College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 36 Commemoration (2)
What the student should commemorate is not people, but the four seasons of the year. The article selects four things in the four seasons to commemorate the four seasons. The article is cleverly conceived and the writing style is fresh.The fresh text and light colors make the full text dignified and give people a relaxed enjoyment.

Fireworks on Heartstrings
(Candidate [-] from Guangdong)

Gently sweeping the thin dust covering the atrium, quietly opening the translucent crystal box of the heart, a bunch of fire blue fireworks dance like elves, reflecting the entire transparent and flawless world.And it is this smart fireworks, with so many stirring souls, that has become an indelible memory of my eternal life.

The boat shakes lightly, and the wind blows the clothes.In the mist of the morning light, he wakes up to the refusal to remonstrate in the past, and still knows that the one who comes will be pursued.How can the glory and wealth in the cage make a free-flying bird willing to break its wings and put on shackles made of gold and silver?Yun Wuxin came out of Xiuxiu, and the birds knew how to return when they were tired of flying. Away from the hustle and bustle of the world, the chrysanthemum fragrance drunk in Nanshan, and the birds returned, and they wrote poems along the Qingliu. , Let me know how to guard the paradise and pure land in my heart alone in the impetuous turmoil...

The rocks pierced through the sky, the stormy waves hit the shore, and thousands of piles of snow were rolled up.Meng De sang sad songs in Chibi, Zhou Yu talked and laughed happily in Chibi, but it was Su Shi who really brought Chibi perfection and heroism.The sinister turmoil in the officialdom did not dampen his high will, and the poverty in life did not dampen his optimistic heart.Accompanied by the trickling spring, listening to the ancient customs, in the fugue of the hometown, the pale silver hair and the bright moonlight complement each other.One is still in Jiangyue, what a heroic toast, how many sorrows and life hardships have faded away - commemorating Su Shi, let me know that we should maintain a courageous heart in the face of difficulties and adversities...

The strong men ate the Hulu meat when they were hungry, and laughed and talked about drinking the blood of the Huns when they were thirsty.Such lofty ambitions are recalled to Lin'an by the fatuous emperor's twelve gold medals, and it is difficult for a hero to devote himself to defending his family and country.Even though the sad melancholy of the white boy is sad, it is no match for the gossip and gossip of the villain in the government and the public. In the end, he can only resign with "unnecessary" charges.But the passionate words of "waiting from the beginning, cleaning up the old mountains and rivers, and facing the sky" are full of passion, which will always shock people's hearts and echo between the earth and rivers and mountains-commemorating Yue Fei, let me understand what it means to "serve the country with loyalty" , surging my patriotic blood...

There is also the general Li Guang who galloped across the frontier, Qi Jiguang who fought against the Japanese along the coast, and the million-strong army who crossed the Yangtze River, etc., etc., etc., etc., have all been cast into a spiritual monument in my heart, and they are like mountains. A spirit as majestic as the sea, as deep as the sea, has become an eternal lighthouse in the voyage of my life...

There is no red carpet covered with roses, and there is no deafening applause. History has quietly come to an end, but I use my pure heart to carry the elegant fragrance and passion of these gentlemen, to deeply commemorate them and let them live forever. Like a fiery phoenix, they are constantly reborn from nirvana, and like a thorny bird, they sing the most beautiful song in the world when a thorn pierces the heart. Let their pursuit of value ignite in the raging fire, and also light up my life and turn it into a That gripping...

Fireworks on the heartstrings, I will wait forever...

score review
This article is an essay on lyricism.Candidates selected Tao Yuanming, Su Shi, and Yue Fei, who were well-known in Chinese history, as the key objects of commemoration, and passionately expressed the author's admiration for these historical figures and their inspiration for their own life and thoughts.Rich vocabulary, neat and flexible sentence patterns, and various appropriate rhetorical techniques also show the author's rich accumulation and ability to control language.

Let the memorial shine with rational light

(Candidate [-] from Guangdong)

Commemoration is the surge of inner emotions, but not the unrestrained squandering of emotions; commemoration needs action to sublimate, but also needs rational guidance.

True remembrance is the echo of the soul, the echo of history; it examines the past and enlightens the future...

Hegel once boasted that the Germans were born philosophers.However, such a nation, born with rigorous self-discipline, was lured into the abyss of war by a madman. The tragedy of 60 years ago: the loss of life, the separation of wives and children, and the blood flowing into rivers... The living found a moral benchmark and a reason to commemorate in the examination of the past.The Germans tried every means to prevent time from fading the blood and thinning the voice: building a concentration camp memorial, doing their best to deal with the aftermath of the war, and the shocking kneeling of the German Chancellor in front of the Jewish Monument!In the past 60 years, the Germans have been constantly reflecting and commemorating, and finally completed the self-salvation of the soul.The German nation has shown the power of reason to the world and won the respect of the world!

It can be seen that rational commemoration is the correct commemoration, and rationality makes commemoration shine with the brilliance of humanity.

Once memory breaks away from rational constraints, it becomes an uncontrollable devil.Japan also played a disgraceful role in the tragedy 60 years ago. As the main executioner in Asia, Japan has committed countless crimes.The past is over, but the commemoration of the Dahe nation is like this: the right wing advocates the "China Threat Theory" and tries to overturn the crime of World War II; revises the history textbook regardless of historical facts, glosses over mistakes, and beautifies the crime of aggression; The Yasukuni Shrine's "ghost worship"... Japan's "commemoration" activities that deviate from the rational category have naturally been unanimously condemned by the people of all countries.There is a saying that goes well: "Kneeling Germans are taller than standing Japanese!"

China paid a huge price to win the Anti-Japanese War, and the Chinese people naturally cannot tolerate such perverse behavior.So there were massive protests and commemorative activities all over the country.However, these commemorative activities have recently been instigated by a small number of radicals, and there have been irrational acts of smashing and looting Japanese goods stores.The patriotism of the masses is understandable, but commemoration is not a waste of emotion, and irrational actions are not conducive to solving the problem.The leaders of our country have expressed their solemn position on many occasions, but at the same time they did not close the door to the Sino-Japanese meeting. "Never forgetting the past is a guide for the future; taking history as a mirror and facing the future" is undoubtedly the most rational and profound memorial to the pain of the past .

One cannot forget one's roots, "Forgetting the past means betrayal."And the noble mind remembers the suffering and chews the suffering before it can commemorate the suffering rationally.When the flood of commemoration is surging, don't forget to use the rational "gate" to control emotions.

score review
This is an excellent argumentative paper for the examination room.The article mainly expounds that commemoration should be carried out in moderation and needs to be guided by reason, and it is proved by two examples, one positive and one negative, which is refreshing.The materials in this paper are novel and properly quoted, the transition is natural but the arguments are rigorous, the content is substantial and the theme is profound. It is a rare masterpiece with strong political color and strong atmosphere of the times.

commemorate
(Candidate [-] from Guangdong)

The bits and pieces of history are like sandstone shells scattered on the huge beach. We walked quietly, greedily looking at these crystal clear and precious wealth, and sometimes picked up one or two shells that touched the soul, with a feeling of love , Thanksgiving mood, a good collection, as a souvenir.

There is a shell that has experienced vicissitudes on the beach, which is the story of the Jewish nation.When they were forced to be displaced and homeless during World War II, the Jews still held the hope of revival. They never gave up and never compromised. They stuck to their beliefs and passed on their courage, because they had a belief—from the Wailing Wall .The Wailing Wall, which has experienced vicissitudes of history, records the suffering and past, glory and dreams of the nation.Every Jew will come to the Wailing Wall at a certain moment to commemorate his predecessors. It is this commemorative mood that keeps this nation confident and tenacious, allowing them to stand tall on the horizon again.

There is a shiny shell on the beach, which is Madame Curie's nostalgia for the nation.Madame Curie was poor all her life, and left her motherland when she was young to study.After many years of tireless pursuit in the field of science, she finally extracted the radioactive element "polonium" from metals.She knew that this element would bring her countless honors, and she, the grateful scientist, immediately thought of naming this element after "Po" to commemorate her motherland, Poland, and perhaps it was this moment of thinking about her motherland. Madame Curie has been making unremitting efforts.After that, she extracted "radium" and became one of the few women who won the Nobel Prize twice.

There is a grateful shell on the beach, which is the "grass" in the heart of the writer Sanmao.Sanmao was once helpless when she was studying in a different place. At this moment, a strange classmate gave her an unremarkable grass and encouraged her to cheer up.Sanmao's heart was very moved. She wrote in "Someone Gives Me a Grass": "The grass will wither. I don't know how to commemorate this classmate who has disappeared. I can only use this heart to help others. Pass on this grateful heart to help more people." Sanmao did it with her real actions, and she moved and nourished the hearts of readers with her delicate words and sincere feelings. This is her way of commemoration.

Some people collect different samples from various water sections of the Yellow River to commemorate the ancestors who created the splendid Chinese culture; With longing, I will commemorate the martyrs who gave their lives for our happiness.With gratitude and faith, I picked up a few shells on the beach and kept them in my body to commemorate the history. I was ready to create the future.

score review
This article carefully organizes materials around the topic of "commemoration", and closely combines narrative and reasoning to make the theme clear and profound.Candidates have a broad vision and deep thinking, showing that the candidate is good at thinking and associating, as well as being good at reading and accumulating.

can't forget the past

——The [-]th Anniversary of the Victory of the Anti-Fascist War

(Candidate [-] from Guangdong)

60 years ago, in France, Normandy, and Utah Beach, teams of American and British soldiers braved the hail of bullets and rushed towards the bunker ahead. One after another soldiers fell down, and some people still ran forward with shouts. For a moment, Blood stained the entire beach...

60 years ago, the Soviet Union, Stalingrad, the front line, one truck after another was carrying recruits who had just come out of the training camp, and the officer shouted in the truck: "We don't need deserters alive!" As soon as the voice fell, A shrapnel pierced his head.The recruits were driven out of the car, some with guns, and some with only bullets, and the loudspeaker kept repeating a sentence: "Those who don't get guns follow behind, and those with guns follow. The comrade sacrificed, the comrade without a gun picked up his gun and continued to charge..."

60 years ago, in a certain village in Northeast China, at night, a shirtless middle-aged man straightened the belt holding a gleaming broadsword, and turned to face a group of villagers, including teenagers There are young men and old men with gray hair, and they also carry big knives.The middle-aged man said: "Didn't you let your family know?" Everyone was silent, and the middle-aged man waved his hand, "Then let's go."Half an hour later, there were screams, gunfire, and the sound of metal collisions in the Japanese army base. The moonlight reflected on the blade also had a color of grief and indignation, shining non-stop with the swing of the knife.With the last gunshot, the moonlight on the ground can no longer be found...

War can bring us nothing but death and destruction.The war has left us with painful memories, as well as heroes who sacrificed their lives for justice and peace. We cannot forget, forget the war, forget death and destruction, and we cannot and should not forget the heroes in the war. They put an end to war, stopped destruction, and replaced the death of others with their death.

The war is over, let us honor the sleeping heroes.

Today, 60 years later, in France, Normandy, and Utah Beach, the veterans who fought here put on military uniforms covered with medals and walked on the road. People applauded and cheered for them. At the same time, they also found that the veterans The smile is so heavy...

Today, 60 years later, Russia, the Red Square in Moscow, is the main place to celebrate, or maybe it should be said to commemorate the [-]th anniversary of the victory of World War II. Heroes from all over the world are respected and praised by leaders of all countries.

Today, 60 years later, in a small town in Northeast China, a class of students, led by an 80-year-old old man, came to a monument. The old man told the story of how he killed, survived and escaped He was still excited about the experience, and he sang the song that made his blood boil: "The big knife cut off the devils' heads..." The students shed tears... To commemorate, for the past that cannot be forgotten.

score review
The most prominent advantage of the article lies in its novel film montage technique and compact contrast structure, which makes the article echo back and forth, and the beginning and the end are harmonious, which is refreshing.The language is elegant, concise and full of jumping feeling, which shows the author's proficient writing ability and rich cultural heritage.

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