College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 17 Carving the Angel in My Heart (1)
(Guangdong volume in 2006)

composition test questions
Read the text below, according to what the article says.

A sculptor carves knife by knife from an unfinished block of marble, while a young boy watches him curiously.

The statue gradually took shape, head, shoulders, arms, body, and then hair, eyes, nose, mouth... a cute little girl appeared in front of her.

The little boy was very surprised and asked the sculptor: "How do you know she is hidden in it?"

The sculptor laughed and told the child: "There was nothing in the stone, but I moved the angel in my heart here with a carving knife."

[Notice]

Please write an article of no less than 800 words on the topic of "carving an angel in your heart".The title is drawn up by oneself, the title of the article is chosen by oneself (except poetry), and the content written must be within the scope of the topic.

Question Analysis
Different from the 2005 college entrance examination composition questions in Guangdong Province, the 2006 composition questions consist of three parts: quoted materials, topics and composition requirements.The topic is a figurative topic composition with a verb-object structure.How should we understand the metaphorical meaning of "carving the angel in the heart"?According to the materials, the understanding of "carving" can have four meanings. 1. "Sculpture" refers to means, methods and actions.The sculptor in the material transforms the ideas in his heart into tangible, visible and visible statues through carving.Based on this, we can extract the following philosophy: To convert the angel in our hearts into an actual angel, we need methods, and more importantly, practical actions. 2. "Carving" has a shaping process.The materials say that the sculptor "carves with one knife at a time" and the statue is "gradually formed".Based on this, we can extract such a philosophy: it takes a process to carve the angel in our hearts, and it needs to be carved step by step. 3. Carving is to remove the non-angel part of the marble. Therefore, carving also has the meaning of removing the rough and selecting the essence, removing the evil and promoting the good, so as to continuously improve. 4. The sculptor first has an angel in his heart, and then moves the angel in his heart to the stone one by one.Therefore, "carving" also means to do something with heart, care, patience, and painstaking efforts.Understanding "carving" apart from materials can be extended to: realization, establishment, growth, practice, and so on.As for the understanding of "heart", it can be the examinee's heart, someone's heart in the text, or, in an article, the destination of "heart" is constantly changing, which is in line with the meaning of the question.Understand "angels" based on materials, "angels" refer to cute little girls, and are extended to cute and beautiful people, things, and things.Do not understand "angels" based on materials, then "angels" are messengers who spread the gospel, and are metaphors for the embodiment of "truth, goodness, and beauty".The angel in the topic is not a specific reference, it should be understood as a generalized angel, referring to beautiful people, things, objects, goals, etc.Once you understand these, it will not be difficult to write again.As for the style of writing, both narrative and argumentative essays are easy to write, and prose may be more "poetic" like topics.

Writing Ideas Tips
When writing a specific composition, candidates can describe their experiences and describe that through long-term efforts, a beautiful wish of "I" has become an amazingly realistic "angel".You can also make comments and elaborate on how to achieve beautiful goals.You can also sway your pen and ink, talking about the fruit of success is never waiting for us to get it, if you want to be successful, you must outline a healthy, fulfilling and happy future in your heart, and then create it with practical actions and tenacious perseverance. To perfect until it appears.Of course, if candidates understand "Angel" as a classic work, it is also possible to conceive the composition from the perspective of literary and artistic creation.

Full score sample essay
i am an angel
(Candidate [-] from Guangdong)

When I was very young, I always liked to see my mother in a white dress, she was so beautiful and happy.Being held by my mother is so happy, so happy!At that time, my mother was the angel in my heart.However, my mother loves to call me affectionately: "Anqi, you are an angel!"

I am not an angel, otherwise how could it be my mother and not me who was taken into heaven?
"I hope my Angie is as beautiful as an angel!" Mom wrote in her diary.I wiped away my tears, my mother wants me to be an angel, like an angel, then I will be an angel, even if I am not but I will work hard.But what is an angel like?

Be like mom!
So I grew my hair long and combed it beautifully.Wearing a long white skirt, walking lightly.She speaks sweetly and moves softly.Looking at myself in the mirror, it turns out that my mother and I look very similar.But my heart said to me, "You just look like an angel, you just look beautiful, but you're not!"

What is an angel?I asked my inner self, but there was no answer.Maybe it's real beauty?I thought again, so I went to find the real beauty.

I began to smile like my mother, very warm and comfortable.I learned to give this kind of smile to everyone, no matter poor, high or low, old, weak, sick or disabled.Maybe the world needs such a smile, maybe it's me, my heart becomes transparent and light every day.The world is beautiful and smiling is beautiful, but I'm not an angel yet.I often talk to my heart about how to become the angel in my heart. My heart doesn't have a clear answer, but I'm working hard.

Until one day, I came to the "Children's Home" with the volunteer service card left by my mother, and I seemed to feel that I was going to plant my wings here.

The orphans and mentally handicapped children here are very poor, but I feel very happy doing things for them.Although it is just to clean the room, teach them to read, write and draw, and play games with them.Looking at their simple smiles, I think they are angels, and so am I!

"Sister Angel, you can play with me!" Lowering her head, an angelic little sister smiled at me, "You are very kind!" This is the best compliment.

"Wow!" My wings spread!It turns out that kindness and sincerity are the wings of an angel.I thought of my mother.

It turned out that she always wanted me to be kind, sincere, and beautiful like an angel!
I get it and I do it.

I am an angel, very beautiful.

score review
This is a masterpiece of prose in the examination room.Candidates understand the word "angel" accurately and in place, center on kindness and beauty, use action and thinking as the point of distribution, and write stories with twists and turns, vivid and touching.The image of the "angel" described in the article is full. My mother is an angel, "I" want to be an angel, and I find that the orphan is also an angel. It can be said to be creative, with novel insights, fresh materials, and exquisite ideas.

carve the angel in the heart

(Candidate [-] from Guangdong)

Throughout the ages, how many dynasties have been overthrown because of treacherous sycophants and ignorant masters?In the thousands of years of the world, how many people have been swayed by the confusion in their hearts, have stumbled and regretted it, and regretted it for life.If the angel in the carving heart is not handled properly, the goal of governing the country will be difficult to achieve.

Emperor Cheng of the Han favored the Zhao sisters, who were fascinated by their children's affair and indulged in sensual entertainment. The "angel" cried, and then angered people. The world-shaking physics giant was entangled in religious feelings in his later years, and made the absurd judgment that "God created the earth with a blow of his fist", and the "angel" no longer favored him; Liu Bei couldn't let go of his brotherhood, so he rashly sent troops , ended up with a sad ending of burning for eight hundred miles and hating Baidi City. Only with the legacy of revitalizing the Han Dynasty, he was entrusted to the prime minister to revive the Han Dynasty and carve "angels" and he died young.

In the country, the "leader" must be good at crafting and persevering, so that the "angel" will appear and the goal will be achieved.It is not easy for a person in this life.It is a serious topic to take every step of life well.Everyone is lazy, if you are not good at carving, how can you not be a big mistake!

Under the influence of the word "heart", carving will make us need to let our hearts listen to the truest voice, ponder the most specific image, portray the most brilliant brilliance, and make correct judgments and choices.

This is true throughout history, and it is also true when observing society.

An angel is lonely, but like a tree in the wilderness, it needs watering with your heart, the shining and touching of the sun, the news of the earth and the sky, and the watching and echoing of other trees.

Angels depend on the perception of the soul, but also transcend the sensitivity of perception.Cultivating oneself and tempering the mind are the real recipes for carving.Kafka, Proust, and Lu Xun, who were fragile and vulnerable to illness, immediately gained eternal life in literature because they were good at carving out the angels in their hearts.

Good at carving, angels are like lotus flowers full of vitality. Under the scorching sun, they look surprisingly gorgeous and bright, swaying gracefully in the fresh and vivid green, rich, dexterous and fragrant.

score review
This article is short and concise, to the point everywhere, and to buckle up from time to time.From the point of view, the intention is accurate and the banner is clear; from the point of view of the arguments, the facts are sufficient and the reasoning is thorough.The writing is beautiful, opening and closing well, with clear layers and clever structure.On the basis of drawing lessons from previous full-mark essays, the beautiful writing style is integrated into the new and ingenious conception, which leaves a deep impression on people.

Meaningful·Guardian
(Candidate [-] from Guangdong)

No matter how escaped from the world, you can't forget the noise here;
No matter how lonely you are, you have to share a part of the beauty here.

Find a place of pure spiritual meditation to experience the flying of the angel in your heart, her wings, and her pure beauty are carved with heart.

The angel in her heart has bright eyes shining in the dark, she is afraid of the sophisticated society, she wants to be pure and beautiful, and she wants to live forever, so she came to the safest place, people's hearts.

There is an attic in everyone's heart, because it is pure, cold, and secluded from the world, so it is difficult to reach.The angel of the heart lives there, composing the psalms of the soul for us from time to time.

The angel in my heart is carved and shaped from time to time...

Ji Kang and his "Guangling San" tell us that the melodious sound of the piano flutters on the execution ground, and he shatters the ferocious death with the angel carved in his heart.Ji Kang's angels are brave, brave, and messengers who lead life from a peaceful and far-reaching road to eternity.

The angels carved by Ji Kang are souls written at the cost of their lives.

Sima Qian was implicated in the case of Li Ling. He could choose to live, and everyone was embarrassed by it, because there was a force in his bones that pushed him to carve unformed angels. It was "Historical Records"—after thousands of years A masterpiece that is still tasteless after a century of vicissitudes.

Sima Qian stabbed the whole history with the angel he carved, what is that?Those are the wings of angels writing.

Some people say that the night will not disappear, it is hidden in the heart of the day.Then the carving knife in people's hands will not disappear, it is hidden in our hearts, and we can carve the angels in our hearts at any time.Regardless of beauty or ugliness, it is the seal carving of the knife of the soul.

It is a clear water in the "Book of Songs", Yiren on the side of the water, the angel in his heart is waiting to be carved; it is the sparkling "Chu Ci", illuminating people's hearts.

The longest thing in the world is immaterial—thought and spirit, and what we can do for ourselves is to carve an angel to protect the beautiful heart.

The flower garden of the soul is waiting for us to plant flowers, but if there is no protection, how can the soul find a pure landscape?
Just like those pilgrims who kneel on their knees, feel the gods with their knees, and give their life's hope to the devotion of Buddha.

Carve out with pious heart, carve out an angel of soul, what she will guard is life and pure beauty.

Her mission will be: to guard the eternal soul.

The unwavering guardian is the angel in the heart.

score review
This article is a beautiful article full of humanistic spirit.The content of the article is on point. Both the beginning and the end point out that "sculpting the angel in the heart" is to "guard and maintain the eternal and pure and beautiful soul".Then take Ji Kang, Sima Qian, "The Book of Songs" and "Chu Ci" to illustrate the point of view, and use the analogy of "a pilgrim kneeling on the ground" to enrich the content.The language of the article is beautiful, the meaning is profound, the writing is brilliant, and the expression is very appealing.

classic case
Ji Kang, Sima Qian, The Book of Songs, Songs of Chu

I am an angel
(Candidate [-] from Guangdong)

The endless persuasion and even accusation, the faces full of incomprehension and worry, and the different figures that come and go erratically in front of me, I want to carve myself.

I know that almost everyone is puzzled by my behavior.I don't want to explain anything, because I can't explain anything at all.Perhaps, in their eyes, I am a stubborn person who does not even know how to measure.

The day after tomorrow, or tomorrow, I will leave this land where I was born and raised, and start my new life in the deserted Northwest desert.For this reason, I gave up a lot, the care of my parents, the superior life, and the senior white-collar position I once dreamed of.Perhaps it is precisely because of these that almost everyone does not understand me.

(End of this chapter)