College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 48 Self-knowledge and expectations of others (2)
You scolded, "Jun Mowu, don't you see it, Yuhuan and flying swallows are all dust"; camp".

How much I want to cross thousands of years of time and space, and share the moon with you.

In Xichou, Nanshan, where chrysanthemums are blooming, you write poems facing the clear stream; in the deep mountain bamboo forest illuminated by the bright moon, you play the piano and sing a long song; under the bright moon, you go up to the tall building alone, put aside the worldly expectations, and chant the flowing water among the green mountains and green waters Like light poetry.

If you wear a thin long gown and make a slight bow, you will step into history boldly, from ancient times, and from yellowed thread-bound books.It is you, because you climbed the tall building alone and stuck to yourself, you also guarded the eternal spiritual home in the dark night.

In the era of "the westerly wind withered the green trees last night", it was you who went up to the tall buildings alone, put aside the worldly expectations, guarded yourself, and thus guarded the expectations of history.

score review
The article selects three successful celebrities in the history of literature who put aside people's worldly expectations, "climbed to the tall buildings alone", "guarded the eternal spiritual home", and "guarded the expectations of history".The article sings and sighs three times, full of poetic flavor, implicit image, philosophy in it, vivid words and fluent language.The finishing touch at the end is really brilliant.

fly without wings

(a candidate from Chongqing)

"Every butterfly is the reincarnation of a flower." The beetle said to me with a smile, "One day, you will also have a pair of colorful wings dancing in the sky." The sun quietly flows through every inch of my navy blue On my skin, I heard the mountain wind pass by the treetops, like a far-reaching song.

"Ah, you!" The sharp cry of the little beetle rang in my ears. I dragged my wet wings and opened my tired eyes—the pale yellow powder wings unfortunately covered the ground. I changed from a caterpillar to A little moth, I laughed.The sunshine is a bit extravagant. Although my good friend, the little beetle, has always expected me to be the most beautiful butterfly, flying lightly among the flowers, I have no regrets or regrets. The pain and struggle in the past, I have already been reborn, and my bones have been replaced.Although I don't have colorful wings, I still have the moving moment when I break out of the cocoon. I still sing the praises of this beautiful world with my unsophisticated dance. Please bless me, I am a lovely moth.

"The end of every eagle is the sky," my mother's eyes were full of expectation, "one day, you will also have a pair of strong wings, spreading your glory in the sky." The breeze gently blows my yellow hair Mao, I heard Yan language whispering, telling some ancient stories.

"Ah, you!" Mom's heavy sigh hit my heart heavily, of course I understand that I am just an ordinary chicken, the sky is just a dream too far away, and my mother adopted me as an orphan, looking forward to me It will be the proudest one in the sky. I'm sorry, Mom, I'm just a chicken, so the blue sky is not my choice. In March in the south of the Yangtze River, the grass grows and the warblers fly. I will run there as much as I want, like a yellow cloud Flying across the green sky, there is the heaven that carries my happiness. I will not forcefully lock my brows on the eagle's expectations, and crush a day of spring flowers and autumn moons. In a grassland where ideals are exiled, I will be as happy as the eagle, mother , please bless me, I am a happy chicken.

"Every swan is an angel's smile," Dad looked at me kindly, "One day, you will also have a pair of white wings, writing your noble beauty in the sky." My feathers are dripping down, I seem to hear the rain hitting the plantains, dripping with some old sorrows.

"Ah, you!" Dad's disappointed eyes were as dim as a doused torch. I was born with a disability, and I could never realize my dream of flying lightly. I didn't cry. I thought, there are some flights that don't need wings, and some are beautiful There is no need to write, I am still white as jade, walking in the water, with my happiness flowing, I will smile and bless those companions in the air.The posture of an angel is not as close to heaven as flying without wings. Bless me, I am a happy swan.

score review
This article has a profound conception, rigorous structure, beautiful language, great imagination, and rich in philosophy.Choose moths, chickens, and swans as the main body of the statement, and examine yourself in the face of the expectations of others ("friends", "mothers", and "dads"), and vividly illustrate the relationship between "self-knowledge and other people's expectations", which is vivid and thought-provoking , intriguing.And the structure is rigorous, the writing style is extraordinary, the writing is fluent, clean and neat, which shows the examinee's ability to control the language.

Poet · Bright Moon · Yellow Flower
(a candidate from Chongqing)

[-]. The bright moon on Dongpo
Langtaosha

Relegated to live in Huangcheng, hold the lamp against the wind, lead Huang Qing to sigh the hero.In the past, the scenery of the Bianhe River was difficult to walk on.

Success or failure Ren Xidong, this hatred is endless, who will share for the sake of pride?A mino of misty rain has been in office all his life, and he is flying on the snow.

I wrote this poem specially for Su Shi after he was relegated. Dongpo's life was full of ups and downs: the twists and turns of love, the turmoil of official career, the struggle of political vortex, and the embarrassment of grievances.

The family members who are full of hope for him, the friends who have gone through the disaster with him, and the people who are loved by him all hope that he can show his talents, prosper his official career, and help the world and the people.However, Dongpo knew that his fate was bad, and the dark gate of official career could never accommodate such a liberal Su Dongpo.

Therefore, he exchanged his fame and wealth for "bamboo stick straw sandals". He sang "The Great River Goes East" on the night when the moon was missing, and he felt that "life is like everywhere, just like Feihong stepping on snow mud". "Small profits, snail corners have a false name" is touched, and I only wish to "send the rest of my life in the sea".

Su Dongpo, who knew himself, stepped out of the narrow door of politics calmly. Although he was contrary to everyone's expectations, he let us see through a bold, indifferent, open-minded, and enlightened Su University scholar-a generation of literary heroes.

Self-knowledge is Dongpo's bright moon, shining on him as he walks into the long river of history going east.

[-]. Yi'an's Yellow Flower
Nanlou Order

Su Yue sends a lonely boat, only a shadow follows the water, the home is broken, and a cup of wine is left.How can the wine be light against the evening wind, the phoenix rain, a little bit of worry.

Come late and climb the building alone, the word hate locks your brows, the yellow flowers are thin, and the sound of wild geese stops in autumn.A stream of falling flowers spreads across Tingzhou, wandering and suffering, when will it rest?
This poem is written by me to Li Qingzhao, who has gone through a lot of wandering.

A strange woman full of sentimentality, the country is ruined, the pain of losing her husband, and the pain of reforming.

The moment she married Zhao's family at the age of 16, everyone hoped that she would be a good wife who would live a prosperous life, be happy and take care of her husband and children.However, with the changes of the world and the suffering of the war, although Yi An is looking for his own happiness, he is always oppressed by the dark atmosphere. The flat boat on the stream carried the youth, but it couldn't carry the sorrow.

Therefore, Yi An let go of her melancholy and let go of the perishable yellow flowers in her hands. After seeing through the vicissitudes of life, she diligently compiled "Jinshilu" when the geese returned, and wrote "Shuyu Ci" on a cold rainy night in the phoenix tree. Knowing himself again, Yi An lights up a lonely lamp in the dark and walks staggeringly.

Self-knowledge is Yi'an's yellow flower, which dies with the wind, is sad but not hurt, and contains hard work and beauty in sorrow. Although its color is different from the color in the hearts of the world, it can always show a strange brilliance.

score review
The most prominent feature of this article is its profound language foundation.The full text is fluent and full of poetic and picturesque flavor.In particular, he was able to fill in two poems by himself as the beginning of each part in a very short test time, which is remarkable and extraordinary.Although the words filled in did not fully meet the metrical requirements, they were considered outstanding, which shows that the candidate has read a lot, has high literary accomplishment, and excellent Chinese quality.

classic case
Su Dongpo, Li Qingzhao
self-knowledge success

(a candidate from Chongqing)

Under the bone pagoda of Master Hongyi, shaded by green trees, the power of time has penetrated into the towering stele beside it. The four dazzling red characters of "sorrow and joy" stand still amidst the bleak sound of pine trees. Year after year, it What are you telling people?I have no ability to reveal any shimmer of such a secret inner track, and maybe you can't either. ——But I remembered, the master was meditating in the study that year, and a woman came with a friend—that was the master’s acquaintance before he debuted, and he hadn’t seen each other for more than ten years. When the family love was staged, the master insisted on ordering her to be driven away. This action once aroused the world's embarrassment, but only the master knew it.

The realm of life is made up of our own consciousness, and the flashy world seems to be getting more and more blurred. Too many expectations from outsiders, too many eyes to wait, too many expectations to enrich our lives, resulting in a blank space in our ideal world. , This kind of blankness is too wide and too big, like a perching bird flying across the vast ocean, making people hesitate when speaking, thinking clearly in the middle of the night, what are your childhood visions and dreams, and where are they in your life now ?

Also exists in the human space, we can not help but find that the self-awareness of the ancients is quite clear.Too many literati and poets seem to care little about other things except writing and painting.Li He said: "I have no ambitions in my twenties, and my heart is as sad as a withered orchid." A person who is only 20 years old has a tattered heart. But he had no time to think about these things. When later generations unraveled the products of his spiritual world, they found that they were poignant and stunning—such amazing spiritual fruits, but they were not obscured.

Following the expectations of others can lead to fame and strive for the abundance of the material world. This has actually become a tendency, and self-entertainment like the ancients has long since disappeared in this society where the spiritual world is dying out.But at the same time of being useless, his heart is as clear as water, as if entering an unobstructed state. Sima Qian is completely useless in the eyes of others. Socrates walks with his fat body every day. Beethoven Deaf, but they all exceeded the expectations of others and became great men.We can't help but reflect on their self-knowledge of life. All spiritually great people have a heart of self-knowledge. Strong spiritual awareness can help them get rid of the interference of the outside world. In their hearts, the direction they choose leads to the spiritual palace. No matter how different things are in the world, they strive hard on the road they choose and never give up. "Though hardships and hardships make you succeed", they go to glory in the paradox of others' expectations.

Some people spend their entire lives seeking the successful life expected by others, businessmen are exhausted, and politicians are exhausted. Only a person with a heart will trace the source and salvage successful fish from the spiritual home he believes. In the end, he will pull the fish like a fisherman. Like kelp, it stretches your successful life longer and longer, and finally pulls the entire sea.

score review
This article selects two groups of characters respectively. Faced with the high or low expectations of others, through self-knowledge, some stick to themselves, and some "go to glory", which fully proves the importance of "self-knowledge" in the destiny of life. The importance, the theme is prominent.The full text uses narrative, discussion, lyric and other expressions comprehensively, which is vivid and rich.

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