Primary school students' full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 8
Lucky hit
Zhang Yang
After the rain, the sky cleared, and many puddles were left on the ground. The green trees and gray houses were reflected in the puddles.

My sister and brother and I were discussing by a puddle:

"Someone must have dug it up, it's pretty neat!"

"There was this pit last time it rained."

"It must be deep!"

I picked up a stone and threw it quietly among them while they were not looking. "Gudong!" Water splashed everywhere, splashing water all over their bodies and faces.Instead of getting angry, they all jumped up and went to find the stone.

It happened that there was a pile of stones not far from here.We all ran to pick up rocks and threw them into the puddles.We yelled loudly, and water and mud splashed all over our faces and bodies.

After a while, the rocks filled the puddle, and the water overflowed the side of the road.We couldn't be happier.

"Cough cough cough..." An old man came coughing.

"No, someone is here, run!" I gave an order, and all my brothers and sisters ran away.This is the most proficient "tactics" of the friends.

I ran home panting.My mother said: "There is a grandpa outside who is in a hurry!" I glanced at my mother and didn't dare to say anything.The mother said again: "The old man said that there was a pit in the earth. He pulled a cart of stones. He was worried that no one would help him fill it in. A large group of children helped him fill it in. But when he called out, the children all ran away!  … "

After listening to my mother's words, my face turned red and white, but I didn't expect it to be "just right"!
The idea is novel and the design is unique.The simple and clear text adds a bit of charm to the article.A few children threw rocks into the puddle to play, but they didn't expect to do good things by "hitting the wrong way".At the end, it is very ingenious and unconventional with a question about my psychological activities.

Zodiac Porcelain Statues
Li Ling
Guess what is my favorite?I like the exquisite set of porcelain statues of the Chinese zodiac that my father brought back from Yixing the most.

This porcelain statue of the twelve zodiac signs was brought back by my father on a business trip.At that time, he didn't tell me what it was, only that it was a gift for me.I really want to know what kind of gift this is!So I guessed wildly: I said it was chocolate for a while, and it was a dress for a while... But I couldn't guess after guessing, so I had to beg my father to tell me.He opened the box on the table, and there were twelve animals made of ceramics in the box. "Porcelain statues of the twelve zodiac signs!" I was so excited, jumping, dancing, singing, and laughing.

These twelve kinds of animals are all realistic in shape, bright in color, elegant and generous, and lifelike.I love them!

You see, the mouse is sneaky; the cow is honest and honest; the tiger is majestic; the rabbit is small and exquisite; the dragon shakes its head and tail; the snake is cunning and treacherous; the horse runs like flying; the sheep is gentle and amiable; Chickens, singing with their heads held high; dogs, squatting like bells; pigs, fat and fat.

I like the rabbit in the Chinese zodiac the most, because my mother and I both belong to the rabbit, so I have a special feeling for the little rabbit.look!It has two long ears on its big head, like two small spoons.A pair of ruby-like eyes are inlaid on the round head.The small nose is not very clear, the "eight" mouth is as red as lipstick, the tail is invisible, and the four calves are short, like four small cotton bolls, very interesting!The body is as white as a white robe woven with snowflakes, so beautiful!

"The mouse is many times smaller than the cow, why is it still at the top?" I asked my father.After hearing this, my father told me a story: In an ancient forest, there are twelve kinds of animals: rat, ox, tiger, rabbit, dragon, snake, horse, sheep, monkey, chicken, dog, and pig.Once, the animals in the forest were compared in size. Everyone said that the cow was the biggest, and only the mice clamored to compare.So, the two of them went to the street, and the other animals hid one after another to watch.As the saying goes: "When a mouse crosses the street, everyone shouts to beat it." As soon as the mouse crossed the street, people picked up sticks and shouted: "Shock the mouse!" The mouse returned to the forest and said, "How is it? People say 'big' mouse!" The animals had nothing to say, so they had to be ranked first. Ah, I didn't expect such an interesting story!

These ceramic handicrafts are not only beautiful, but also add endless fun to my life.Now, they have become indispensable friends in my life.

what!I love you, beautiful ceramic crafts!

The young author boldly uses metaphors, personification, parallelism and other rhetorical techniques to make the "Porcelain Statues of the Chinese Zodiac" more vivid and truly express his love for them.Transitions between paragraphs are smooth, natural, and logical.The description is detailed and appropriate, without procrastination.

I finally contracted to do the dishes
Yang Lijin

In the past, the job of washing dishes was my mother's "patent", but now, I do all the washing up every day by myself.In order to let me wash the dishes, Mom made a lot of trouble!

"Now that you are so old, it's time to do more housework. Look at Luo Yuan, who has already taken on the job of washing dishes." At that time, my father and mother often compared Luo Yuan to me.

"But I've already contracted to take out the trash, fetch newspapers, and buy oil, salt, sauce, and vinegar!"

"Not enough!" Mom said again.But anyway, this time I refused.

Soon, many newspapers and magazines reported on the summer camp training of Chinese and Japanese children together.Chinese students can be said to be ugly and humiliated. For this reason, my mother found another good reason for me to wash the dishes.

"Today, have you seen it? Japanese children are so capable and hands-on. But Chinese 'little emperors' and 'little princesses' can't take care of themselves and can only starve. Let me see, put you in , maybe that’s the case.” Mom said to me.

"No way! We have had so many picnics, I can light the fire, cook and fry the rice!"

Although I "won the lawsuit" this time, it was very reluctant.

Once, two of my father's American students came to our house as guests.They were about 23 and four years old, with brown hair and blue eyes set in deep sockets.I had a simple conversation with them in the English I didn't learn much.Dad had been talking to them both.After eating, my mother started to clean up the table as usual, and then went into the kitchen to wash the dishes.At this time, I saw the two of them looking at me, then at my mother, and said something to my father. Then, my father turned around and said to me: "They told me just now that they felt very strange when they saw my mother clearing the table and washing the dishes." , because in their place, washing dishes is a child's job." After hearing this, my face was hot, and I was so ashamed that I didn't dare to look at them.

Afterwards, my father and mother launched a general attack on me and told me many things about their childhood.In addition to what happened just now, I also felt quite ashamed. After thinking about it, I finally decided to "contract" to wash the dishes.

This article starts with the little things in life, and writes about my mother's exercise and care for me through "I finally contracted to wash the dishes".The author's writing skills are solid, the language is simple, and the transformation process of "I" is clearly written.Narrative examples are specific and clearly described.

Pies from the sky

Jiang Yunhan

One night, Dad's cell phone suddenly rang. "SMS! I'll take a look." I quickly put down the pen in my hand, grabbed the phone, skillfully opened the flip, and pressed the read button. "XX Group organizes a new product advertising gift through mobile phone number. You will get a lucky number worth 86 yuan. Please dial 133 XX quickly." "Wow, Dad, you are rich!" I was excited, and my voice suddenly raised The sound was 180 decibels, and the father who was sitting on the sofa reading a book was so scared that he almost threw the book away. "What's wrong with you?" Dad walked over with a puzzled face.

"Look, look, a big gift! 86 yuan." I held the phone up high in front of Dad, almost touching the tip of his nose.I thought that my father would be overjoyed when he heard it, but my father took a look and only smiled slightly, "Look at you, is there any pie in the sky?"

I was still excited, "Why don't you try to contact me?" Dad saw me with a blank face and said mysteriously. "Okay!" I hurriedly entered the contact number and pressed the call button. "Du, hello, the number you dialed has been shut down..." "What's going on, did I make a mistake?" I stared at my dad who was standing beside me in confusion.

"Okay, my silly boy, these are all tricks to deceive people." Dad stretched out his big hand and patted my head and said, "Now some lawbreakers take advantage of the weakness of some people who are greedy for cheap, and set up all kinds of scams, etc. You take the bait. Once someone can’t stand the temptation, they will ask you to send money for various reasons, such as tax, postage, etc., but after you send the money out, there is no sound. "As he said, Dad opened the text message box of the mobile phone again, "Look, I still have it here!" Oh, I was really shocked when I first saw it, "... won the second prize, with a bonus of 5 yuan" "... won the laptop ..." "Well, the amount is considerable, right? If these are true, then your dad and I don't have to go to work anymore, and we can enjoy the happiness by sitting at home!"

"Then just wait for the pie to fall from the sky." I made a face at my dad. "Hahaha……"

This paper is well-conceived, reasonable in structure and clear in context.The young author was very excited when he saw the winning information on his father's mobile phone, but his father calmly pointed out that it was a scam.The young author grasps the new things around him and is good at observation. His language and images are interesting, plain and vivid.

vernacular and mandarin
Peng Xiaojing

"Ouch, my niece, your mother really knows how to zag you, you are so dressed in a foreign style, you are so handsome..."

As soon as I arrived at school on Monday, I told my deskmate Xun Shuwen about the news at my grandma's house yesterday.When I mentioned the words my aunt praised me, Xie Shuwen asked puzzledly: "What is Zaku?"

"Zaku? Zaku... Zaku means dressing up in Mandarin."

Xie Shuwen transferred from Qingdao this summer vacation. After listening to my explanation, she laughed loudly: "Zhagu, Zha-gu, real soil!"

Real soil?soil?It's a bit rustic, which is originally the local dialect.In fact, if you don't pay attention in life, the vernacular will come out of your mouth.For example, when I came home from school this afternoon, I first asked my mother for money to buy exercise books.Mom was cooking vegetables in the kitchen, sweating profusely, and said impatiently: "I'll bring it to you after I finish removing the vegetables." It's "after hoeing the vegetables".Hey, where is this!

When I was eating, I was thinking about my homework tonight, and I kept my head down on the meal.Dad said: "Quiet, eat vegetables with a knife, eat vegetables with a knife." Of course, this "vegetables with a knife" is "cooked vegetables". If you don't pay attention, you think it is a "kitchen knife".You see, Mandarin is more accurate than local dialect.

On Saturday, my mother and I went to the western suburbs to buy clothes.In the car, two uncles who looked like part-time workers were talking: "How much do you earn every month?" "Xilaiyi, only four or five hundred, what about you?"Why doesn't it look like Chinese when you look left and right?Ha ha, actually that means "little, not much".

The Mandarin is standardized and easy to understand, and the expressions are accurate and clear.The local dialect is vague and the meaning is unclear, and people who are not familiar with it will be confused.So the teacher asked us to speak Mandarin from an early age, especially in formal occasions.Otherwise, there is no guarantee that someone will call you "old-fashioned" like Xie Shuwen.

The language of this article is simple and full of childlike interest.Through a large number of comparisons, the originally relatively complicated linguistic problems are resolved one by one. The concept is ingenious, the content is substantial, and the humorous and cheerful language adds a fresh and joyful color to the article.

I understand the truth
Qin Jiahui

One day during the summer vacation, I came to my grandmother's house.It just so happened that the mother cat in my grandmother's house gave birth to a kitten, so I walked over quietly.These little guys are fluffy, smooth as if they have been oiled, and their eyes haven't opened yet!These little guys are crawling around in the nest, and some are curling up under the mother cat's crotch and sucking milk!
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