College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 28: One Branch, One Leaf, One World (2)
Fish cannot feel the existence of water because it lives in the concreteness of water.

We feel the existence of the world and the flow of time, because the floating flowers and leaves, the flowing water and the floating clouds tell us that a branch and a leaf are attached to a tree, and the world is eternal.

Meteors cut through the sky, continuing and progressing with the long river of time.

The endless dust and smoke, the endless river.Take a handful of clear water and taste the history; pick up a pebble and touch the veins of time.

A leaf roll knows the autumn of the world, and a jackdaw dances across the ice and snow.

There is no fiery maple all over the sky, and a leaf lightly tells me that I know autumn; I don't see the sky covered with ice, and the ice freezes into clouds with the sound of crows.

Comprehension never floats up continuously, but always seeps out from the veins, and the world is hidden in the subtleties.

The red flowers and green leaves are reflected on the lakeside and the snow, and the changes are gradually moving forward with the slightest color on the side, until there are little ripples, engulfing the sight.

There is no big river going east, but the stone walls of the cliffs are engraved with traces of history and the trajectory of the world.

We will still move forward in the context of history, picking up branches and leaves along the way and keeping them for memory.

The existence of the world will be clear and concrete, we will walk into the gate of time, and let the setting sun give us the key to memory.

The bundle of firewood of memory lies on the ground so quietly, waiting for us to extract the branches and leaves picked up along the way, and quietly recall it at the fingertips of the setting sun.

The existence of the indifferent world is concrete and direct, so that it is within reach——

The firewood is lying down, extracting the microcosm of the world, bit by bit.

Existence is so minutely condensed until it becomes the world.

Comprehension, only sustenance bit by bit.

score review
This is a good work in the examination room with feelings and understanding.Candidates wrote the pure natural scenery and the beauty of nature with delicate and graceful writing style.But the author doesn't just stop at the level of appreciating nature, the lines between the lines are full of insights into all things in nature.The ending "sentiment, only rely on bits and pieces" points out the central idea of ​​the article, complements the beginning, and further deepens the meaning of the text, which is meaningful and intriguing.

wonderful words
The red flowers and green leaves are reflected on the lakeside and the snow, and the changes are gradually moving forward with the slightest color on the side, until there are little ripples, engulfing the sight.

Heart Fragrance Three Petals
(Candidate No. [-] from Zhejiang)

Walking barefoot by the water, the tide of history washes away the traces left by the years.Pick up a fallen flower, there is a beautiful world there.

A song, the back of a hero
When he raised the heavy sharp blade to his neck, when he disappeared in the sound of the waves rolling eastward, when the blood stained the clouds for a long time, the hero wailed, and Wu Zai wailed.He wants to accomplish a great cause for thousands of years, and he wants to engrave the word "Xiang Yu" on the emperor's book of history. However, besieged from all sides flooded his mind, and the heroism that once drew his sword and lifted his tripod suddenly turned into helplessness.

A song of Chu reminded him of every battle, every celebration, and every high spirited effort in his life.His world dimmed in the drizzle like silk.

It turns out that a song can interpret a fate.

fly free like an eagle

When autumn came, Wang was writing poems.He is a king, a melancholy king—interpreting the freedom he wants with clever words, and dyeing the maple leaves in autumn red with sad words—the eagle is flying at the height of his soul.It wasn't until he put his noble head on the rails that he truly found the freedom of "facing the sea and blooming in spring".He used a vigorous death to fulfill his lifelong pursuit.

A talented poet does not dare to face the cruel reality. If he wants to be free like an eagle, he sublimates his soul to the height of the sky.

Perhaps, the eagle in the sky spreads its wings, which already carries all the ideals of a poet.

lost sunflower

A genius, a madman, a fallen star, a shining gold.He's the painter, a fanatical artist, and an incomprehensible psychopath.He dipped the smoky paint and painted the color of life on the gray and white canvas; he used fiery yellow to outline the sunflowers fluttering in the wind; Unreasonable - who is he?

He brought too much surprise and confusion to the world, but he escaped from the sea of ​​people in the world's messy language and scornful eyes, and found the starlight of his thoughts in a sunflower on the hillside.

Is it possible to contain the connotation of life in a single flower?
The rushing water wets my feet, and a gust of wind blows off the fallen flowers in my hands, appearing and disappearing in the waves...

Please give me and my soul a pure space to observe all the ordinary things in the world; please give me and my life a butterfly-like flight to find the infinite in the finite; please let me impress a certain fisherman with my singing , Use the net to pick up the heavy mantra: One flower, one world, one leaf, one bodhi.

score review
The full text begins with the topic, and the main body uses the form of subheadings to structure the article. The structure is divided and independent, and combined into a whole, it appears free and rigorous.The ending echoes the topic in bright language, making the whole text complete.In terms of content, the topic is explained from three angles, and the use of literary writing style expands the connotation of the article, making this article a rare masterpiece in the examination room.

mother's iron box

(Candidate No. [-] from Zhejiang)

This was in the corridor area outside the intensive care unit, and the noise filled the entire corridor. The three brothers and sisters were fighting for inheritance outside the room, while inside the room was the mother who was being rescued.

The mother has no real estate and no deposits, but she keeps an iron box, which must contain priceless treasures. It is this iron box that the three siblings are fighting for.

The elder brother was agile and was the first to snatch the iron box. When he opened it, there was no gold, silver or jewelry inside, but only envelopes with the names of the three brothers and sisters written on them.

The eldest brother opened the envelope with his name on it, and there was only an old yellowed photo inside.Isn't that the photo of the elder brother wearing the red scarf back then?The elder brother wears plain clothes but fits well, and he smiles so brightly.

The second brother also hurriedly opened his envelope, and there was only one prescription in it.

I remember when I was a child, my second brother was weak and often had a cold and fever. My mother often went to the hospital with my second brother on my back at night, and came back with expensive prescriptions and my second brother who was already asleep.The family is poor, and the expenses of the three brothers and sisters usually put a lot of burden on the mother, and now they have to spend so much money on the treatment of the second brother.

The mother dragged her tired body and went shopping in the streets to buy old things and scavenge, just to have a little more money for the second brother to see a doctor.The original black hair of the mother is now graying; the original beautiful face of the mother is now full of wrinkles.But every time my mother sees her second brother who is sleeping soundly after taking the medicine, she is always so happy, with a rare smile on the corner of her mouth.

The last one is from my younger sister.Inside the envelope was a money order.

The third sister went into business very early and made a lot of money in her early years, but she had to pay the price for her ignorance when she was young.The third sister fell in love with a man, but that man finally cheated the third sister of all her money and left a lot of debts.The third sister was also arrested and taken to the police station for not paying the money.

But the day before the trial, the third sister was released, and all her debts of 10,000+ yuan were paid off.It turned out that my mother paid off the debt with her decades of savings and the house sale money. Now my mother can only live in a small house built with wooden boards.

The three of them were already sobbing.They rushed open the door of the ward and knelt down in front of the bed, crying, "Mom, I was wrong! Wake up, hit me, scold me!"

The mother has closed her eyes, leaving only the smiling teardrop in the corner of her eyes.

A photo, a prescription or a remittance slip are no longer just relics left by the mother, but also the love of an ordinary mother for her children.

Poor parents all over the world, which parents do not love their children, but they always care about us so silently.

Thousands of words can't express my gratitude to my parents, I can only say: "Dad, Mom, thank you!"

score review
The article uses flashbacks to write about the mother's love for her children in the past, which contrasts with the current indifference of the children to the mother; and the recovery of the children's soul in the end undoubtedly reflects the power of mother's love and the warmth of the world.If it is said that "a photo, a prescription or a remittance slip" holds "a branch and a leaf", then "one world" is "a mother's love for her children", such a concept is quite ingenious.

A Red Mansion Ten Thousand Sighs

(Candidate No. [-] from Zhejiang)

When Mr. Shu Wu wrote the preface to "A Dream of Red Mansions", he once said: "The value of "A Dream of Red Mansions" lies not only in its profound literary value, but also because "The Twelve Beauties of Jinling" sang the awakening of women in the late feudal period."

A song of red building, ten thousand sighs.It is such a society where the world is so cold, the gap between the rich and the poor is so great, "the rich people's wine and meat stink, and the roads are frozen to death", and the root cause of this kind of social darkness is not only the inequality of classes, the innocence of human nature, but also the injustice of gender status.A Dream of Red Mansions describes the prosperity of the Grand View Garden, the enthusiasm of the cardamom years, and the tragedies caused by the superiority of men and inferiority of women under the cover of all the grand prosperity.Such a lively and lively life, with a pure and kind heart, with a beauty that touches the world, and a fine songwriter with every word, but they can only sing a song in that bleak society controlled by adult men Another tragic song: Yingchun is tortured to death; Li Wan is young and widowed; Tanchun is married far away; It is Jin Chuan... Such a red building, all these sighs, are tears of emotion for the society where men are superior to women, and a merciless whip for this world of human feelings.

A song of red building, ten thousand sighs.This sigh is not only pity and sympathy for all the women in the Grand View Garden, but also a sonorous word for women's awakening.The Little Grand View Garden is a microcosm of the society at that time.In this "gentle and rich town", there are intrigues, brutality and violence, and distinctions between superiority and inferiority; in such a world of "cooking oil with fire", people can clearly see many fresh images, untainted by the world, with noble and pure attitudes. The posture is cold-eyed.And Lin Daiyu is the best representative of these vivid images. This lonely forest in the fairyland of the world is both the host and the guest in the Grand View Garden. In her eyes, the hustle and bustle of the pavilion is just the shock of "wind, knife, frost, and sword".So she will realize her own preciousness, and will work hard for her chaste love, so she will feel as if she is out of the mundane world when she hears the lyrics in the song "Like a flower and a beautiful family, like water and years", and is moved by the dignity of women.Such a red building, such a thousand sighs, put the awakening of the world's creatures in a garden, but let people see the joy brought by the prairie fire.

A song of red building, ten thousand sighs.Cao Xueqin exhausted her vicissitudes of old eyes, and her ink-scented but sharp pen tip accumulated all her emotions in this red building, lamenting the darkness and awakening, and expressing all kinds of lingering in that world...

score review
Through the comments on the characters in "A Dream of Red Mansions", candidates reflect the misfortune of daughters in a specific social life, and use the typical environment in literary works to describe the tragic fate of a class of people in a general social environment.The article adopts the structure of total score and total score, echoing from beginning to end, and the two paragraphs in the middle are demonstrated in depth from two levels, with clear theme, rigorous form and profound thinking.

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