College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 93 Facing the Sea
(2002 Shanghai Volume)

composition test questions
Maybe you have been to the seaside, maybe you have seen the sea on the screen, on the screen...

Requirements: Please write an article of about 1000 words on the topic of "Facing the Sea".The style is not limited (do not write it as poetry).

Question Analysis
Shanghai is a coastal city, so it is only natural to use "Facing the Sea" as the title of the essay.Among the three composition topics in 2002, the openness was also the strongest.However, if it is only understood as "facing the sea" in reality, it is almost impossible to write a composition. At most, it can only use the sea as a background to tell a story or make a sketch of a scene.If we take it a step further, the mighty, magnificent, broad and profound, rich and profound and open mind of the sea all give us inspiration in life.But I'm still at a loss, not knowing which aspect to think about, or which angle to think about, because we haven't made it clear what kind of life enlightenment it gives us.Having something to say but no place to put pen to paper is the first impression of many examinees on the composition test questions of the 2002 Shanghai college entrance examination.The purpose of the proposition is to examine the candidates' ability to select materials and create ideas through association and imagination.Knowing this, it is not difficult to review the questions and make up your mind.

Writing Ideas Tips
When conceiving this question, candidates need to first locate the identity and tone of the narrator, then define the topic in a manageable field, and then extract a clear center, and then organize materials based on this.You can design emotions, aspirations, society, history, nature, environmental protection and other fields.

Full score sample essay
facing the sea
(a candidate from Shanghai)

The Taoist "Shanshui Theory" has the extensive theory that "the wise man enjoys the mountains, and the benevolent enjoys the water".The sea brings the concept of water to the extreme.Facing the sea, all dwarves become giants; facing the sea, all giants become dwarfs.Only by facing the sea can one understand what is broadness and fraternity; only by facing the sea can one feel risk and what is conquest; only by facing the sea can one truly understand what life is ups and downs and what is ebb and flow ...

[-]. "Pan-fraternal love and close benevolence"

When we face the vast sea, we feel her broad mind, she can accommodate a huge ship of ten thousand tons, and can accommodate ten thousand kinds of creatures, even on the sea level of the same color that day, she tolerates the sky.

The way of Confucianism advocates "universal love and close benevolence".Advocate human beings to know fraternity and tolerance.I didn't understand the old man Murray's phrase "love or die", but after reading O. Henry's "The Last Leaf", I realized that a love for others can be paid with life.With the fraternity of the sea, the owner of "Hokkaido Noodle Restaurant" can cook an extra bowl of Yangchun noodles for the mother and son in adversity; with the tolerance of the sea, people can feel the care of parents, teachers, and friends.Facing the sea, we must know fraternity.

[-]. "Hanging sails straight to the sea"

The tolerance of the sea will not conceal the boldness of the sea.Facing the sea, you can see the harbor sheltered from the wind, and you can also appreciate the stormy waves.Maybe that's what risks and tribulations are all about.

Santiago fought against the waves for three days and three nights, and told us in a firm tone: "Man can be destroyed, but not defeated." Maybe we will encounter countless risks and endure many hardships in our life, but we must attack the sea The preparation, the courage to challenge the huge waves.Only by conquering the sea and the huge waves can we conquer difficulties and ourselves.Believe that "there will be times when the wind and the waves cleave, hang the clouds and sail directly to help the sea".

Three "Watching the ebb and flow of the ocean tide"

The sea ebbs and flows because of the forces of nature; the ebb and flow of life because of the social circle.

Facing the sea and the tide, we always have a peaceful state of mind.All rivers will always return to the sea, and the evaporation of sea water and precipitation will return to all rivers; leaves will always fall in autumn, but why is fallen leaves not a kind of peace of "turning into spring mud and protecting flowers"?

In the face of life, there should also be this kind of peace.Both Jia Yi and Su Dongpo suffered unfair treatment from the court at that time, but their mentality was different.After Jia Yi was demoted, he wrote "Diao Qu Yuan Fu" and died of depression; after Su Dongpo was subjected to the "Wutai Poetry" case, he still became a representative of the "Bold and Unconstrained School".Facing the ups and downs of life, you should have the open-mindedness of Zizhan, and the chicness of watching the ebb and flow of the sea.

Facing the sea, I understand to be tolerant and fraternal; facing the sea, I understand to struggle and fight hard; It is no longer narrow, and the sea has no boundaries.

score review
The article is ingeniously conceived, led by three poetic subtitles, with clear layers and clear structure.In addition, the article is rich in examples, the reasoning is organically combined with examples, and the reasoning is sufficient.The language is fluent, and the use of poetry is appropriate, appropriate and natural.

facing the sea
(a candidate from Shanghai)

During the summer vacation, I finally came to the long-awaited Beidaihe, and I was very excited.At nine o'clock in the morning, as soon as I got off the tour bus, I ran to the beach to watch the sea.

The sky was gloomy, and it was raining lightly.Bursts of refreshing and pleasant air filled with the salty smell of the sea filled my surroundings. I took a few greedy breaths, so comfortable!Smelling the breath of the sea, feeling the damp, seemingly warm sandy beach, the sea is right in front of you!
The sky is gray, as if thousands of years of grievances are waiting to be vented; the sky is gloomy, like the face of an angry person, without any blood or warmth.The sea and the sky should be in harmony.It roared, as if there were thousands of troops and horses running towards me, the momentum was overwhelming and unrivaled.The waves are getting higher and higher, as if they want to escape from the raging sea.But they failed, and they were thrown heavily on the reef, smashed to pieces, and covered with bruises.In the end, he retreated quickly, walked far away, and fell into the cold embrace of the sea again.

The sea raised its face gloomyly, and it was tumbling and turbulent crazily.At this time, I was just cold, just afraid.In no way can it be connected with what people call the blue, warm, peaceful sea, and I feel that it is a competent tyrant.

The sky should blend with the sea, and the sea should blend with the sky, which was also gloomy and gray.The sea and the sky are connected, and it is hard to tell which side is the sea and which side is the sky. Although the rain is small, it is dense like a net, covering the sky and the sea tightly, without any omissions, as if afraid of running away. like.

I stared at the sea in a daze, my feet sunk deep in the sand.I just feel my own smallness, my own insignificance.I was stunned by the sight in front of me, and my mind went blank.

Get away from the sea!It scares me and makes my blood coagulate!Hey, I never thought that when I came to the sea for the first time and wanted to fall into its broad embrace to feel its warmth, I actually witnessed this scene.Hey, you really disappoint me!
He shook his head vigorously, trying to wake himself up.Holding a small umbrella, I walked back along the path.My heart is gloomy, heavy, tossing, undulating like the sea...

When I woke up, it was already past two o'clock in the afternoon.I turned my head and looked out the window, hey, why, why did the rain stop? !I jumped up excitedly, shouted and ran outside.

The sky had turned from gray to blue at this time, the sun suddenly poked its head out from behind a cloud, and there were several joyful rainbows in the sky.My heart suddenly opened up.Trot all the way to the top of the west mountain!

Along the zigzag path, I felt the sun covering me in a golden robe, which was so warm. I really should thank Grandma Sun for her thoughtfulness!The branches and leaves of the tall and straight poplar trees sway with the wind, and the raindrops on the leaves are not dry, making people feel that the leaves are silver and bright, like pieces of emeralds.Cao'er is also swaying her body precariously, is she showing off her slender figure?Still shaking the rain, for fear that it will stain your beautiful coat?Picking a few wild flowers on the mountainside, revealing the faint fragrance, the delicate light yellow petals are stretched, are you stretching?There are two crystal raindrops on the petals, blinking bright eyes on them.Hua'er seemed to be tickled by raindrops, giggling non-stop.

I turned to the back of the mountain and found a pavilion to sit down.Hey, isn't it the "tyrant" that sparkles underneath?I was surprised, isn't the current sea just a "gentle" sea?The white waves gently kiss the rocks, like a mother coaxing her beloved baby to sleep.The sea is blue, the sky is blue, and the sea and sky are connected together, holding the golden sun hand in hand!

I was drunk and stared at the sea for a long time, and I smiled at it.Suddenly, I couldn't help but fell into deep thought again.

The reason why the sea can show two completely different sides may be because I observe it at different times and angles!If you think about it carefully, doesn't everything have its two sides?I can't help but feel at ease again.I love the sea, I love its warmth and its coldness; I love its majesty and its tranquility.I love this ever-changing sea!
score review
The article wants to promote before suppressing, first write about the coldness and fear of the sea, and compare it to a tyrant; Contagious.

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