Wizards are mighty

After getting approval from Vic and the illusory Vic, Q version Vic continued to introduce the subsequent content of the Book of the World.

"Enter Hogar City, start refining staffs, and make money through alchemy, and reach level 9. Describe the life at the bottom, dealing with caravans, gradually becoming famous, wooing nobles, etc., for a total of 11 months."

"There will be foreshadowing here. There was a huge earthquake in Hogel City in April."

"Well, this part has rich plot and reasonable logic."

"Sean's experience in Hogle City shows his growth, but the refining and alchemy process can be more detailed, such as staff material selection and production problems, alchemy materials, recipes and key steps. Earthquake foreshadowing can dig deeper into the city Multiple influences and connections to subsequent stories.”

"At the same time, the description of Hogel City can be more detailed, including its unique status, surrounding situations, tensions, and daily life scenes, allowing high-dimensional observers to better understand the city."

"Then, when the war begins, you volunteer to become a logistics professional and go out with the army under the temptation of huge profits. It describes the psychology and can also describe the worries and recruitment scenarios of many ordinary people."

"The plot here is consistent with the logic and character of the characters. The protagonist's participation in the war shows bravery and enterprising spirit, and the attack with the army shows the complexity of human nature. Psychological description is very important. The protagonist's various complex emotions towards the war should be portrayed in more detail to show his motives in depth. At the same time, the description Content related to ordinary people can enrich the background of the story and allow high-dimensional observers to feel the wide-ranging impact of the war.”

"After that, Sean set off. At this time, he described the war scenes, burnings, killings, looting, various military situations, etc., and explained the settings for two months."

"During this period, I once again described the cliff, engraving, foreshadowing, etc. It took a total of 6 months."

"The description of war scenes is an important part, which can reflect the cruelty of war, and related settings and foreshadowing increase suspense. However, war details can be described in more detail, such as soldier postures, weapon use, etc., to enhance the sense of immersion for high-dimensional observers."

"Go back to Tobi City, enter the city after breaking it, describe the tragic situation in the city, meet the little girl from before, whose grandfather has been killed, solve the problem, describe the psychological activities, give help, and let her escape."

"This plot can arouse emotional resonance. The tragedy in the city and the little girl's encounter show the destructive power of war. The tragedy in the city can be described in more detail, and the protagonist's psychological activities should also be more in-depth, reflecting his sympathy for the little girl and his hatred of the war. "

"Later, I arrived at Theresa City and found that my enemy was dead. I was so moved that I upgraded to level 10."

"This part of the plot is dramatic and in line with the fantasy setting, but Sean's reaction can be more detailed, such as the interweaving of complex emotions and the impact on subsequent behaviors, making the plot richer."

Vic took a quick look at the Q version and saw that the next step was to continue the battle.

"Continue to fight with the army, describe the protagonist's performance in killing enemies, spells, alchemy exercises, etc., and describe alchemy from the side, for one month. July"

"These contents can show the growth of the protagonist, but the description of enemy killing performance should also be described in more detail, such as spell skills, weapon use, etc., so that high-dimensional observers can better understand the improvement of the protagonist's strength."

"Further on, the Battle of the Fortress occurs. Describe the situation and form of the battle. After a month of hard battle, the tragic victory. Describe the brutality of the Battle of the Fortress and the deployment of the war. The actions of the protagonist, etc.. Upgrade to level 11, enter the Kingdom of Wagner, and proceed again. Half a month of fighting took nine months.”

"The battle of the fortress is a key plot point. The relevant descriptions can reflect the intense intensity of the war and the reasonable upgrade of the protagonist. The description of the battle situation and the actions of the protagonist can be more detailed, such as the comparison of troop strength, the protagonist's decision-making, etc., so that high-dimensional observers can better experience the war process."

"Then comes the armistice and distribution of benefits."

"Not long after, news of the truce came. He was rewarded based on his merits and received two hundred thousand gold coins."

"These contents are in line with the logic of the story's development and are an affirmation of the protagonist's contribution."

"Of course, you can also describe the protagonist's reaction to learning the news and receiving gold coins in more detail, such as joy, plans for the future, etc., so that high-dimensional observers can better understand the protagonist's mentality."

The Q version of Vic's description made Vic and the imaginary Vic nod with satisfaction.

After all, the Q version of Vic was originally born at the request of the "author". Since there is no abnormal situation at the moment, there is no information from a higher narrative level.

That shows that the "author" is quite satisfied with the Q version of Vic.

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Then, Q version Vic continued to comment on the contents of the Book of the World.

"Go to the city of Theresa to study in seclusion, practice alchemy, and upgrade to level 12. The duration is four months. Describe the city's forms, various relationships, etc., and describe daily life in as much detail as possible. End of December."

"Well, the protagonist's experience in Theresa City opens up a new space for the story."

"The seclusion learning and alchemy upgrade here are reasonable and in line with the growth trajectory."

"Description of the situation in the city and daily life is also necessary to enrich the world view and characters."

"But more attention should be paid to details when describing, such as the characteristics of the forces in the city, conflicts, characters' emotions and conflicts of interest, etc., so that high-dimensional observers can better integrate into the urban environment."

"On the eve of the Ice and Snow Festival, the nobles came to visit and brought the Elf slave Celia. They had a conversation with the protagonist (from the perspective of the slave) and a game of interests (using bargaining skills). After thinking about it, the protagonist accepted the invitation and joined the noble force."

"The plots are interesting and complex, introducing elements of nobility, slaves and profiteering."

“Also, the dialogue from the slave’s perspective is novel and enriches the character relationships.”

"Of course, the description of the interest game can be more detailed, showing the protagonist's thinking process, decision-making basis, and the nobles' motives and means."

"At the same time, the protagonist appears with the nobles at the Ice and Snow Festival, and the story with the maid Xilia is described on the eve of the Ice and Snow Festival."

"This part can enrich the protagonist's emotional life and social activities."

"The story on the eve of the Ice and Snow Festival can pave the way for the emotional life of the two. The plot at the Ice and Snow Festival can show the protagonist's status and image changes in the aristocratic circle. After a period of time, he was immersed in glory, a little slack, and increased interaction with the maid."

"This is also quite in line with human nature and reflects the protagonist's personality."

"The slackness after achieving success and the increase in interaction with the maid can allow high-dimensional observers to gain a deep understanding of the protagonist's emotional world and character weaknesses."

"At the same time, when describing slackness, you can describe behavior and psychological changes more specifically."

"The plot is very simple afterwards."

"After adding In January, the city encountered a trainee from a hostile force. After a brief fight, he suffered a loss and left. After returning, he suddenly realized his mistake and felt more urgent. "

"This plot promoted the development of the story and made the protagonist realize his own shortcomings."

"The process of the fight can be described in detail, such as the skills and tactics used by both sides, as well as the psychological activities of the protagonist after the loss, highlighting his growth and transformation. "