College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 14 Swift Weight Loss (2)
A small gravel was unconsciously swallowed by the clam. The clam felt so painful, as if a sharp knife had stabbed its throat.But there is nothing I can do about it. I can only spit it out by grinding it down and polishing it day and night.Finally one day, the clam was washed up on the beach by the sea. A little boy found the gravel in the clam's mouth and took it out, but it was no longer rough gravel, but a dazzling pearl. The clam felt relaxed Many, returned to the ocean.Since then, people have known the clam-cultured pearl, so its story has been eulogized by people, and life has been dazzling since then. Every time I go to the beach, I watch the hardship of the clam with great respect.

The chrysalis broke out of the cocoon and became a butterfly, completing the interpretation of life, and showing people a smile after hardships with those colorful wings.Swift loses weight, just to fly, just to go through hardships under the protection of the blue sky, and let the music of life be excited.

It is a turbulent wave, beating against the bare coast, and since then, there have been a few pairs of white-haired old people and a few children full of innocent smiles on the boulders on the coast...

It is a high mountain that prevents the stream from flowing into the sea, and it pricks the body of the stream with sharp rocks.However, the creek made a crisp sound of jingling... Flowing through it, the creek saw the sea.

It is the thorn in front of us, holding us back.Through it, we will taste the taste of success, and we will have more confidence in our life from now on.

Yes, every chance encounter makes it a customer on my life journey.I have tried to escape, and the cloud feathers of swan geese swung down into the sky. I have tried to give up and return to the starting point, but everything is so slim.Looking up at the sky, there is no cloud, only the feeling of "black clouds overwhelming the city".Suddenly, there seemed to be waves of shouts echoing in my ears, "There will be times when the wind and waves break, hang the clouds and sail straight to the sea"!The passionate laughter was full of hope, and he rushed to the highest point in the sky with the strength of hard work.

My heart was shocked, and there was no longer a cloud of misty smoke in front of my eyes. I packed my bags and wished I could jump over it.But I know that everything has to go through untold hardships to become more fulfilling, and life will be more magnificent.

The sea breeze hits, and the afterglow of the setting sun reflects a large area of ​​ocean red.The afterglow passed through the horizon and left a magnificent seascape, and I have strode forward. I believe that through it, my life will be more magnificent, just like the feat of a butterfly breaking out of a chrysalis.

score review
The context of the article is clear, starting from the writing of mussels and pearls, and the middle part adopts parallel paragraphs to point out the content referred to by "it" in the title, and then puts "I" in it, and uses metaphors to break through the troubles of "I" The spiritual process of finding the way forward is displayed. The last paragraph echoes the title of the article and points out the main idea.

flowers, animals, people

(a candidate from Jiangxi)

Autumn is gone and spring is coming, and a new era is coming.There is another deep imprint on the annual rings of the years.Everything in the world is always changing.The past generations have completed their mission and rested peacefully, and the vacancy left by them needs to be filled by future generations to continue it endlessly.

[-]. Flowers
Dandelion is so charming.On the roadside land, they wear fluffy white caps, facing the blowing spring breeze, shaking their green branches and leaves, as if waving to passers-by, and as if declaring their own life and beauty.However, this dandelion cannot bloom forever. Its seeds must re-root and germinate, so that more beautiful dandelions can bloom in every corner of the world.Staying on the foliage, these fuzzy seeds can never grow, although the old dandelion has cultivated it to be lively and healthy.Therefore, when the seed matures, it must be separated from the branches and leaves of the old dandelion and become a single body.Accompanied by the breeze, these white seeds finally left the comfort of the past and flew to the boundless sky; they wanted to grow in new places with their own strength.At this time, a moving chapter appeared in the sky...

[-]. Animals
In the spring garden, apart from bees, butterflies are the most intoxicating.They are in groups, put on gorgeous coats, and play on the green leaves and red flowers from time to time.But their child, the silkworm, can only spin silk on the ground at this time.Afterwards, the silkworm turns into a chrysalis and lives comfortably in an unknown corner.You don't need to do it yourself, and you don't need to work. This layer of chrysalis can guarantee all the material needs of silkworms.Perhaps the silkworm should be grateful for this gift from its parents, but at the same time it will always be bound in this small space.No, this is not the silkworm's pursuit, what it yearns for is the sky where its parents are.Therefore, before it grows up, it will keep biting through the layer of pupa, keep biting, and keep drilling out, even if the body has to bear the pain of being cut by a knife, until its body is big enough to see the sun, it can spread its wings and fly !At this time, another moving chapter appeared in the sky.

[-]. People

Human society is the most splendid and beautiful.People use their own wisdom to create wealth and create such and such things to meet their own needs.Therefore, young human beings are always surrounded by the care of their parents.However, if one wants to grow and fly high, can one rely on this forever?No, can't!We must learn from dandelion seeds and silkworms that emerge from the chrysalis, because they have taught us: Only by leaving the nest of peace and relying on our own strength can we truly spread our wings and fly!

Forget about An Le's home, fight bravely!Let us continue to write that moving chapter in the sky with our own efforts!

score review
This article grasps the point of view that swifts do not want to stay in their comfort zone, and pursue "flying high" even after going through untold hardships. It adopts the form of subsections and subtitles, writing from flowers to animals and then to people. The thinking is clear and progressive.The opening paragraph of this article is full of talent and profound meaning, which has laid a good foundation for the full text. The three subsections are not straightforward, but show the profound connotation in the fluent writing.

Turn the corner successfully

(a candidate from Jiangxi)

At the crossroads of success, you may not be able to reach your goal by moving forward. You should change your way and change yourself. Maybe this is the secret of success.

--Inscription

A small river drifts across the ocean, and its footprints are scattered in the Atlantic Ocean, Indian Ocean, and Pacific Ocean.Along the way, he felt the artistic conception of "the boat floats away lightly, and the wind blows the clothes", rushing with the wind, criss-crossing the torrential river.

When the journey was almost over, it came to the edge of the desert, thinking: I can even resist the huge waves of the sea, is it impossible to break through this desert?So, it rushed forward, step by step away from the ocean, into the desert.However, it found that its hands, feet, cells, etc. began to disappear, leaving only its thoughts.As a last resort, it immediately returned to the ocean to recuperate, but it didn't understand why it couldn't pass through, what to do, scratching its head, thinking hard...

Suddenly, a deep voice came from around: "Son, if you want to pass my test, you have to pay a price."Xiao He heard the voice of the desert, so he asked: What is that?
"You have to turn yourself into water vapor and let Sister Feng take you there."

"Then won't I die? How can I survive?"

"Aren't you born like this before? It was only under the gestation of the ocean that it became the small river it is today."

Xiaohe seemed to recall that there was once a gust of wind mixed with light raindrops, and then it rained cats and dogs dimly, and he was born.Time passed, the river left the ocean, and a torrent drifted into the ocean.Slowly, he felt light all over his body, floating towards the sky like a puff of smoke.Looking down at the land, there is a desert below... Soon, he regained his real body, returned to the embrace of the ocean, and successfully completed his journey.

Remember Swift?

Swift grew up under the careful care of her parents when she was young, and lived a life of "reaching out for clothes and opening her mouth for food", so that her body continued to gain weight.Birds are birds after all, and the sky is their home.Therefore, fat swifts must break through the barrier of weight loss, change their diet, control food intake, and exercise (flap their wings, do push-ups) at the same time.A small weight loss propped up the sky where the bird flew and helped its success.

In order for a small river to pass through the desert, it must be turned into water vapor.

Swifts must lose weight if they want to soar in the sky.

In order for a moth to become a butterfly, it must break out of its cocoon.

If a person wants to be successful, he must change himself.

……

Success and failure are only a matter of thought. Whether you go straight forward or turn around, success and failure will be different.

score review
The author of this article took a unique approach, starting from the topic, and came to the conclusion that "at the crossroads of success, moving forward may not necessarily reach the goal", and the conclusion will be different when turning a corner, which makes the theme of the article novel and unique, and closely related to the topic and material core.The anthropomorphic approach makes the article read in a friendly and natural way.From Xiaohe to Swift, the materials are treated properly as an integral part of the article.

wonderful words
Success and failure are only a matter of thought. Whether you go straight forward or turn around, success and failure will be different.

(End of this chapter)