College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 33 Running experience (1)
(2005 Hunan roll)

composition test questions
Read the text below, according to what the article says.

From the perspective of a person's growth, one must learn to walk before running.Everyone has run—whether physically or mentally, but the experience of running is not the same.You may have unforgettable experiences, deep feelings, or unique insights.

[Notice]

Please contact your own real life, use "running experience" as the topic, choose your own angle, draw up your own title, and write a narrative or argumentative essay of no less than 800 words.

Question Analysis
The 2005 Hunan composition questions were very restrictive.From the point of view of the topic itself, the central word is "experience", which itself is a word with a relatively abstract meaning. The meaning in the dictionary is "to understand the surrounding things through practice; to experience personally".Therefore, the title clearly guides candidates to write their own "unforgettable experiences, deep feelings, and unique understandings", and requires them to write "connecting with their own real life".If the examinee writes about the experience of others, it cannot be regarded as an accurate understanding of the topic requirements.In addition, candidates should not ignore the restrictive word "running" in the topic "experience". If what is written is not the experience of "running", but "experience" in other aspects, it is obviously a digression.From the perspective of style selection, the title requires writing "narrative or argumentative essays", which limits candidates to write "poems", "plays" or other "alternative" styles.

Writing Ideas Tips
Due to strong restrictions, when writing, candidates should carefully understand the prompts in the materials to expand their writing ideas. "Whether physically or spiritually", this prompt is very important. It tells candidates that they are not limited to writing about the "running" experience that people in real life can see with their own eyes, but also "spiritually". The "running" experience. "From the perspective of a person's growth, one must learn to walk before running" guides candidates to carefully consider the relationship between "walking" and "running", learn to walk first, and then run , This is in line with the law of human growth. Therefore, we can think of it like this: Do everything step by step, lay a solid foundation, be down-to-earth, and be pragmatic; compared with walking, running is a kind of hard work. Posture is a test; as long as you persevere and persevere in the process of "running", you will have unexpected gains in the end, and you may even think that "running" is a kind of enjoyment.

Full score sample essay
true paradise

(a candidate from Hunan Province)

A bird is flying and its mother is waiting for its arrival at some destination.It only knows that its mother is waiting for it in the distance, and it doesn't know the reason.It is stormy, urgent and fast.It needs to arrive.When it found its mother, it showed off to its mother: "I flew hundreds of miles in three days, searched the whole mountain forest, I was hungry, I was thirsty, and more than half of my feathers fell out. I think I am very strong."

Its mother shook her head: "You are strong, I admit it. You found me, and you searched the entire mountain forest in the past three days. Do you know how many rivers and lakes this mountain forest has?" It shook its head, its face full of confusion. "Children, too fast speed will make you miss many beautiful scenery."

Speed ​​has been interpreted perfectly in today's world.People are getting impatient, the road with thousands of years of history is silent under their feet, and when the yellow dust is everywhere, people choose another way: running.Abandoning old oxen and broken cars to create better tools, but people seem to forget the existence of oxen, so they ignore the grasslands, and the erosion of every inch of yellow sand is the regret of a line of blood and tears.Human beings want to run across nature, beyond the origin of life, and look for an artificial paradise.Is the fantasy of beauty and error coexisting broken?

People run at the same time, missing the spring when the peach blossoms send away the snowflakes and the spring breeze awakens the field frogs, they miss the summer when the waves crack, the happy flowers and the lotus cover unfold the green clouds, and they miss the rice grains covered with golden dew and the trees send away a letter In the autumn of withered leaves, I missed the winter when the mountain slopes were covered with snow and the water was covered with silver ice.People should walk around in this season and the scenery, let each footprint have emerald rhyme and gold and silver annotations.This is our world.

Mountaineering is not just about height.Our altitude should be graceful, so that we will not feel overwhelmed by the cold when we arrive at our destination.Climbing up the stairs, looking up at the spring and autumn, one step is the distance of beauty, and every step closer, there is real happiness.But when you see others have reached the top of the mountain or come from behind, you will think of speed; when you see the east is white and the red sun is about to erupt, you will think of speed.If you use running steps instead of walking steps, you think you are sensible and smart, what should you pay attention to at the same time?The slope is steep and dense, beware of falling.

People are full of enthusiasm and hope, and they are often injured here, which becomes a turning point in the battle on the road.The result that the gain outweighs the loss hangs down on the big tree of history.With the speed of the bullet surpassing the speed of the fox, the misery of the struggle condenses the elements of danger and survival.And the fruitful results of people on another big tree make us feel the beauty of running.The distance between heaven and earth has changed from hopeful to reachable, from miracles to old relics.The bright moon is printed on the footprints, and the water and fire are fixed in the eyes, like beautiful poems, and the words are like stars twinkling.This kind of demeanor is enough to make people dance and celebrate at this height.

Everyone has their own ideal life environment.The earth is the home of all people. If the earth is to become an ideal world for all people, it needs human creation, and more importantly, human rhythm.The scenery along the way, stop and go, is the course of life.

The paradise of life is the real paradise.Beauty flows in the small river in front of the steps, and reality grows in the land of middle school.Wisdom enjoys the shade on the blue tiles of the roof, and a bird and a flock of birds fly above the earth.

Our landscape, our hasty or deliberate eye.

score review
The idea of ​​the article is novel and refined. Many candidates emphasized that "life should be improved while running", but the author believes that human beings "run" to seek artificial paradise, but they often miss the real paradise around them and the scenery along the way. Not only that, In the process of running, the ecology was also destroyed, and the viewpoints were reasonable, and there was an unexpected and reasonable writing effect.

Bravely run, bravely surpass

(a candidate from Hunan Province)

Life is full of twists and turns, and the world is full of mountains.Passionate to run, to go beyond, and then to clean up the calmness after frustration, unyielding after setbacks, and calmness after hardships.

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"Wangsun Mobai is better than basil, and the nine-day branches are close to the mane. The dew is wet and the autumn fragrance is full of the pool bank, and the peak is not envious of the height of the pine."

I rode a steed and galloped on the dim ancient road.However, the intrigues of the officialdom, the secular sanctimoniousness stopped me from running, and the ruthless reality cooled my blood.That's right, I think back then when the Lishi took off my boots and the noble concubine rubbed ink for me, that should be the smoothest period in my official career.

However, I accidentally saw Lishi's flattering ugliness and the imperial concubine's unspeakable smile. I felt that I should stop my running feet forever and leave this dark Golden Horse Gate.I clearly know that I would rather spend all my money just to get drunk, than to become the "Queen Literati" of the Tang Dynasty with my brows bent!
So I took a saber and took a glass of wine to visit the white deer that I temporarily placed on a famous mountain, stepping out of the dark door of official career forever.

In the past, I rode a puma horse bestowed by the imperial court to gallop, and today I rode a white deer to the distance I dreamed of.Drunk deeply with turbid wine, return to the happy place, search for secluded drinking, sell eternal love together, go south to Wuyue, sleepwalk in Tianlao, it's hard to repay grand ambitions together.Running has made me stumble repeatedly, and running has allowed me to transcend my soul-thoughts, which are always mature in wandering and frustration.

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"Flowers don't bloom together with hundreds of flowers, and independent hedges are not exhausting. I would rather die by snatching incense from the branches, than blow them into the north wind."

I sent away that dispossessed and hateful faint king, and I was caught by Yuanbing's snare before I crossed the border.

I looked back at the endless road, from Lin'an to Lingnan, I did run all the way.My life is so similar.Back then, with great ambitions to fight against the Yuan Dynasty, I stepped on the horse and galloped on the battlefield.I am heading for the battlefield, and I am also heading for another destination in my life: the military camp.

However, Lin'an Mansion can tolerate a generation of foolish kings and a group of useless and mediocre officials, but it cannot tolerate a sincere heart that swears allegiance to the death!Therefore, I deeply understand that I can only run forever, even if I only kill one Yuan soldier and regain an inch of territory.What are the thorns, and what is the fear of swords and swords.

Tonight, I am trapped in a dark prison, and maybe I will never be able to ride my beloved horse to gallop the frontier, gallop my faith, and gallop my life.The sound of the flute makes people mourn, but the sorrow never belongs to a great husband, a scholar can be killed but not humiliated.How could Wen Tianxiang, who is strong and strong, live on his knees!
The Yanshan moon sprinkled quietly, and the autumn chrysanthemums bloomed silently, forming a holy statue.

Running left me covered in bruises and blood, and running made me complete an eternal leap in my soul-will, which should be super strong in cruelty and ruthlessness.

Life is a river of spring water, which expresses enthusiasm and unrestrainedness, and teaches people to be high-spirited in passion; life is a waterfall, which swears steadfastness and unyielding, and teaches people to make unremitting demands in setbacks.

Bravely run on the road of life, bravely cross the soul.

score review
This is an innovative novel that has been thought about for thousands of years, and it is also a passionate work with brilliant literary talent.From the "running" in life, the examinee thinks of the "running" in the soul; from the running of modern people, he thinks of the "running" of ancient people. The same life trajectory, the theme is novel and profound.

Squeeze water to leave fragrance
(a candidate from Hunan Province)

Sometimes we run towards our dreams like children obsessed with a toy, looking at the beautiful ball of light, accelerating non-stop, only to find that it is a mirage.

So I regretted it, regretted that I missed the opportunity to enjoy the scenery while running, and wanted to turn back, but found that the scenery was gone and irretrievable.

In fact, when people are running, don't just focus on the deep blue sky, there is still a vast land under our feet.

At the starting line of life, everyone will have a starting point and an end point.

Happy people enjoy entertainment along the way.

Those who complain about their fate will lose that belief in the process of running, and eventually return without success.

I once saw such a story in "One Hundred Stories That Touched Middle School Students".

Ten disabled children were competing, one of them was running very fast, and suddenly he fell to the ground, the hearts of the audience were shocked, and the competition could not go on, but the scene that appeared moved all the people present to tears. tears.The other nine children stopped their steps, walked up to the fallen child, helped him up, treated his wound briefly, and then "walked" to the finish line arm in arm.

This is a special race. I don't know the final result, but I think the ten of them will become good friends. The moment of stopping is not for the result of the race.

Friends, in the process of running, have you ever had this kind of experience, whether you have or not, you need this kind of experience in your future life. For this kindness, we must change some deep-rooted concepts in our minds.

On the eve of the college entrance examination, everyone held a crystal ball carefully, not reconciled to falling behind, and rushed forward, for fear of falling behind.Suddenly a classmate said a word: We are kites bound by strings.In an instant, all the students were awake.It turned out that in addition to competition, we also had so many pure friendships during the running process.

(End of this chapter)