now. The presence of words is high.”

Kazuya covered his mouth, realizing that he had made a slip of the tongue.

However, the emotional black cat did not notice these details:

"The question of 'The Power of Darkness' is very important, this is a very important foreshadowing, you know that I haven't finished it yet!

It can be said that it is a very core setting in this worldview created by me. If there is no 'power of darkness', you will find that the context cannot be taken care of at all. "

"I understand what you think, but that doesn't change the fact that in the articles so far, 'power of darkness' is just a meaningless gimmicky term, if you really think it's so important, you too Without hinting or writing about its importance..."

"So the key is the full text!

How can you draw conclusions without reading the full text? "

The black cat said righteously, and at the same time expressed his dissatisfaction with Kazuya,

"It's better not to listen to your prejudice caused by taking it out of context. How could Senior Kashiwagi ask you to comment on my doujinshi?"

"Okay, young lady, let me break your fantasy!"

Hearing the harsh words of the black cat because he was in a hurry, Kazuya smiled,

"I just spoke politely!

Now let me tell you, your novel is a 'wow that sucks' novel, a novel that is completely immersed in personal fantasy and self-beautiful YY, okay?

You keep telling me to read the full text, but will the editor have the patience to read your article and then make an evaluation?

Will readers be interested in reading the full text before deciding whether to buy your book?

So little guy, don’t tell me the full text, the full text is just a false proposition, even if your setting is carefully done and the foreshadowing is ingeniously buried, it will be useless if you can’t attract readers to read it. If your work is written well enough , can attract readers to continue reading, then your works are full of foreshadowing.

I don’t know if you have read "Love Metronome" by Teacher Xia Shizi. The first sentence of Chapter 1 in the first volume can attract people. In the end, her unexpected Zhenwei ending was attracted by many Zhenwei fans. The foreshadowing was found in the first volume, but at that time Zhenwei had not yet appeared.

Teacher Xia Shizi's choice to be photographed in "Metronome in Love" is that the ending may be the idea of ​​that moment, but it can be considered by fans as deliberately set a long time ago. This is called a good novel and can attract fans themselves Go digging instead of asking fans to wait for their own set! "

Looking at the black cat who was a little confused by what he said, Kazuya said:

"And what about your novel?

What about your comics?

It's self-talk from start to finish, self-satisfaction, 'Dark' resurrection is normal, you like this character, and then you add a prophet setting to it, it's okay, but please, boy, is it reasonable?

Don't hang up the original protagonist at will because of the prophet!

If you are entertaining yourself, it doesn't matter what you show yourself, but since you want to publish, since you want readers, and since you want to sell it, you should consider the basic feelings of other people, okay? "

The black cat stared at Kazuya blankly, unable to speak for a long time, the fist that had been tightly clenched before has been loosened, and the high-spirited look just now has disappeared. That kind of sad look and bewildered expression.

"Uh, this, sorry, I went too far."

He also realized that his emotions were a little too excited by the black cat just now. At this moment, as a counselor and senior, he was also a little irrational, which was really inappropriate.

"Probably this is the mode of preaching that I'm too self-righteous to do in the future?"

Looking at the black cat who was about to cry, Kazuya scratched his head with a headache, and said good things:

"Hey, how do you say this, there are also bright spots in your novel!

At least in terms of characterization, it is quite good. The template with a character looks like Kirino. Although I always feel that her ending may be tragic, the characterization is quite successful. If you can learn more from the people around you Characters, it would be good to portray more similar characters. After all, the characters that leave the deepest impression on many novels are the characters!

If the characters are brilliant, interesting plots will naturally appear, that..."

However, this time the black cat seemed to have been hit too hard, and the low sobbing sound was very obvious, and Kazuya's words seemed to have no effect either.

At this time, Kirino and Kato, who were watching the conversation between the two, finally realized this abnormality.

Chapter 93: The best way to encourage people is to...

"You made the darkness cry?"

Tong Nai covered her mouth in surprise, and after a brief period of surprise, she aggressively spoke to Kazuya,

"Hey, why did you make this guy cry!

Although she is very annoying, self-righteous and vicious, but why don't you show any sympathy when you talk to girls?

It sucks! "

Kazuya opened his mouth, and finally lowered his head weakly:

"Well, I expected Tong Nao to at least maintain a neutral attitude. I didn't expect this guy to pay more attention to Jiyou. The relationship between my friend's brother and ordinary housemates can only reach this level!"

"At least Kato won't embarrass me."

Out of the corner of Kazuya's eyes, he looked at Kato Megumi, who didn't seem to be planning to speak. However, noticing Kazuya's eyes, Kato said something to Kazuya with a mouth shape.

"I'll take a look, what Kato said, Xin-gaki-same-learn-to-girl-child-child-get-crying-, it's really-yes-worse- - Jin - oh!

What? "

Kato rolled her eyes as she looked at the words that seemed to be out of the mouth of Kato Megumi who was smiling.

"Well, it seems so, I'm just that bad,"

Looking at the other side, Kirino is a little embarrassed but still sincerely comforting the black cat who is sobbing, and Kazuya is thinking about some other things,

"By the way, what did Jingsuke do when faced with the same situation at that time, yes, at that time, the black cat was criticized in a mess by the editor introduced by Saori, and Jingsuke was there to protect the black cat, no matter what happened. Only those who always stand on the side of the girls can be queens - palace kings, and are qualified to be card-issuing madmen.

Look at you scumbag, not only did you not take this opportunity to improve your favorability, but instead criticized the black cat and cried like the editor at that time, so it is your personality that makes your relationship with all kinds of girls so stiff what! "

With a wry smile, he laughed at himself, looking at the black cat on the other side, who was wiping the tears from the corners of his eyes with the encouragement of Kirino. Kazuya tilted his head and walked over with heavy steps.

"What are you doing here again?

Still want to teach black cats a lesson?

I don't know what you said just now, but no matter what you said, you are at least an elder, you are at least a boy, why can't you be gentle with her? "

Looking at Kazuya who came over with a dignified face, Tong Nao blocked the black cat behind him in a protective manner, and said aggressively to Kazuya,

"Let's talk about it first, I'm not defending this darkness, I just think your attitude towards girls is really bad, I still remember the scene when you exposed my otaku identity in front of me. , you really can't use your brains!

Anyway, I mean, uh, I'm not afraid of you, if you continue to teach the black cat a lesson, I'll tell Ayase! "

Looking at Kirino, who looked like a hen in front of her, and the black cat who looked surprised and embarrassed behind her, Kazuya sighed heavily and said:

"It's not like this, I'm here to apologize, I did go too far!"

"There's no need to apologize."

Without waiting for Tong Nai to speak, the black cat who was blocked by Tong Nai, took the lead and muttered,

"Although the evaluation is very sharp, although it is very harsh to me, and although I am really unwilling, but I thought about it just now, what Senior Aragaki said is correct, I think if an editor is in front of me, he may Say something harsher!

I do have a lot of shortcomings, and I also know that Aragaki-senpai is not malicious. "

"Uh, this..."

He, who was about to apologize, also heard what the black cat said, and seemed a little embarrassed, not knowing what to do.

"This girl is really inexplicably reasonable at this time!"

"Hey, what are you talking about, what evaluation, editing, etc.?"

Tong Nao looked at the two of them and asked vaguely.

"It's my novel!

If you don't know, don't stand in front of me, really, just like that, I thought we two were good friends! "

Facing Tong Nao, Black Cat's cautious attitude was obviously relaxed, and the words of poisonous tongue blurted out.

"What does it mean to be a good friend, I didn't treat you as a friend!

Speaking of novels, uh, are you talking about novels that you wrote? "

Tong Nai was obviously stunned for a moment.

"Right, maschera's doujinshi, how can you guys understand it, you are not qualified to read it, only those who are allowed by me or approved by Kashiwagi-senpai can read it!"

The black cat raised his eyebrows triumphantly and said.

"Oh, you said that thing!"

Tong Nao's eyes drooped down, as if he had been holding back a smile.

"What is 'that thing'!"

"So just now and also criticizing you for that thing about you?"

Tong Nao raised his head and narrowed his eyes.

"Explain what is 'that thing'?

Just like you have seen it, you are not qualified to evaluate if you have not seen it! "

Looking at Tong Nao's obviously smirking expression, the black cat finally realized that something was wrong with the other party.

Finally, Kirino couldn't hold back the excitement of victory in his heart, and laughed heavily, waving his hands and stamping his feet on the ground:

"Ahahaha, it turned out to be that thing, it turned out to be that work, I thought you would keep it as a treasure!