College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 81 Shoulder (2)
When I was a child, I liked to sit beside my mother, lean on her shoulders, watch my mother choose vegetables, and listen to my mother telling stories.My mother's shoulders made me feel happy and made me feel a warmth from the bottom of my heart. At that time, my mother's shoulders were the harbor of love.Later, when I grew up, one day suddenly, I found that I was already taller than my mother, and I could no longer tilt my head slightly and lean comfortably on my mother's shoulder like before.But my mother said: "Now, I can finally rely on you." Seeing my mother leaning happily on my shoulders, I understand that I have grown up and can become my mother's support.I also want to give my mother happiness and let her feel the warmth.Small shoulders, from mother's to mine.It is the shoulders that let me experience the warmth of family affection and let me learn to cherish family affection.

Shoulders are the support of emotions.

My friend is shorter than me.I often go for walks with her, whenever she is tired or upset, she will lean on my shoulder.She obviously had a happy face, but she kept "complaining" in her mouth: "You are too thin, you are so cute." Seeing how she leaned on my shoulder like a little bird but kept complaining, I felt very dissatisfied in my heart, "bullying" me because of my short stature, then who would I lean on when I was tired and unhappy.She understands my thoughts. When she sees that I am unhappy, she will find a step to stop, and then stand on a high step and say to me: "Let me lend you my shoulder." Her shoulders are also very warm, and she Will let me lean on without moving.Small shoulders, a friend's, mine.It is the shoulders that let me appreciate the joy of friendship and let me learn to cherish friendship.

Shoulders are the support of emotions.

Most of the lovers in TV dramas are petite women leaning on the strong shoulders of men, looking very happy and sweet.I think that shoulder must also be full of love for each other, so that each other has a sense of security at home.Small shoulders, men's, women's.It is the shoulders that let me know another kind of emotion in this world, let me understand the beauty of love.

The shoulders of my mother let me experience the warmth of family affection; the shoulders of my friends let me experience the joy of friendship; maybe I will rely on another shoulder in the future to experience the beauty of another relationship.It is the shoulders that make me feel the beauty of thousands of emotions in this world. I love these shoulders, big and small.

Shoulders are the support of emotions.

score review
The author sticks to the topic closely, the pen follows the heart, and the emotion flows naturally; the language is childish without losing literary talent, sincere and moving without lack of rational thinking.Candidates ingeniously start the chapter with parallelism, in order of growth time, and gradually deepen their understanding of shoulders - shoulders are the care of family, shoulders are the sustenance of friendship, shoulders are the companionship of love, etc., revealing the meaning of shoulders - shoulders , is the theme of emotional dependence.

shoulder
(a candidate from Liaoning)

The shoulders are like a solid sky pillar, which can hold up a piece of historical sky.

--Inscription

The stars are changing, the sea is changing, and the wheel of history is turning all the time.The years are like the sea, the life of Wutong, and the historical environment of different times have created all kinds of historical figures.Although they have different temperaments and live in different places, they all have a pair of strong shoulders, high-pitched and unyielding, and bear the burden of the times with arrogance...

"Dedicate yourself to death, and then die"

——Loyal Zhuge Liang
Once upon a time, the former master of the Shu Han Dynasty invited Kong Ming to stay in the thatched hut three times, but he refused to be an official. After Xiao Zhuge of Wolong, who stayed alone in the thatched hut, was moved by Xuande's heartfelt words, he swore to serve the country and plead for the people, so that Xing Since then, the burden of the Fuhan Dynasty has historically fallen on his shoulders.He didn't feel heavy, because he was full of desire to repay the kindness of Gu Maolu, and he was full of enthusiasm for revitalizing the Han Dynasty.As a loyal minister, he thought hard day and night, and carefully studied the way to save the country and the people.

With Xuande gone, Kong Ming began to realize that the burden on his shoulders was a bit heavy, not because he was getting old.When Liu Bei left, he shed tears like rain. He lost an enlightened and sage monarch.From then on, the burden of revitalizing the Han Dynasty fell entirely on his shoulders.Since then, he has always warned himself with "Indifference to clear ambitions, tranquility to reach far", until "Devotion is exhausted, and death is the end of life".

It is you—Zhuge Kongming, who shouldered the sky of history with your loyal shoulders!

"If a country benefits from life and death, how can it be avoided because of misfortunes and blessings?"

——Zhuangzai Lin Zexu
When the Qing Dynasty was dreaming of heaven, the barbaric and domineering western powers opened China's long-closed "gate of heaven" with strong ships and guns.Due to the corruption and incompetence of the rulers of the Qing Dynasty, the invaders had to be allowed to do evil.At this time, there appeared in the Chinese nation a figure who frightened the aggressors—his name was Lin Zexu. , how can we avoid it because of misfortune and good fortune."Willingly put the burden of maintaining national dignity on his shoulders, and "Humen destroys cigarettes" dealt a heavy blow to the aggressors.Inspired the spirit of the Chinese sons and daughters and defended the dignity of the Chinese nation.

It is you——Lin Zexu, who have maintained the dignity of the nation with your magnificent shoulders!

"Love is our common language"

——Miya Tai Lihua
In 2005, the dance "Avalokitesvara of Thousand Hands" at the Spring Festival Gala became an instant hit and caused a sensation in China.When Tai Lihua, who dances gracefully and looks demure, stands on the stage with [-] partners who also live in a silent world and spread love to the world with thousands of hands, no one will remember that they have disabilities, and the rest is only their hearts shock.Tai Lihua proves with sweat and hard work that her will and wisdom can also bring people the purest and most beautiful artistic enjoyment.

It can be said that Tai Lihua's will and wisdom come from her beautiful shoulders.Why do you say that?Life endows her with an angel of love on her beautiful shoulders. Her beauty comes from the broadness of love. "Spiritual shock does not require words. You are the most beautiful in our hearts."

It is you——Lihua, who shoulder endless love on your beautiful shoulders and spread it all over the world.

The times have endowed us with life and responsibilities, and we are determined to hold up a piece of sky, because we have tough and strong shoulders!

score review
The student was cleverly conceived, selected three specific cases, and discussed the center from the three perspectives of "loyalty, strength, and beauty", which alone showed the originality of the examinee.The structure of the writing is also natural. The three fragments use verses to lead the following, summarize the center, and use them to praise them, which is appropriate.The sentences are neat and the sentences are flexible.The ending summary is appealing and highlights the theme of the article.

classic case
Zhuge Liang, Lin Zexu, Tai Lihua
shoulder
(a candidate from Liaoning)

After wind and rain, through vicissitudes, the heavy weight on the father's shoulders has never been put down; after bitterness and grief, the father still came over with heavy shoulders.I love my father, and I love my father's unpretentious shoulders even more.

My father's shoulders are what I rely on. Whenever I am sad, I will lean on my father's shoulders.Father's shoulders are so soft and warm.My father's shoulders are as strong as iron, and he bears the beam of the family alone; for decades, he never talks about pain and sorrow; I stand on my father's giant shoulders, and gradually look at the happy place. I also achieved a little brilliance, but unfortunately my father, my father who struggled with fate; although the passage of time did not change the surrounding scenery, his forehead seemed to be covered with earthworms.

Father's shoulders are like a musician's baton.Under its guidance, I gradually understood what is honesty and prudence and what is sincerity and kindness.Most importantly, it explained to me what "experience" is.My father often said to me: "Some things are experienced by yourself. Only after you have experienced it can you know what is unforgettable, what is joys and sorrows, and then you know how to pick it up and how to put it down, and then you know how to use your own shoulders. responsibility."

The shoulders of my father are great, although it is not the backbone of the nation, however, in my heart its flickering light will always be brighter than the sun.It makes the originally impoverished family gradually become well-off; it makes hopeless eyes see hope again.Now I can wear the clothes I want to wear, and I can eat the fudge I loved as a child.I am very happy, and I will cherish the present happiness very well.Because I know that every trace of happiness is the light reflected by the sweat drops on my father's shoulders.

Life is like a dream, time has passed by, and there are regrets for the past and longing for the future on the road of life.No matter how much pain and sorrow there is in life, I still want to try and be crazy.For no reason, just to unload the heavy bags on my father's back, sometimes I really want to say to my father in person: "Dad, are you tired? When you are tired, put down the burden on your shoulders and rest, put it on the On your son's shoulders, come and try your son's shoulders. You must firmly believe in your son's ability, your son is no worse than others, Dad, I love your shoulders, I want to have solid shoulders like you."

score review
This article is an excellent work in the examination room with sincere feelings and substantial content.Through the description of the father's shoulders, the love, gratitude and praise to the father are expressed.My father's shoulders are my support, and my father's shoulders are the navigation of my life.I want to take on the responsibility of my father, and I want to be as strong as my father.The theme is clear and the sentences are fluent.

shoulder
(a candidate from Liaoning)

The 5000-year history of the majestic China, the wheel of history has passed, leaving a clear and heavy trace.

--Inscription

"Everyone is responsible for the rise and fall of the world." When these words echoed in the hazy sky, how many people raised their shoulders, shouldered the responsibility, and walked through the land cast with sweat and tears; , Writing the yellowed chapter with blood.

一
"The wind is blowing, the water is cold, and the strong man will never return when he is gone."

The wagon drove over the barren land, raising a cloud of smoke and dust.Sitting in the car, Jing Ke looked at the decadent village on the side of the road, and Prince Dan's words echoed in his ears. He would not let the prime minister's blood flow in vain, and he would not let the country perish.He gripped the dagger tightly.

There are more and more dead bodies on the roadside and people who fled due to the war.He began to hesitate: Zhao Guo or Tianxia, ​​which one is the most important.

The wild geese flew past howling, and there was no one in the main hall of the Qin Kingdom, only the dark red blood stains on the hall, like red plum blossoms.

The moment he drew the dagger, he chose the world, but because of his responsibility, he had to die to apologize.Let go of Yingzheng, and come to seek the unification of the world.

Ah, the broad shoulders.

two

"Going to benefit the world, life and death, why not avoid it because of misfortune and good fortune."

Seeing the outflow of silver from the country, I was indignant and heartbroken. Seeing the dilapidated courtyards caused by opium, I strengthened my determination to sell cigarettes.

Rectifying coastal defense, arresting cigarette dealers, and confiscating opium, Lin Zexu used his actions to prove that the Chinese nation will not be slaughtered, and the Chinese people have an iron-like backbone.As long as everyone takes up their responsibilities, the country will not perish.

But the government recalled him under the military pressure of the colonists.After the opium was sold in Humen, he was going to completely eradicate opium, but he was caught off guard when he received the imperial edict, filled with grief, indignation, and helplessness.In the end, the teacher returned to court.How much burden can a person's shoulders carry?

O weak shoulders.

three

"Lift our sight, the sky and shouts, grand, vehement."

A tragedy of "unnecessary" caused a storm in which the loyal soul was murdered.

He joined the army as a young man, striving to serve the country loyally; he made outstanding achievements repeatedly, and advocated the fight against gold and restore the Central Plains.Yue Fei fought on the battlefield and was proficient in the way of using soldiers.When the country is in crisis, stand up and do everything for the country, and die, and don't hesitate.

"Aspirations eat the meat of Hulu when hungry, and talk about drinking the blood of Xiongnu with a smile."

Bearing the responsibility of Guotai Minan.

The Yue family's army was unstoppable, and the Jin army retreated steadily.Destroying the Jin army is a sure thing.The decree came quickly.Zhao Yuefei hurried back to Beijing.How can I go back if I have not fulfilled my responsibility?The imperial edicts came one after another, and the twelve imperial edicts were right in front of his legs. Yue Fei was ashamed for not being loyal; he embarked on the road back to Beijing amidst long sighs.

In the end, he was killed in the Fengbo Pavilion, leaving an unfinished road.

Hey, helpless shoulders.

The wheel of history is still turning, looking at the glorious chapters; savoring all kinds of life; thinking about the responsibilities of generations; realizing the shoulders one after another, and seeing the magnificent mountains and rivers raised by the shoulders of the Chinese people.

score review
The idea of ​​the article is clear, the inscription at the beginning echoes the summary at the end, the context is clear, and the structure is complete.Candidates write the essay closely around the "shoulder", and use three fragments to analyze the responsibility of the shoulder and the regret of not being able to complete the important task.Especially the summary at the end of each paragraph makes the structure well-proportioned and neat, which is wonderful.

(End of this chapter)