College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 80 Shoulder (1)
(2006 Liaoning volume)

composition test questions
Subject: Shoulders
Requirements: Except for poetry, the style of writing is optional.No less than 800 words.

Question Analysis
In 2006, the composition topic of the college entrance examination in Liaoning Province was changed from a phrase-based composition in 2005 to a word-based composition.It is quite similar to the 2005 Jiangxi Provincial College Entrance Examination essay question "Take 'Face' as the Topic". Both "face" and "shoulder" are part of the human body, and both are places full of meaning.Therefore, candidates will not feel unfamiliar when they see this topic.The first thing most candidates think when they see the composition test questions is to think of their parents first, think of what their parents have paid for them, and think of their parents as the support of their life and the crutch of their life journey. Therefore, it is easier to write. The content of the book is also relatively large, the key is how to choose the angle to reflect a certain degree of novelty.From the subject matter point of view, "except for poetry, the style of writing is optional", so in the face of this question, candidates can write short stories, plays, fairy tales, fables, essays, speeches, etc., which are all good choices; A certain degree of difficulty.

Writing Ideas Tips
"Shoulders" is a topic with a symbolic meaning, the determination of the theme is flexible, the use of themes is selective, and the selection of materials is extensive.If you only stay on tangible shoulders, such as father's shoulders, farmer's shoulders, friends' shoulders, etc., it is superficial and it is difficult to get high scores.We should dig deep into its rich connotations, transfer the tangible shoulders to the invisible (spiritual) shoulders, endow the shoulders with many meanings, and extract more profound themes.The best idea should be to write about society and life.It should be about responsibilities or fulfilling a personal mission.The scope of writing is also relatively large, ranging from small individuals to large societies and groups.It can be said that it should fully reflect the purpose that our students should pay attention to society.

Full score sample essay
shoulder
(a candidate from Liaoning)

Mr. Feng Zikai has a cartoon: a pedestrian, slightly arched, carrying a heavy bag, walks alone on the mountain road. "Bearing all the sorrows of the past and the present on one shoulder", this is the title of the painting.

Since ancient times, due to the wisdom and stupidity of human beings, sorrow has been like erupting volcanic lava, stacked, frozen, and cooled...

In the world, there are people who are willing to bear all the sorrows of the past and the present on their shoulders. What kind of spirit is this!How tragic!Maybe there is still a little helplessness...

The long river of history is tumbling, it is Li Bai, "the white hair is three thousand feet long, and the fate seems to be long", but what he is worried about is the misfortune of being demoted, so he came to this bank to drink away his sorrow.It's Li Yu, "How much sorrow can I ask you? It's like a river of spring water flowing eastward", but what he worries about is only the sorrow of the small homeland. In the end, the empress of the Southern Tang Dynasty can only end up in a cup of poisoned wine.It's Li Qingzhao, "This time, why is there such a word of worry", but she is just worried and yearning forever!
Who is worried about the sorrow of the world?Who is worried about the disasters of ancient and modern times?They lingered, pondered, and shed tears on this shore, and history carved their immortal names on the reefs on the shore.

Doctor Sanlu has stayed and thought about it, "The road is long and long, and I will search up and down." This is the portrayal of his feelings!Going to Miluo, this is the continuation of his melancholy!I saw his sorrow, saw his pain, he walked away silently, but left it to future generations with sorrow and joy!
Mr. Lu Xun stayed, and he criticized with an iron-like pen. The choice of abandoning medicine and pursuing literature was because he was sad, and he had the sorrow from ancient times to the present on his shoulders! He criticized the society of "cannibalism"; he made the appeal to "save the children";Because he is fearless, he will bear this endless sorrow and give the world an explanation!
"Some people are dead, but they are still alive." How many people's sorrows travel through time and space, and continue to this day;yes!They are still alive, they are still worrying.

Bear the sorrows of the past and the present on one shoulder, bear the sorrow of the world, carry the enlightenment of the predecessors, and leave the inspiration for future generations.Is it a responsibility or an obligation?It is the responsibility!

Bear all the worries of the past and the present on one shoulder, and bear the rise and fall of the nation.Worry and labor can rejuvenate the country, and Yiyu can perish.They once left their names in the rise of the nation, immortalized in the annals of history, and their names will last forever!

It takes courage and strength to shoulder all the sorrows of the past and the present, but this is an important task that every passionate son and daughter of the Chinese nation should shoulder. No one can back down, no one can back down!
It takes a solid shoulder to bear all the worries of the past and the present!
score review
The article is well thought out and well selected.Candidates wrote around the phrase "one shoulder bears all the sorrows of the past and the present", taking historical figures as the fixed point of thinking, and listed the deeds of historical figures such as Li Bai, Li Yu, Li Qingzhao, Qu Yuan, Lu Xun, etc., and used them to prove that the "sorrows of the past and the present" It is a kind of responsibility to the country and society. Those who can take on such "ancient and modern worries" should have solid shoulders.The structure of the article is rigorous, the sentences are fast and slow, and the whole sentences appear alternately, and the language is rich.

Celebrity Quotes
The white hair is three thousand feet long, and the fate seems to be long. —— Li Bai

How much can I ask you to worry?Just like a river of spring water flowing eastward. ——Li Yu

For the first time this time, what a word of worry. ——Li Qingzhao
The road is long and long, and I will search up and down. —— Qu Yuan

Thousand pointing fingers, head bowed as a willing ox. ——Classic case of Lu Xun

Li Bai, Li Yu, Li Qingzhao, Qu Yuan, Lu Xun

shoulder
(a candidate from Liaoning)

A bird welcomes the wind and rain with a pair of wings, and a man lifts up the sky and the earth with a pair of shoulders.

Every time I see the birds flapping their wings in the wind and rain, I will be moved by the tragic scene.

The Creator is really miraculous. This little bird is bred with the ability to face the wind and rain—the wings, which make it constantly incite and fight for survival.The non-stop wings are more like the shoulders of human beings who never shrink back-the shoulders that are ready to shoulder heavy burdens at any time, no matter whether they are thin or strong, they are silently bearing the heavy pressure between heaven and earth.

Yes, human shoulders are like the wings of birds, born to withstand pressure.The natural silence of the shoulders is the potential to resist pressure.The strength of the shoulders is invisible to the naked eye, and the only thing that proves the potential of the shoulders is the heavy burden—the ideal and responsibility of life.In the face of ideals and responsibilities, he silently bears on his shoulders without complaint, bears all the burdens between heaven and earth, and stirs up heaven and earth with incredible ability.

Any suffering inflicted on human beings is a responsibility of human beings - love.And no human ideal can lose that responsibility—love.Without love, we can't talk about ideals and responsibilities, and it's hard to realize the potential of our shoulders.Only love can maximize the potential of the shoulders, realize beautiful ideals, and shoulder mountainous responsibilities.

Cong Fei, a singer who bears the pressure silently and picks up 170 and eight poor children with his shoulders, composes a magnificent poem of life with his selfless love, supports the burden on his shoulders with his selfless love, and realizes the dream with his selfless love. The ideal of "letting children who can't read books carry their schoolbags and continue to study" also tells the true meaning of dedication with his selfless love.Cong Fei, his oppressed shoulders have always carried the burden silently. In the face of increasing pressure, he maximized the bearing potential of his shoulders until the last breath of his life, and cast a perfect curtain for his life.

Cong Fei's shoulders embody the great spirit of mankind.His shoulders contained the power enough to stir up the heavens and the earth.Such a pair of shoulders is worthy of being human shoulders.Are there more than one or two difficulties and even disasters that a person has to face in his life?When we face difficulties and disasters, please don't hang down your strong shoulders.You know, the sky is big and the earth is big, they are not as big as our shoulders!Let us put Cong Fei's spirit into our shoulders, stimulate the potential of our shoulders, take responsibility for ourselves and others, help ourselves or others to overcome difficulties and disasters, rebuild our spiritual home, and re-raise our life sailing!
A life that takes on heavy responsibilities is perfect, and a life that shoulders the world is spectacular.Let us stand shoulder to shoulder, dedicate the strength of the shoulders, gather the love of the shoulders, and sing the life of the shoulders!

score review
This article is closely related to the topic and has lofty ideas.At the beginning of the article, the use of analogy reveals the role of shoulders on people. Then, by citing Cong Fei’s deeds, he praises Cong Fei’s character, and uses the most common materials to explain the connotation of the topic. Unique insights, this is a very witty way of reviewing essay questions.

wonderful words
The natural silence of the shoulders is the potential to resist pressure.

shoulder
(a candidate from Liaoning)

The mountain uses its shoulders to support the sunset of the long river, which looks so magnificent and boundless; the sea uses its shoulders to support the turbulent waves, which looks so surging;

Human shoulders are more beautiful, magnificent and colorful than those of nature.Different shoulders of human beings interpret different lives, different histories, and different stories.

Shoulders, deduce the situation of history.The shoulders of Qin Shihuang should be the broadest. He connected the Great Wall and built thousands of miles, defending the frontier like shoulders; the shoulders of Li Bai and Du Fu should be the strongest. The shoulders of Deng Xiaoping should be the most intelligent, with guns on their shoulders, and they have created a new China together with the Chinese people; .From ancient times to the present, countless heroes have interpreted the history of China with their shoulders, how broad and strong those shoulders are, how wise and powerful they are; those shoulders are the symphony of history, the poems of wisdom, and the glory of the Chinese nation. A symbol is an endless historical carol.

shoulders, interpreting a perfect life.When Hong Zhanhui faced the dilemma of life, he used his shoulders to shoulder the burden of family life and the responsibility of taking care of his sister.The misfortune of life left many bloodstains on his shoulders, but he performed a beautiful life with his strong and brave shoulders.When Xu Benyu went to the countryside, he carried a round of fiery sun on his shoulders, sending warmth, knowledge and the future to the children in the mountainous areas.His shoulders may not be mature enough, his shoulders may not be strong enough, but these shoulders are enough to move people to tears and inspire people to move forward.Yes, their shoulders have interpreted a beautiful life for us, and it is they who have interpreted the meaning of life for us with their shoulders.

Shoulders, interpreting the story of family affection.When I was young, I liked to sit on my father's shoulders. At that time, I was so tall and looked far away. My father was like a giant, carrying my young heart on his shoulders.When I grow up, I like to lean on my father's shoulders, because with this shoulder, I am not afraid of being deceived by bad people, and I have the courage to walk a good life.

Shoulder, as long as you have a pair of discerning eyes, you will find its meaning and value, and you will find that it is indeed beautiful. It constantly deduces the historical situation, beautiful life and sincere family affection.

Shoulder, let us perform it with true feelings, let it spin with true feelings to create a beautiful dance music, echoing in our hearts.

score review
The beginning of the article is very ingenious, starting from the shoulders of nature, and then extended to the shoulders of human beings, connecting with nature.The main part of the article expresses the understanding and praise of shoulders from three aspects: "Shoulders, interpreting the historical situation", "Shoulders, interpreting the perfect life", "Shoulders, interpreting the story of family affection", from ancient to present, from far to near , with a wide perspective, appropriate material selection, substantial content, and exquisite language, it is indeed a masterpiece in the examination room.

classic case
Qin Shihuang, Li Bai, Du Fu, Chairman Mao, Deng Xiaoping, new generation leaders, Hong Zhanhui, Xu Benyu
shoulder
(a candidate from Liaoning)

The shoulders carry happiness, and the shoulders are the concern of family; the shoulders carry happiness, and the shoulders are the sustenance of friendship; the shoulders carry sweetness, and the shoulders are the companionship of love.When you mention your shoulders, you think of relying on it.

Shoulders are the support of emotions.

(End of this chapter)