College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 50 The Smartness of Water, the Calmness of Mountains (2)
It is beyond reproach that Daiyu is water.Since she is a woman who came from the water town of Gusu, and she is the fairy Crimson Pearl who came down to earth to repay the kindness of the nectar, she naturally has a sweet breath.She has a moody character, a crying temper, and the talent for composing poems and lyrics, all of which have the characteristics of water—soft, ethereal, and unpredictable.

It is well known that Baochai is a mountain.As calm as her, as loyal as her, as talented as her, it is not comparable to ordinary hills.She seems to stand majestically, with the Changbai Mountain with thousands of years of ice and snow on top.Her catkin words further set off her mountain-like calmness; the east wind blows evenly!Even the catkins, which are so uncertain, are also written by her as if they are rooted in the earth, solid and steady.Didn't Mother Jia praise her so much?

However, Daiyu has her unchanging side: her love for Baoyu.Regarding love, I don't seem to be able to express too many opinions, but I believe that this kind of love regards dirty riches, nobles and nobles as dirt, and does not presuppose punctuality against one's will.It is built on the water surface of mutual appreciation and mutual understanding, clean but ethereal.This is the greatest comedy but also the greatest tragedy - no fame and title, no right family, no conditions necessary for the society at that time, only the feeble love.So, everything burst like a soap bubble.

Baochai is not the case, regardless of the role she plays in "Bao Dai" love, just look at her behavior: she is kind and strong, so the description of Xiren in the last sentence is also suitable for her.She treats people with kindness and kindness, no matter who she is, she treats everyone equally, and laughs away after being offended by someone's words.This requires a heart as broad as the sea, and a mind as gentle and flexible as water.Being able to do this is considered a kind of realm—combining the calmness of mountains and the flexibility of water.

It's a pity that Baoyu is a lover.He could see the beauty of mountains and rivers, and the beauty of Chai and Dai, but he only chose a ladle of water.From the perspective of me, a bystander, water is indispensable, but without a solid foundation like mountains, no matter how beautiful the water is, I can only watch it fall from the fingers, little by little. fell, but could do nothing.I know that what Cao Xueqin wants to praise is this pure and beautiful love, but I think this is too idealistic.Perhaps, a place with mountains and water is the most suitable place for people to live. My lifelong ambition is to build such a place.

In other words, the meaning of my "drunkard" is not in the mountains and rivers, but in the cultivation of agility and stability.

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The examinee wanders in the world of literature and art, sees off the colorful life, contemplates in the candle light of life philosophy, and then "takes in everything", gathers valuable materials on the focus of conception, and thus bursts out Come out with dazzling special brilliance.It gives full play to its own rich cultural accumulation advantages, moves the pen freely, talks about Chai and Dai, and is closely related to the topic in conception but different from the usual ones.The unique perspective of the author's selection of materials and the awareness of actively displaying a distinctive personality are worthy of encouragement.

Fish's Tears·Water's Heart
(a candidate from Jiangsu)

Fish says to Water: "You cannot see my tears, because I am in the water."

Water says to Fish: "I know you are crying, because you are in my heart."

After watching too many Korean dramas and reading too many romance novels, it is inevitable that my heart will be full of turmoil, longing for the vigorous love, and dreaming of the dreamlike scene.

Since I was born, my parents have fostered me at my grandma's house for business reasons.Since I was sensible, I spent every day in the scolding of my grandparents.Grandpa likes to smoke dry tobacco, and he often smokes enough by himself before going out to work.In the middle of the night, I often heard grandpa coughing.Grandma was often woken up by grandpa's cough, so she couldn't bear it and yelled: "You old bastard, you can't smoke and smoke, you can kill yourself if you smoke." But grandma was weak and sick, but couldn't stay idle, running outside all day, running I picked up branches on the road, ran to the field to dry rice, and took water upstairs to clean the room. I was reluctant to use tap water, so I played in the yard by myself, so I often fell ill and spent a lot of money on medicine.For this reason, grandpa also yelled: "Are you having trouble with money..." I really don't know why the two of them got together.

I heard my father said: Grandpa’s family was very poor back then, and he couldn’t afford a wife at the age of 30, but grandma was the daughter of a landlord’s family. She married early and later became pregnant with a son, but her husband died before the child was born, so she remarried to grandpa.Although grandma is amazing everywhere, because she is remarried, her father doesn't recognize her, and grandpa also dislikes her.Grandma also thought grandpa was poor, but since grandma was pregnant, grandpa couldn't bear to drive grandma away, so they lived like this.Grandma likes to eat sweet potatoes the most, because when grandpa was captured by the Kuomintang to serve as a soldier, grandma asked a fortune teller to make a fortune, saying that eating sweet potatoes for a month will keep grandpa safe.So grandma sold out all the furniture and ate yams every day.Unexpectedly, grandpa really took the opportunity to go to the toilet and ran back home.From then on, grandma fell in love with Yam, even more than grandpa. Unfortunately, they did not live happily ever after, but began a lifetime of quarreling and scolding.

The healthy grandfather suddenly died in bed due to high blood pressure.According to grandma, she took a fly swatter to wake up grandpa that morning, but she didn't expect to get any response after playing for a long time, only to find out later...

After Grandpa passed away, the house was indeed quiet, so quiet that it made people panic.Grandpa's tobacco rod was not burned, but grandma left it.She smoked and coughed in front of the portrait of her grandfather every day, saying that her grandfather had no cigarettes in the ground, and she would get bored and panic.

Perhaps, true love should be as calm and flexible as water, like a fish swimming freely in the water, but there are churning fish tears, it is contained by the water...

score review
Candidates used simple, seemingly unadorned brushstrokes to describe their grandparents' "a life of quarreling and scolding".But in this quarreling life, we have seen the deep love hidden in it.This kind of great love, the most beloved in ordinary life, is in stark contrast to the superficially vigorous love and the "dream-like scene" in Korean dramas and romance novels.Or it can be said that the "love" in Korean dramas and romance novels is just the vivid ripples on the water; while the "love" between grandparents is the deep blue formed by the vivid ripples.

water growth
(a candidate from Jiangsu)

Water is like children, they grow up, but in the eyes of parents, children will always be children.

Mountains are like parents. Although they are getting old day by day, in the eyes of children, they are calm and reliable. Parents are like mountains, and parents will always be parents.

The small water droplets in the sky, one drop or two... condense into a thick cloud, just like the fetus in the mother's womb, growing up day by day.

The raindrops fell, and they joined the stream at the foot of the mountain, jumping for joy.They run along the mountain and follow the guidance of the mountain.Like a parent teaching a stumbling child to walk.

The stream followed the guidance of the mountain and entered the river. The river rolled up small water splashes, one or two... like naughty children making faces and blinking at their parents.But the mountain is calm, and the mountain has the majesty of the mountain. Looking at the splash on the river, they just smiled quietly.They are responsible for the lives of woods, grass, birds and even human beings.So they are heavy, and they cannot play with the river.

Gradually the river understood that they were no longer as naughty as before. They surged up the river and licked the soles of Dashan's feet quietly, so that Dashan's numb feet could relax.

The children also understood. They took a basin of warm water and put it at the feet of their parents who had just returned home from get off work, took off their shoes for them, moistened their parents' feet with water, and felt the roughness between their toes with their hands.

The river is getting wider and wider, looking at the heavy mountain, it thinks it should share some of the heavy for the mountain, so it carried the boat.Looking at the river, Shan smiled very comfortably, just like the kind of smile parents see when their children tidy up their home.

Gradually the river came to the plain, and it gradually drifted away from the mountain. The shadow of the mountain has long been blurred, but the mountain is still clear in the memory of the river.At this time, the river can already carry heavy ships.

Dashan was looking out, and the meandering river stretched out to nowhere. "My child, be careful on the road!" Dashan said silently in his heart.

Finally, the river came to the mouth of the sea, and it, which used to be happy and lively, merged into the deep sea, imitating the calmness of the mountains, and the sea water was dark blue; at this time, the million-ton ships were carrying goods and travelers in its vast ocean. driving on the face.

score review
This article uses the metaphors of "water is like a child" and "mountains are like parents" to give the topic a life-like freshness, and the natural growth and association of family affection and blood relationship bring life to the topic's speculative thinking color.The author's conception is very delicate and vivid.In bright and lively language, the full text not only fully narrates the growth process of children under the love and care of their parents, but also very vividly points out that the stream gradually merges into the sea, which has the title meaning of "the calmness of the mountain, and the deep blue color of the sea".

cultural character
(a candidate from Jiangsu)

Everything has a character, water has a character of water - agile; mountains have a character of mountains - calm.Culture should also have its character, but what is the character of culture?Is it the agility of water or the calmness of mountains?

I have always longed to go to the Northwest alone, chasing the sound of camel bells that have disappeared for thousands of years in the whistling wind; I have always longed to go to the south of the Yangtze River alone, strolling on the path in the retreat garden on a night full of moonlight and wind, breathing greedily With the fragrance of sandalwood brought by the evening wind.There are countless tourist attractions, famous mountains and great rivers. The reason why I choose the Northwest where the wind is howling and the Jiangnan where the grass grows and warblers is flying is because I think that only the desolate and tragic Northwest culture and the light and lively Jiangnan culture can represent Chinese culture and represent China. cultural character.

I call the culture of the south of the Yangtze River the agility of the water; I call the culture of the northwest the calmness of the mountains.In terms of poetry, if Jiangnan culture is the light and bright Qijue, Northwest culture is the simple and simple Wugu; if Jiangnan culture is Li Bai's fresh and elegant, Northwest culture is Du Fu's depression.In terms of words, if the Jiangnan culture is Liu Yong's lingering sentimentality, the Northwest culture is Dongpo's unrestrained boldness; , a romantic figure through the ages".Looking for musical instruments, if the culture of the south of the Yangtze River is the erhu, which is about to cry, the culture of the northwest is the suona, which is melodious and loud.In terms of characters, if Jiangnan culture is like a woman who washes her feet by the stream, Northwest culture is like a shepherd with frosted hair on her temples;Looking at the time sequence, if the culture in the south of the Yangtze River is like the spring and March when the warblers are flying around, the culture in the northwest is like the late autumn and the severe winter when the autumn wind is blowing, raining and snowing.If the Jiangnan culture is bright and colorful like Wen Feiqing, then the Northwest culture is Wang Anshi’s quiet and introverted style; the Jiangnan culture is as elegant and elegant as a guzheng solo, while the Northwest culture is like a war of battles billowing with smoke; if the Jiangnan culture...Northwest culture is... Heaven nourishes the Jiangnan culture and the Northwest culture with the agility of the water and the calmness of the mountains, so that the Chinese culture will not be too monotonous and lonely.

finally, I understand.

The character of culture has both the agility of water and the calmness of mountains.The two are like fish playing in water, they fit together seamlessly, forming a splendid Chinese culture, Chinese civilization!

The agility of water...

The calmness of the mountain...

Splendid Chinese culture...

score review
The beginning of this article is from the "character" of landscape to the dazzling theme of "character of culture".The main part cleverly chooses the very representative Jiangnan culture and Northwest culture as the fulcrum of the writing, and fully expounds the rich connotations of Chinese culture's "smart" and "stable" from the aspects of nature, literature, music, etc. .The full-text quotes are natural and calm, the image selection is clear and typical, and the writing is written in one go, showing elegant writing and full of talent.

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