College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 60 Ordinary and Proud

(2004 Liaoning volume)

composition test questions
Read the text below, according to what the article says.

When a reporter interviewed a celebrity's mother, she said: "You must be very proud to have such an outstanding son." The mother agreed: "Yes. However, I also have a son who also makes me proud. He Digging potatoes in the field." The mother's words are thought-provoking.It is indeed proud to be successful and famous; but it is also enough to be proud of being ordinary and fulfilling.Please write an article on the topic of "ordinary and proud" based on your own experience and feelings.

[Notice]

①What you write must be within the scope of the topic.The material cited in the test questions may or may not be used by the candidate in the article. ② Make up your own mind. ③The style is optional. ④The topic is self-made. ⑤ Not less than 800 words. ⑥No plagiarism.

Question Analysis
The 2004 college entrance examination Liaoning composition questions followed the proposition method of topic composition since 1999, that is: provide a piece of material - briefly comment on the material - raise the topic - put forward writing requirements (or precautions).Judging from the intention of the questioner, the topic of "ordinary and proud" is to ask candidates to clarify the relationship between the two and finally praise the ordinary.Just like this, in the materials provided, the mother is also "proud" of her son who is "digging potatoes in the field", which has begun to appear. In the comment section of the materials, "Success and fame are indeed proud; , is also enough to be proud of", which set the tone for this question.To write this question well, while capitalizing "ordinary", the word "proud" must be highlighted, and the word "and" must also be highlighted, that is, the relationship between the two must be written.In addition, candidates must distinguish between "ordinary" and "mediocre", and the two should not be confused at the point of writing.Generally speaking, although this composition question is "popular", it seems a bit "flat" and even a bit outdated.

Writing Ideas Tips
According to the materials, candidates can conceive from the following angles: [-]. It is a kind of pride to make extraordinary achievements, and it is also a kind of pride to maintain an ordinary heart; [-]. Pride does not lie in whether you are great or not, but in your Whether life is fulfilling; [-]. Without an ordinary life, there will be no pride after success; whether it is ordinary or famous, whether you are proud or not depends on your attitude towards life.After conceiving, candidates should also pay attention to novel insights, novel ideas, unique inferences, and personality traits when writing essays.

Full score sample essay
Ordinary and proud

(a candidate from Liaoning)

At that time, Comrade Liu Shaoqi said to Shi Chuanxiang, a excrement worker in Beijing: You are a cleaner, and you are a servant of the people; I am the president of the country, and I am also a servant of the people, but the division of labor is different.

When I read this passage, I thought it was just propaganda.

However, not long ago, a city in the south gave cleaners a collective two-day holiday to remind citizens of the importance of cleaners.As a result, in less than two days, the city was surrounded by rubbish, the stench was foul, and sewage flowed across the river.

At this time, all the citizens also realized the importance of cleaners to the city and to our lives.

In real life, there are many people who work silently in ordinary positions for decades.

Decades are like a day, without perseverance, without endurance, it is absolutely impossible to persevere.Moreover, among those thousands of ordinary people, there are many people who have the opportunity to leave their ordinary positions and take up positions that ordinary people think are more proud and worthy of showing off.However, they didn't, they persisted in their ordinary positions, because their positions cannot be separated from them.

We often say that a soldier who does not want to be a marshal is not a good soldier.However, on the long borders of the motherland, on the countless sea islands, in those remote border stations and border posts, it is not the marshal, but only a few or even a soldier.These fighters face the vast desert and the insignificant sea during the day; at night, they face the vast starry sky and the lonely barracks, only the sound of wind, waves, insects and frogs.However, no matter how harsh the environment is, no matter how lonely the heart is, our soldiers have persisted. Why?For the tranquility of the frontier of the motherland.

The hardship and loneliness of the frontier checkpoints can better show the perseverance and greatness of our soldiers—although they are not marshals, and even in this life they have no chance of military medals...

This society, this world, should be an organism organized by all walks of life and various positions.The marshal has the contribution of the marshal, and the soldier has the splendor of the soldier.

Therefore, the philosopher said that the ruler is shorter and the inch is longer.Ordinary people have extraordinary deeds, and there are often amazing and touching deeds in the ordinary.

Gu Hongming said: There is only one teapot with four cups, but I have never seen a cup with four teapots.

But a teapot has the function of a teapot, and a cup has the function of a cup, and the two cannot replace each other.

Proud to be a teapot.

Make a cup, just as proud.

score review
The success of this article lies in the control of materials and the comprehensive use of various description techniques, which are natural, skillful and integrated.The language is generally based on line drawing, which seems very simple, but when it comes to border soldiers, the text is full of emotion, and the emotional parts even make people cry.The two scenes are deep and deep, and the sufficient examples enrich the text, but the reading does not feel chaotic, and the internal layering is clear. It can be seen that the careful structural design can make the writing freely.

I am ordinary, I am proud

(a candidate from Liaoning)

The grass is ordinary, but it blooms green silently, it is proud, because of it, the earth is full of vitality; the stone is ordinary, but it is willing to act as a paving stone, it is proud, because of it , people have a road; farmers are ordinary, but they work silently, they are proud, because of them, society has huge material wealth...

Wang Guozhen said: "If you want to live happily, you can only live a simple life; if you want to live a brilliant life, you can only live a miserable life; if you want to live a long life, you can only live an ordinary life." Yes, to a certain extent, ordinary is also a supreme state in life.In the ordinary, we can enjoy a good mood alone; in the ordinary, we can savor life carefully; in the ordinary, we don't have to care about other people's eyes.

If you are a student with average grades and an average appearance, you are dissatisfied with your life at this time; if you are an ordinary worker, you are complaining about your life at this time; Workers, you are frowning because of the hardships of life... Then, I want to say to you: Although you are ordinary, you are also worthy of pride.Because at the very least, you can face the reality in front of you without running away from life.If you can overcome everything in front of you, then you will have new gains.

In ordinary life, we need to maintain an ordinary heart, then we will not have many troubles, and we can enjoy life to the fullest.In ordinary life, thinking that we have also created endless material wealth for the motherland, then our hearts will be filled with incomparable pride.

Lei Feng is an ordinary soldier, but he is an extraordinary "screw"; Li Suli is an ordinary bus conductor, but she has become a model worker... In ordinary positions, as long as we work hard, You can also make some achievements.

Shu Ting once said: "I am simple, so I am happy; I am ordinary, so I am rich. Keep an ordinary heart and make extraordinary careers." Yes, an ordinary life is rich.In ordinary life, we can savor happiness to our heart's content, without too much pressure, and can calmly strive for a better life.

In an ordinary life, I will maintain an ordinary heart—but not an ordinary heart, and work hard for my life calmly.In this way, I can say without shame: I am simple, I am happy; I am ordinary, I am proud!
score review
Starting from the times and life, the candidates explained the greatness and ordinary meaning of the ordinary.Whether it is an example or a quotation, everything is natural and appropriate, and has become an organic part of the article without any traces of stickers.The article is eloquent and convincing. "Ordinary is a kind of realm", with novel insights, can be called a highlight sentence.

That undying pride
(a candidate from Liaoning)

What is the relationship between pride and excellence?Most people would think that they are a pair of brothers who are like brothers and sisters, but people only see the form that they go hand in hand, but they don't pay attention to the situation where the two run counter to each other.Is the only word "outstanding" worthy of pride?
In the past, rich African ladies had to wear iron rings weighing [-] jin when they went out. They distinguished themselves from commoner women who were striding around in the scorching sun by their staggering gait. Listening to the envy of others, a sense of satisfaction arises spontaneously .There is also the pride of today's singers, movie stars, and influential figures... These illusions of pride make civilization restless.However, countless tragic stories have proved that once the edifice of money collapses, the halo of honor is eclipsed, and everything is gone.So who would admit that a mother looks at her toddler with less pride than Bill Gates' mother?I don't think so.

It is an open secret in modern society to use the ordinary of the majority to highlight the excellence of the few.However, ordinary people can not have pride?Suddenly remembered an advertisement: The little boy said in frustration, Mom, I am only No.2.Mom touched his head and said: Baby, you will always be number one in mom's eyes.When I saw this ad, I felt an inexplicable feeling in my heart.Yes, so what if you are not the first?As long as we do our best, the ordinary second is also worthy of pride.Have you ever felt inferior because of your ordinaryness?But doesn't a potato digger bring the same pride to a mother as a great president?

I am very ordinary, but ordinary is special.I am one of countless stars, but I am proud of my light today; I am a flower bud on the earth, although it is not fragrant and dazzling, I am proud of the coming bloom.I am ordinary, but ordinary has value; I am ordinary, but ordinary has dignity!
In the past, when Wang Zhaojun walked up to the Golden Luan Hall, facing dozens of condescending gazes, she secretly told herself: All the civil and military men in the court are looking at me/Don’t be nervous, don’t be arrogant/I’m going to walk slowly/Slowly /Afraid of what/ The emperor does not want people to support him!In this regard, I have to admire Zhaojun's arrogance and courage from the bottom of my heart. This is the dignity of ordinary people, and this is the pride of ordinary people!The moment Zhaojun went up to the hall with his head held high, a mandala flower was destined to bloom brilliantly.It was just an ordinary flower, not a gold or silver sculpture, but its light was enough to eclipse all gold and silver.

The ordinary me ran to the ordinary you; the ordinary him met the ordinary her.Ordinary things make up this ordinary world.Facing the vast sky and the vast universe, what is not ordinary?Let the ordinary us raise our arms, cheer for the ordinary, and be proud of the ordinary!Because this ordinary place is pregnant with eternal beauty.

score review
The purpose of the article is clear and the thinking is broad.From the flaunting of wealth by the rich lady in Africa to the pride and pride of modern figures, from the cut-in of advertising shots to the reference to Zhaojun Shangdian, it spreads out layer by layer, opening and closing with a degree.The language of the article is fluent and the sentence structure is flexible, especially the use of questions, which effectively enhances the momentum of the writing.

gardener whisper
(a candidate from Liaoning)

The afterglow of the setting sun dissipated, and night fell slowly.At this moment, I am walking quietly in the garden, observing every clump of flowers and every border of fragrant grass with pity; I am listening to the singing of birds and the singing of insects.In an instant, the silver light of the bright moon filled the spring garden, and I couldn't help being intoxicated in the warm and comfortable night scene, savoring the connotation of life and the cause of life.

More than ten years ago, due to chance, I became a gardener, an ordinary gardener.Doing the seemingly monotonous and ordinary work every day, watering flowers, pruning branches, transplanting, grafting, constantly pouring my sweat, and constantly displaying my ingenuity, and I always look forward to the blooming of flowers and the world. Add more spring colors.This ordinary labor and ordinary work contains the brilliance of wisdom and the value of life.As a result, I feel that my life is full and joyful, and I feel psychologically comfortable and proud.

Flowers are an integral part of nature and a wonderful display of nature's vitality.As a gardener who grows flowers as a career, I am the most suitable to realize the spirituality and beauty of flowers and plants.When I saw the seeds of hope breaking out of the ground in the face of the cold spring, I seemed to feel that a precious spirit appeared in front of people; when I smelled the refreshing fragrance of flowers, I suddenly felt the holiness and harmony of nature. The loveliness of life; when I saw the scene of colorful flowers and plants posing in the wind in front of tourists, I suddenly had a strange reverie, as if I felt that the flowers and plants were pouring out the joy of life and exuding the vitality of youth; Especially when the scene of swarms of bees gathering honey jumped into my eyes, my thoughts would be rippling hard to calm down...

Flowers and plants decorate people's living environment and bring infinite joy and beauty to people.And I silently fiddled with the beautiful things that nature bestowed on the world with hard sweat, and I realized the meaning of ordinary work and the thickness of life connotation.It turns out that if a person can do useful things for people and even mankind in his own job position and at a certain coordinate of social life, and fulfill his due responsibilities, then even if he is in an ordinary position and engaged in ordinary things Work is also a worthy life, and it will also generate a sense of pride in the spiritual world.It is difficult to predict what position a person can make a contribution to in his life, but no matter where he is, he must work hard to contribute to the society. This is the cause of being ordinary and proud.

It was late at night, and the birds were sitting in their nests, locking their voices tightly, only the chirping of insects.My thoughts are still flying, a gust of wind brings the fragrance of flowers, I take a deep breath, and feel the fullness of life and the power of pride.

score review
This is an argumentative lyrical essay. The examinee expressed the inner connection between "ordinary and proud" in the tone of a gardener, pointing out that even if a person is in an ordinary position and engaged in an ordinary job, as long as he has done something for the motherland and the people, For beneficial things, if you do your due responsibilities, you will have a sense of pride in your inner world that you can identify with.The angle of thinking in the article is novel, the theme is profound and clear, and various techniques such as scene description, lyricism, and discussion meet the needs of expression and expression, and it is a matter of course.The length of sentences is well arranged, and the writing is natural and ironic, which can be called a good product of on-the-spot composition.

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