People in the original god, the innkeeper, oppressing his sister

3. The last question is not so messy, it is simply that my writing is too bad.

There are a total of three reasons, all of which may be involved, but which one is dominant, I can't be sure now.

Tired reading and poor writing are actually two different things, because I didn't intend to make it easy when I conceived it.

The former is very simple, the big deal is not to touch this kind of convoluted reasoning;

But the latter, will cause me to fall into a huge hesitation when writing the following plot.

For example, many friends responded to the problem of cutting perspective, but when I usually read books, especially original texts, some of the plots need to be reflected in this way. I think it is normal to use it. When I write books, I subconsciously I actually feel normal when I use it.

So, the problem goes back to the entanglement above. I don't know whether it is because writing such things in Genshin Doujin is not liked, or the plot itself is tired of reading, or I am not good enough...

There must be all of these. I have always positioned myself as a rookie, and please believe that I really didn’t mean to say what the readers are. I just want to determine which is the main factor.

The other thing I want to explain to myself is that I'm really not kidding myself.

In fact, I am a person who pays close attention to readers' opinions, and I will read each post over and over again.

Friends in the group should know that I am really afraid of writing crashes, and I bombard the group almost every day or two, asking them how the chapter is written today, what are the shortcomings, and even to the point of anxiety.

There are many dialogue-style explanations for the plot of Xueshan. In fact, I was worried that some people would not understand or forget the previous plot, so I mentioned it over and over again.

If these cumbersome "explanations" are deleted, at least two chapters can be reduced.

That's all for the time being, let's talk about the part I'm writing now.

For me, this is the plot that complements the characters' personalities, and at the same time, it also has the effect of promoting the relationship between the characters.

First of all, Yula, when it comes to her, she is tsundere, I want to write something below the tsundere, it is that this kind of character sometimes does not necessarily make people feel cute, but even very tired.

She was also dragged down by this character and couldn't control it. She usually flirts and scolds, but when it comes to the rest of her life after death, this kind of awkwardness becomes a problem.

But the reason for writing this is not to make people hate her:

On the one hand, her actions must be controlled within the scope of "arrogance", because if she goes any higher, she will be called not knowing what is good or bad.

On the other hand, I want to ensure the tension of the plot. After writing the conflict, I can’t immediately reconcile in the next chapter. Then writing this plot is meaningless except for the number of words.

Then, on this basis, it is necessary to explain the rationality of the plot and Yura's psychological activities.

In fact, the reason she was angry was because of Gu Bai. After she regretted it, she began to doubt herself, thinking that it was an excuse to cover up, and even felt that she was disgusting, and wanted to reconcile cautiously.

She has done something wrong, but it is difficult to blame her. This is a pitiful and sad aspect, and it is what I want to embody.

So I said, I didn’t write this out of my head, I hope you will understand her pain after reading this plot, and like Yula more.

Thinking about it now, when Yula met Gu Bai, if I had written that she would hug her directly and the two of them would have sprinkled sugar, now this volume is probably over, and there wouldn’t be so many messes, so I’m writing When I said this, I felt like a badass.

Then there is Gu Bai, his behavior here is different from usual, and the main purpose of writing this is because I found that I have portrayed him too calmly in the past.

Being calm means not making mistakes, but I want him to accept Qin and Ying, which in itself is a "mistake" move.

In addition, being calm also means that there is no tension. For example, the interaction between him and Yula will always maintain a process where Yula makes a mistake—Gu Bai coaxes her. I hope this model will do something as the relationship between the two progresses. Change, otherwise it will be too boring.

So taking advantage of this chance of surviving, I put the ending aside in advance, and focused on describing his mental activities, the state of being tired and free-spirited, and at the same time the breakthrough point for his change of mind.

This time it was an attempt, but halfway through the writing, those who were scolded dared not write.

There are also Kaia Amber, Qin and Lisa. Basically, everyone in the Knights has mentioned this time, including the conflict between Gu Bai and Yula. Amber and Kaiya are also helping to prepare for the end.

I don't know if it's because I'm mentally abnormal. This kind of scene where everyone is busy in a mess may not be easy, but I still think it's quite warm.

As for the plot of counterfeit wine, I admit that it was a temporary idea, and there was no such section in the outline.

This is because I saw a book review at the time saying that I was too tired to read it, and I panicked, so I temporarily added a funny plot in an attempt to ease the atmosphere.

But such a relaxation made it difficult to return to the previous atmosphere, and then it seemed procrastinated.

Speaking of this, I thought of a book review a few days ago, saying that the feeling of emotional drama is very poor and too procrastinating, so I asked him why it is not procrastinating;

He told me that if there is a single heroine, he should cut the mess quickly, and if he has a harem, he should quickly show that he accepts all of his heart, which is probably what he meant.

Is he wrong, yes, but I deleted this comment later.

Because I know it's impossible to get up all at once.

He is really right, but this book doesn't work that way. If I had to explain it, I would have a long list of things to say, explaining that I wrote it for the sake of rationality, not being obtrusive, and impressing the characters. Deep blah blah a whole lot.

He's not wrong, because the book does look blotchy compared to the others;

But I don't think my idea is wrong. I can only summarize his point of view as the idea of ​​a type of readers. Some people want the emotional drama to be faster and easier.

To be honest, I also have a headache, I hope to write something that you like to read, and I probably know what you like to watch, so that the grades can be better, but when I actually write, I find that I can’t write.

The whole book has been pushed to this point, there is no second way to go, Gu Bai will not suddenly figure it out.Then go to Qin and Ying to express their feelings;

It is impossible for them to agree all at once, these things have to be done slowly, what I can only promise is that no matter what they go through, they will have a good ending.

These are some complaints, thank you for reading here.

I remember that in the early days of writing the story of Snow Mountain, the pressure of reality was high at that time, and the writing was very depressing, and I had the idea of ​​saving some money and running away;

Now I am getting over it slowly and want to write seriously, but the subscriptions are dropping uncontrollably again, but I think this is a very important plot.With them, this book will not be read like a journal.

I chatted with book friends about the plot and future development in the group, and the planned content can even be arranged in the seventh volume.

Hope to write.

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Longqitan under the Moon: Chapter 164 If Your Lips Are Chapped, Drink More Water (Free)

When people look back on the past, there will always be a feeling of entanglement.

If you have experienced too many and complicated things, you will feel that you don’t even have time to breathe, and before you have time to stop and feel, time flies by, which makes people feel regretful.

But if you have been idle for a long time and have nothing to do all day, you will have a sense of emptiness of wasting your time.

Amber belongs to the former.

When a new day came, she rubbed her eyes and sat up, because she was not used to the sleeping bag and forgot that her whole body was tightly wrapped, instead she lost her center of gravity and rolled back and forth on the ground a few times.

She struggled to unzip the zipper, and she gasped for breath until her skin came into contact with the cold air before she realized that she was now on a snow mountain.

This is the third day in the snow mountain.

No, it should be two and a half days to be precise... But soon Amber stopped worrying about this problem, she rubbed her forehead, and what was really waiting for her was another thing——

What happened to Gu Bai and Yula?

Because she waited until falling asleep last night, and did not see Yura returning to the tent, the two of them did not know where they went.

She put on her clothes and opened the tent, instead of stepping out in a hurry, she listened for a while.

Yula's tent is right next to her, because Kaia brought enough supplies when she came, and there will be no situation where several people squeeze into one tent, oh yes, except Paimon.

After listening for a while without hearing anything, Amber walked out lightly and looked around. The sky was clear, and under the light blue dome, four tents were neatly tied up on the snow.

I guess he hasn't woken up yet.

In the past few days, she has been the first one to wake up, because she is responsible for starting the fire and cooking, put on her coat, and put on her beloved headband. Amber walks towards the campfire with her shoulders in her arms.

Fortunately, the bowls have been washed and are stacked in the iron bucket. Since I still have the mind to wash the dishes, it means that there was no accident last night.

She turned her head to look aside again, and couldn't help but jump.

ah--

Yura was sitting not far away, staring at the iron pot in a daze,

Amber tensed up instantly.

Could it be that he didn't go back all night?

When this idea was born, it was rejected by her at the same time, no matter what, Gu Bai would not allow this kind of thing to happen.

She tentatively walked over: "Yura, Yula?"

"Huh?" Yura turned her head, "It's Amber."

She pointed with a spoon

Take a rest and let me make breakfast. I have worked hard for you these few days.

Amber tilted her head and looked at her for a while, feeling that Yula had suddenly changed. After thinking about it, she felt that it was best to ask directly:

"Are you all right?"

"what?"

Seeing Yula touching her lips subconsciously, she blushed, as if she was half a beat behind, she replied unnaturally: "No, it's all right, just rest assured."

That's good.

Amber heaved a sigh of relief, and his mood jumped up, finally solving a big problem.

"What happened to your mouth?"

The main reason is that Yura kept pointing her finger on her lips, so she couldn't help but pay more attention to it, and said with concern:

"Drink more water, you have just recovered."

"Oh..." The ordinary concern made Yura feel even more unnatural, she lowered her face, "I see."

Seeing this, Amber became even more suspicious, and wanted to ask a few more questions, when a voice came:

"Morning, everyone..." Gu Bai yawned, his hair looked messy, and he looked lazy: "I thought I woke up early enough."

"morning……"

Amber began to wink at Gu Bai.

Gu Bai also smiled at her relaxedly, then looked at Yula with sleepy eyes, looked at it for a while, couldn't hold back, burst out laughing.

Pointing to his own lips, he nodded towards Yura, whose face was starting to become hot to the naked eye:

"Remember to drink plenty of water."

"you!"

Yura stomped her foot.

He thought she was embarrassed because of that smile, but Yula walked over quickly and touched his hand:

"Why did you run out without your coat on?"

Gu Bai was stunned for a moment, never thought that he was talking about this matter, even he himself didn't pay attention: "Um, I forgot."

"Then go back quickly, what should I do if I catch a cold?"

In a reproachful tone, he was pushed back by Yula until he came to the tent, and only then did he have time to reply:

"I'm actually not cold..."

"It's too late when it's cold."

Gu Bai hugged her, "Listen to you, and you should also pay attention."

"En." Yula nodded towards him, with tenderness in her eyes, and when the two looked at each other and smiled, Gu Bai suddenly felt a pain in his waist.

Her mind cleared up, and when she looked over again, Yula had withdrawn her hand and raised her chin: "Who told you to laugh at me just now, now I'll give it back to you."

"a bit sweet."

"You, what are you talking about? I don't care about you!" She really panicked this time, and hesitated for a long time, without even bothering to say anything, and ran away blushing.

Only Amber stared blankly at the two people leaving as if no one was there, and watched Yula walking back with her eyes bent. After a while, she murmured:

"It seems that you are really all right..."

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When I got dressed and walked out, the camp gradually gained popularity.

Faint cooking smoke rose, Gu Bai stretched his waist and walked to the campfire to warm up, where Kaiya was already sitting.

He was in a good mood today, and even his thinking became more active. When he saw Kaia greeted him, he couldn't help but sigh:

"Is this the tacit understanding of the companions, even getting up at the same time."

"Oh no."

Kaiya glanced up and pointed to the black shadow hovering in the sky: