College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 49 The Smartness of Water, the Calmness of Mountains (1)
(2004 Jiangsu volume)

composition test questions
Read the text below, according to what the article says.

Water has the character of water - agile, and mountains have the temperament of mountains - calm.The agility of water gives people wisdom, and the calmness of mountains gives people honesty.However, the dynamic seawater maintains the same color of blue all year round, while the calm mountains change different colors in the four seasons.Please write an article of no less than 800 words on the topic of "the spirit of water, the calmness of mountains".

[Notice]

①The topic includes two aspects, you can write only one aspect, or you can write both aspects. ② Make up your own mind. ③The style is optional. ④The topic is self-made. ⑤No plagiarism.

Question Analysis
"The flexibility of water, the calmness of mountains" is a phrase with a parallel structure, which belongs to the topic of relations.As far as the topic itself is concerned, it contains two characteristics: one is opposition, and the other is harmony. "Mountain" and "water" are a pair of contradictions in nature, but they complement and depend on each other.Mountains are not beautiful without water, and water is not spiritual without mountains; the agility of water and the color of the sea, the calmness of mountains and the changes of four seasons, they seem to be opposites but they are unified: without purity, the agility of water has no roots; without the scenery of four seasons Change, the calmness of the mountain is stateless.Nature has thus produced the beauty of harmony and unity. "Agility" and "stableness" are not so much the feeling of mountains and rivers as the embodiment of human cultural characteristics in nature. This pair of contradictions constitutes the organism of human culture.Combining the topic and the material, the meaning of the topic of this composition should include the following points: the dialectical thought of the unity of opposites in things, the aesthetic principle of harmony formed by contradictions, and the law of nature's breeding of people.This requires candidates to dig out the philosophy of life and life interest contained in the mountains and rivers, and to connect and develop them.Students who have accumulated a certain amount of literature will have some advantages in association and development.

Writing Ideas Tips
The idea of ​​the article can have the following ideas: First, you can write about natural mountains and waters. You can choose a scenic spot, such as the mountains and waters of Guilin, or you can choose one of them, such as the mountains of Huangshan and the waters of Zhouzhuang.The second is from scenery to people. It can be written from natural mountains and waters to people. It describes both scenery and people, and the relationship between people and the natural environment.The third is to use scenery as a metaphor for people, and take its metaphorical meaning, such as men are like mountains, but they are not lacking in emotional agility, women are like water, but they are not lacking in emotional attachment, etc.Fourth, it can use scenes to describe things, write about cultural phenomena, write about historical relics, write about various social conditions, write about ancient and modern reflections, and so on.

Full score sample essay
The new biography of "The Peacock Flies to the Southeast"

(a candidate from Jiangsu)

When Liu Lanzhi looked back for the fifth time, she couldn't help but shed tears. The dark door was closed tightly, as indifferent as Zhongqing, and the neighbors were still pointing at her, talking about this. A woman who was divorced for not keeping women's morals.But, who can know her difficulties?

Before she got married, countless good guys came to her home to propose marriage: handsome, rich, and powerful, why did you choose Jiao Zhongqing?He is dark and thin, has no money and no power, why should he marry the beautiful and virtuous Lanzhi?Lanzhi asked herself over and over again.Tears gradually blurred Lanzhi's vision, and Jiao Zhongqing's honest and honest face reappeared in front of her eyes.It's because he likes his mountain-like simplicity and calmness!
"The concubine is the water, the king is the mountain; the water is dynamic, the mountain is steady; the water flows around the mountain and never moves; the concubine and the king will never be separated." , The mountain has no edges, and the heaven and the earth are united, so you dare to break up with Zhizhi!" The vows of eternal love are still in my ears, but things are different, and tears flow first when I want to speak!
For Zhongqing's work, Lanzhi went to the host's house, went to the west's house, and even attended some informal gatherings, forced a smile in the midst of drinking and drinking, and said good things for Zhongqing in front of the leaders.Honest Jiao Zhongqing!How do you get your wife to do these things?Do you know who during the banquet does not covet your wife's beauty?Do you know how much gossip your wife has borne alone?
When Liu Lanzhi saw the sachet left by her husband on the ground, she burst into tears. It was Qin Luofu's sachet, that was Qin Luofu's sachet!Jiao Zhongqing didn't say anything, went to the desk and wrote the divorce letter.Lanzhi seemed to hear something shattered in his chest, a blunt sound of cracking pieces...

When they got home, Lanzhi entered the room silently, without making a sound.The next day, the county magistrate's son came to propose marriage, and Lanzhi silently agreed with tears in her eyes.The auspicious day for a good day is chosen the day after tomorrow. "The day after tomorrow?" the matchmaker said to himself, "That's a good day, and Miss Qin Luofu is getting married too! It's Jiao Zhongqing."

Jiao Zhongqing! ! ! !

The sky is high and the air is cool, and the wind is smooth.Jiao Zhongqing was sitting on a tall horse with an imposing manner.At this time, he saw Lanzhi, Lanzhi who was sleeping soundly.

"The concubine is the water, the king is the mountain; the water is agile, but the depth is unchanged; the mountain is calm, but the color is not firm." When Jiao Zhongqing saw the last words Liu Lanzhi left him, he was at a loss...

The peacock flew southeast and wandered about five miles.

score review
This article is ingenious with the help of "The Peacock Flies Southeast", boldly transforms the original work according to the requirements of the composition title, and gives a new "interpretation" in the vivid and emotional narration.The article's "flexible use" of relevant classical literature resources and the realistic description of the virtual situation also add to the "persuasiveness" and literariness of the story.

last minute

(a candidate from Jiangsu)

"There are still 45 minutes to hand in the paper", I said silently in my heart, and my hands were sweating slightly.Soon, water dripped from my hands, and my heart involuntarily accelerated its beating frequency...

I will hand in the paper soon, and my composition still hasn't moved a single word.It's all my fault for my miscalculation. The previous basic knowledge questions took me nine or ten minutes. When I saw that the pointer of the watch pointed to 10:10, I yelled that it was not good, and almost shouted out for the invigilator to hear.At that time, I don't have to worry about not finishing the composition, because I must have been expelled from the examination room.

Look at the composition question again, this wise man who made the composition proposition, I should really thank him (her), no matter how smart I am at this time, I can't think of how to write "the smartness of water".Change it!Obediently! "The Calmness of the Mountain".I'm so nervous, he (she) still wants me to write calmly.My heart is beating wildly again...

After 5 minutes, my heart was surprisingly quiet.It's useless to be nervous, that thing can't let me write a composition.I have to think about it carefully, with Shan's calm state of mind.Um!A wonderful idea (at least I think it is wonderful) flashed in my mind, and I suddenly understood what is called "the agility of water".

whee!I smiled slyly and continued to conceive of my "masterpiece".Inadvertently turned around and looked, my God!There are only four and 10 minutes left, and my tears are about to flow out. I have studied hard for 11 years!I can't let a composition ruin the fruit I'm about to get.

I continue to calm down and contemplate...

Hmm... almost, there is still half an hour, probably enough to write, the fly in the ointment is that I have to give my "masterpiece" a name.An extremely ordinary but very practical topic came to mind, and I wrote it down when I was excited.

My heart finally calmed down completely.Haha, it seems that I also have the personality of "mountain calmness"!Even if there are occasional landslides or landslides, it can't hide my calm nature.By the way, I definitely still have the advantage of "the agility of water". Obviously, only "two swords combined" can write such a "masterpiece".

As for the final grading, I don't really mind whether the grading teacher likes it or not, because I have written the composition after all.This is my success. No one wants to get high scores, but it depends on strength.

In fact, doing many things requires the calmness of a mountain, which plays a major role; of course, the agility like water is also essential, because it will determine whether your achievements are significant or not.

score review
The writing is witty and emotionally authentic. The sense of tension and urgency of "There are 45 minutes left" and "There are only four and 10 minutes left", the sense of confusion in the face of composition questions, the calmness after calming down, and the joy after thinking about it, all of them are written with a full expression. Now, lifelike.The language of the article is humorous and sophisticated.What I said was that I was extremely nervous, but what I used was colloquial, seemingly joking language, humorous, decent, vivid, and fluent.

Xi'an and Nanjing

——A dialogue between mountains and water

(a candidate from Jiangsu)

Xi'an and Nanjing, Chang'an and Jinling, the ancient capitals of twelve dynasties and the ancient capitals of six dynasties, one west and one east, stand on both sides of the Huai River, the Yangtze River is silent, and the Qinling Mountains are silent, silently telling the history of the dead like this.

Xi'an, with its feet on the Wei River and its back on the Qinling Mountains.The continuous mountain peaks have given China a solid support for more than 5000 years.The Yellow Emperor, Emperor Wu of the Han Dynasty, Wu Zetian...all the figures who have shocked the past and the present are crowded at the foot of the Qinling Mountains, and there is also the eternal emperor-Shihuang.The yellow soil and the black mountain peaks are a kind of original solidity from the land, a kind of eternal tranquility.

Nanjing, the pearl on the south bank of the Yangtze River, is the criss-crossing rivers and lakes of Jiangsu and Zhejiang that give the pearl the most vivid luster.Looking up, "Qinhuai waterside pavilion blooms early", looking back, "the red apricots have faded, and the green water is surrounded by people".There, "the old things of the Six Dynasties are like flowing water", and there is "the night boat playing the flute and the rain".Nanjing uses the water endowed by heaven to outline a dreamlike, poetic and picturesque "good Jiangnan".

Qin Ling said: "The world is white clouds and dogs, and the sea will become mulberry fields. Look at the prosperous Tang Dynasty, the exiled immortal borrowed a large piece of articles to smear the prosperity of Chang'an. The gems of Persia reflect my colorful colors; the scriptures of Tianzhu , which makes me shine brightly; moreover, the peonies in Luoyang make me look charming. Who said that there is no gorgeous youth in the mountains.”

Changjiang nodded and said: "Brother Qin is right. I think back then, when the civilization of the Central Plains had flourished, the land of Jingchu had not shed its savage cloak, and it was still a wasteland. Where is the land of Jinling, which is as agile and elegant as it is today? It’s still a deserted city! At that time, I was still just flowing day and night heartlessly, maybe I was gestating an undercurrent of earth-shattering changes!”

Qin Ling continued: "Brother Jiang! You and I have both had unusual personalities, but why should future generations label our personalities? What do you say 'the benevolent enjoys mountains, the wise enjoys water', if I can only be calm Silently, I'm afraid Brother Jiang can only be beautiful and free and easy."

Changjiang replied: "It is precisely because of the label of the world that Nanjing is more than agile, but not stable. It lacks your perseverance and perseverance. Looking at the prosperous Six Dynasties, it really hurts to think about it."

Qin Ling said: "I have the same feeling. Today's western development really needs the spirit of not sticking to conventions and going forward bravely."

Changjiang said happily: "Then you and I, Nanjing and Xi'an, shoulder the history and future of China, and we should join hands to learn from each other's strengths, so that the water is not only flexible but also tough, and the mountains are not only calm but also spiritual."

Xi'an is silent, Nanjing is silent, one is backed by the Qinling Mountains, the other is on the Yangtze River, but they both face the sea, and spring blossoms in an instant.

score review
The article fits the meaning of the topic and can fully activate many of its own cultural accumulations. The article appears to be full and agile; philosophy and poetry, history and reality, and the future are all integrated into an organic whole, breaking away from the vain and The cliche of pros and cons.At the end, "use" Haizi's famous sentence, which is very appropriate and natural, and endowed with new meaning.

The meaning of a drunken man is not between mountains and rivers.
——On the Dais of the Twelve Beauties of Jinling
(a candidate from Jiangsu)

Jade belts are hung in the forest, and golden hairpins are buried in the snow.Daiyu and Baochai, these two were originally the best among the twelve beauties in Jinling, but it is also difficult for me to choose according to my own preferences.

(End of this chapter)