College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 22 Location and Value (2)
Why is it such a luxury to sleep soundly on me?Why can't I have a panoramic view of this magnificent mountain and river?Why can't I enjoy that warm and harmonious life?Xiaohe complained.

"Xiaohe, I really yearn for your adventures!" Yun'er shouted to Xiaohe.

"Yun'er, I envy your comfortable life!" Xiaohe replied.

"Then let's change positions!" This sentence was spoken in unison.

The clouds turned into fluffy raindrops and gathered into a small river; the small river condensed into clouds with the misty water vapor.

Yun'er, who has become a small river, runs forward vigorously, but finds that he, who is used to calm observation and thinking, is not used to the bumpy road;They discovered that the position of the other party was not suitable for them.

"Let's change it back!" Once again in unison.

The cloud becomes a cloud again, and it contemplates everything it cares about; the small river becomes a small river again, and it enjoys everything it encounters.

This is my position.I have also experienced lightning and thunder, and I have also faced the sudden hurricane. Haven't I withstood the test of will?What a happy life it is to be able to gather up a huge cloud curtain to give shade to all living beings, and to sprinkle nectar to irrigate the dry land... Facing the breeze, Yun'er smiled.

My place is here.The never-ending flow is the life experience I pursue.Maybe the view ahead is not so wide, but the river keeps flowing, and the footsteps have passed through the green hills, walked through the green valleys, irrigated the peach blossoms on the banks, and left patches of lush greenery behind... Accompanied by the loud and clear singing, the small river continues to move forward.

Yuner is proud of being a cloud;
Xiaohe is proud of being a small river.

Just like Yun'er and Xiaohe, life already has its own place.Don't blame others, don't think of yourself as insignificant, work hard in your respective positions, and value will be born in it.Of course, once you have clarified the value of your position, you should not just stick to it. Instead, you should persevere and strive to reach the pinnacle of your dream.

score review
This is a well-conceived fable with beautiful language.Candidates skillfully presented a rather complicated life issue in a comprehensive, dialectical and philosophical way through a fable.This philosophy is conveyed through the psychology, dialogue and actions of Yun'er and Xiaohe, which is lively and touching.

hapiness?sad?
(Candidate No. [-] in Jilin)

Shears constantly, the reason is chaotic

I used to let go of my heart and run beside the green trees; I used to be sad and cry under the bamboo forest.Today I saw Li Yu's sorrow again, I carefully opened the poems, and I carefully read the history books.Li Yu is "a genius who is truly peerless, and a poor life to be a monarch".Among the jade railings, he and Xiao Zhouhou drank wine and wrote poems, quite charming, but today he was locked in the deep building, only sighing "the lonely deep courtyard of the parasol tree locks the clear autumn", finally "Ask how much sorrow you can have, just like a river of spring water flowing eastward."He is dead, but Qingqiu remains the same, I only feel sorry, why didn't he try to give up his wealth and honor, and become a poet in the bamboo forest in the countryside?

He dies before leaving the teacher, which makes the hero burst into tears

The cypress trees are lush and dense, I flew to the top of the trees, and in the clear air, I smelled the breath of a hero.He is Wolong, living in the mountains and forests, and he is also very noble.But then he left and went to the battlefield, where he strategized and won a decisive victory thousands of miles away.He was very happy because he helped his friend, the person who paid him three visits to the thatched cottage and invited him out of the mountain with true feelings.During the war, he felt that he had lived a fulfilling life, and he finally left behind the reputation of "a teacher who is truly famous in the world, who can be equal to the best in a thousand years".The correct position and his sticking to the position made him feel happy in the sunshine.

If you bury flowers today, you will laugh like crazy, but if you bury flowers in the future, you will know who it is

Facing the wind was the wind, which pierced deeply into the heart like a sharp sword, very desolate.Daiyu is full of tears, sitting alone in the small pavilion, she is looking, what is she looking at?Looking at the mountains, looking at the clouds, looking at my mother.It was a strange place, full of strange people, and she had been lost for several years.Yes, she chose to bury the flowers, and she was so sad in the soil every day, she shed tears and recited "The Song of Burying Flowers" at the same time.In the end, she just returned to the west, and the Xiaoxiang Pavilion is still there.The position is skewed, but here, there are large chunks of ice falling down, how can those immature shoulders withstand it?Tears gushing like a fountain are the incarnation of sorrow and sorrow.

With people as a mirror, you can know the gains and losses
Facing the situation of black clouds pressing down on the city, he shuttled through the iron armor of soldiers and finally defeated the "hero" of the separatist regime.He knows people well, he has the sea in his heart, and he is resourceful and resourceful.Today's "Reign of Zhenguan" shows his achievements.However, in the hall, there are Wei Zheng's remonstrances, remonstrances are like swords, piercing the heart; remonstrances are like wind, piercing cold pain.However, he just smiled slightly, with great ambitions, tolerance, and absorption.He is thirsty for talent, and he always allows the wisdom of others to be fully utilized.Wei Zheng passed away, and he said: "With copper as a mirror, you can straighten your clothes; with ancient times as a mirror, you can see the ups and downs; with people as a mirror, you can know the gains and losses." It is fun to find the right position and give full play to its potential. endless.

hapiness?sad?
The evening breeze makes people drunk.I put down the book and looked at the world in front of me. There are mountains, water, flowers, birds, and springs... It is so attractive. In this position, I can only feel heartfelt joy.Someone said it well, "Happiness is a day, sadness is a day, why don't you live a day happily?" I am no longer confused, I want to interpret the most beautiful story of life in my position, so that there is always happiness in suffering.

score review
This is a masterpiece of prose full of meaning.The article is closely related to the topic and has a clear theme.They respectively describe the "happiness" or "sadness" left by Li Yu, Zhuge Liang, Lin Daiyu and Tang Taizong in order to find their own position.The full text adopts the structure of subtitles, describing in turn the unique demeanor and charm of the four characters in the process of finding their way of life.The sentiment at the end not only echoes the above, but also deepens the theme just right.The structure of the article is well-proportioned and the thinking is clear.

classic case
Li Yu, Zhuge Liang, Lin Daiyu and Tang Taizong
location of a grain of sand

(a candidate from Guangxi)

When you are placed in the sand, you are just sand.

--Inscription

God dropped my heart on the sand and I was stranded.All around me was an endless stretch of sandy beach, gray and dull.

I am a little lost, is this my destined position?
Whenever night falls, I look at the sky and envy those stars that people look up to. They are bright and dazzing, radiating eternal brilliance.But I also saw the deep sky behind the stars, the dazzling stars set off by the boundless darkness.

But I am not reconciled.

I turned my head and saw a light.

The violent sea is angry, gestating the power to destroy everything.The monstrous waves were illuminated by a tiny beam of light.On the edge of a high cliff, stood a woman shivering in the storm, but her hand was like a stone pillar that could not fall down, persistently holding a bright lamp.Elke, the sad sister, did not choose to wait quietly for her brother who went to sea in a sheltered home, but stood on the cliff and lit the ever-bright lamp of hope with courage and perseverance.

The high cliff made Elke's lights blend into the starlight, and I am amazed: she found her place in the watch of family affection. Although her watch has become eternal, her lamp is always bright, and the position she stands on Has become an eternal point.

I started thinking, thinking about my own position.

When the day comes, the blazing sun is the master of everything.

I stare at the sun in amazement, it is a unique position, a position from which all things can look up.

Yet I am terrified of my ridiculous thoughts.The sun, who can replace it, who can become it?
A huge figure passed in front of me, and the ground trembled.He, a man who chases the sun.He never seems to be tired, his firm feet have already worn calluses, but his enthusiasm and confidence remain the same.He still holds his head up and faces the direction of the sun, which is his eternal coordinate, and he will spend his whole life returning to the origin.

The hot sun burned his eyes, but I saw strength and fire burst out of his eyes, as if they had burned into two fireballs.

I suddenly grieved for him, seeking a place he could never reach.

But I was wrong, I saw that Kuafu ended his chase, he entered the sun's rays on the yellow wood, and died in the burning.There he rested and gained eternal life.Since then, it has been burned into a great totem.

I was shocked.Kuafu is constantly running, striving towards the position in his heart. In fact, he has found his own position during the running, no matter whether he succeeds or not in the end.

I finally understand that there is no destined position, no unreachable position, unless you put yourself on the beach forever.

Before my heart has weathered into a stubborn stone, I stay away from the beach, looking for my place and my value.

I believe that as long as I am willing, courage and faith will make me shine, shining like gold.

score review
Candidates cleverly used the form of fairy tales to stand out with a novel style.The article expresses the relationship between "position and value" artistically with a new and ingenious idea, which is unique and creative.The full text is written in one go, full of literary talent and distinctive personality.In addition, the student's paper is neat, tidy and beautiful, and it is a high-level masterpiece in the examination room.

Don't underestimate the ordinary and ordinary

(a candidate from Guangxi)

The sky is full of stars, many bright, dazzling stars - and I am not one of them.There are many crystal-clear waves in the vast sea-but I am not one of them.Dense forests, tall and tall trees are countless - and I am not one of them.

Yes, I am ordinary, without dazzling brilliance, without a tall body, and without enviable aptitude.However, I have full of blood and endless enthusiasm.I am ordinary, but I am not mediocre, and the value of life will not be unrealized because of my ordinaryness.

Each of us has a different position in life, and in different positions we play various roles in life.The stage of life gives us every opportunity to realize our respective dreams and values. "I am born to be useful", our position in life is not the judge who ultimately determines our life destiny, the realization of our life value depends on our correct attitude towards life.Regardless of our role on the stage of life, we all have the right to flourish in our place, and we all have the hope of being heroes to others.

The value of life is like a flowing river, we stand by the river, each has its own position.The river flows in front of us. The key to drinking water is not our position, but whether we have the courage to take a step forward to fight for the source of life in front of us.People who stand still, look back, and dare not challenge life, no matter how superior your position is, no matter how favorable conditions you have, success will always be a passer-by at your door, and will never belong to you.

Life is fair, it gives everyone different advantages, and it is rare for people who want to be invincible in life.It is impossible to live a life of reaping for nothing.The true value of life lies in hard work and innovation. No matter our position in life is ordinary or superior, whether we are born ugly ducklings or beautiful swans, as long as we dare to fight hard, as long as we dare to challenge life, we will use our own hands to build our own. With a piece of heaven and earth, we can become the patrons of the goddess of fortune and get the rewards we deserve.

Ordinary screws seem very small, but its value cannot be ignored by us.Without it, the [-]-ton giant ship will sink to the bottom of the sea; without it, the towering buildings will collapse.Ordinary does not mean worthless, and ordinary does not mean inaction.

Each of us and everything can have a place that belongs to us, let us be open in our respective positions, let us realize the dreams in our hearts in our respective positions, and use our hands to create The value of our radiant life.

score review
If the article wants to be promoted, it should be suppressed first, and the pen should be used to create momentum.I first described my own ordinary and ordinary, in fact, to highlight the following, emphasizing "don't underestimate the ordinary and ordinary", revealing that "everyone has a different position in life, and to realize their dreams and values ​​​​must work hard "Philosophy of life.The writing style of the article is beautiful, and rhetorical techniques such as parallelism and metaphor are used appropriately, which enhances the appeal of the article.

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