College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 40 Believe in yourself and listen to others (2)
At the end of the month, the family booked a banquet to congratulate Lao Liu on his [-]th birthday and his honorable retirement.Lao Liu asked his children to go first, saying that he would arrive later.When everyone came to the hotel, they talked about Lao Liu's hairstyle again, and they all said that their design was the most reasonable, the most beautiful, and the most generous.While talking, Lao Liu came, wearing a hat on his head.The whole family was puzzled.Lao Liu said: "After one month of retirement, you changed my hairstyle three times. You all wanted to control my head, and you all wanted to change my head according to your 'world view'. Forget it.” After Lao Liu finished speaking, he took off his hat—he actually shaved a shiny monk’s head!Lao Liu said: "Now my head is a blank sheet of paper. When my hair grows long in the future, I will decide what hairstyle to wear!" Everyone was dumbfounded.

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In just one month, Lao Liu's hairstyle changed from "official style" to "scholar style", "trend style" and "connotative style".In the process of changing his hairstyle, Lao Liu finally realized that some things should be decided by himself.The narration of the article is relaxed and free, the storyline is full of twists and turns, full of fun; the ending is unexpected and full of inspiration.

Walking in your world...

(a candidate from Gansu)

When the eagle sees the vastness of the blue sky, it vibrates its feathers and soars high, freely and proudly; Then he sang loudly, riding the wind and breaking the waves, with a great atmosphere.If a person only sees himself, he is like the floating grass on the wall, frivolous and shallow; he is like the lonely deer in the grassland, lonely and in danger of being swallowed from time to time.God created man and reproduced forever. You are not the only one in your life, but he and me.It is not only me who is the world, please don't forget you, me and him in this colorful world.See yourself and others, your world will be more exciting, and the sunshine in your life will be more brilliant.

See yourself, see yourself clearly.Yes, I am important, I am unique, I love the clouds in the sky, I love the pearls in the stars, I love others living in my world, happy in my happiness.But I also deeply understand that I am just one of all living beings, and everyone created by God is equal, so why should I be special?Want to be above others?Yes, I am just me, a small me in the vast world, and I have no reason or ability to regulate others and let others follow me.And I have so many shortcomings, so ordinary, how dangerous it will be if I am short-sighted and narcissistic in my tiny self-world.The small me is only a small part of the world, I am not perfect, not beautiful or even very dirty, I cannot confine myself in my own small world, and waste my precious life in vain.

Step out of yourself and see others.Others have beautiful and sad life stories no less than you, others have uniqueness and happiness no less than you, and others have spiritual journeys that amaze and shock you.Get out of your own small circle, let your sentiment be refined in the majestic tide of life, let your temperament be refined in the tide of heroic and fraternal life, brush away the dirt in your heart, and illuminate the dark corners of your life.Look for the gold of life in others, where there are noble qualities that will complement your innate poverty of life!Go to others to explore the mysteries of life, where there is tenacity, uprightness, and twists and turns, which will move you, make your heart surge, destroy your weakness, your laziness, rebuild the dam of your heart, make you upright and let you shine ; Go to others to listen to admonitions, the words that seem to grow thorns but are full of enthusiasm will give you sobriety after dizziness, thorough understanding when you are lost, and even rein in your horse at the edge of a cliff.The integrity of life is beautiful because of lovely others.And once you see the beauty of others, others will see your beauty even more. If you know each other heart to heart, and love each other, your life will be sweeter and more exciting.

See yourself, see yourself clearly; see others, understand others.

Therefore, the journey of life is no longer accompanied by darkness and loneliness; the scene of life is no longer cloudy, rainy, and cold.A brand new self, a sunny self, will emerge in life.In laughter, singing, and blessings, I walked with others, accompanied by excitement and sweetness.I am mature, confident, and proudly walking on the road of life, so as to achieve success and glory.

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The candidate is good at association and metaphor.The first paragraph of the article uses a series of metaphors to elicit the theme "Seeing yourself and seeing others, your world will be more exciting, and the sunshine in your life will be more brilliant".The article has rich vocabulary, gorgeous language, and the poetic and philosophical exposition of the topic are the outstanding features of this composition.

hero
(a candidate from Henan)

The setting sun is like blood, but it is not only the setting sun that is like blood.

The last slant of light in the sky passed through the haze and lingered on the land that had already been scorched by the flames of war in Gaixia.Broken Arrows and Changge were scattered all over the ground, and the breath of death permeated the air, making every surviving Chu army tremble.

Except for him - Overlord of Western Chu, Jiangdong Xiangji.

His hand caressed Wu Xiao's color, and his eyes wandered in the mist of Jiangdong's mountains and rivers. He firmly believed that even if there were hundreds of thousands of cavalry from the Marquis of Huaiyin at the foot of the mountain, he would be able to break through the siege and open up another world. He firmly believed.Recalling the youthful spirit back then, the sentence "It can be replaced" is shocking!In the battle of the giant deer, Song Yi was angrily beheaded. He was the first to take the lead and defeated the Qin army. More than [-] princes from all walks of life bowed their heads at the gate and entered the Qin Dynasty.

He has never doubted himself since he started the army. Could it be that this next battle will be a waste of all previous efforts!What he couldn't bear was Yu Ji's heavy words: "Overlord, you know that you are alone in defeat, and the reason lies with you. The giant deer won a big victory, but you buried 20 soldiers alive, and you dominated Xianyang, but you burned Afang three hundred Li, set the capital in Pengcheng, gave birth to Ziying, Qianbu, and Yafu strongly opposed it, but you insisted on going your own way, Overlord, you know that Xichu has already lost the hearts of the people!"

It was the night when embarrassment broke out everywhere, the soldiers were separated, each seeking his own livelihood, poor concubine Yu, a lingering scent of soul, dying with the wind——

He believed in himself, believed that he could not listen to the tricks of those civil servants and warriors.

But he was wrong, in front of him was the mighty and boundless Wujiang River, and what was pressing at every step was tens of thousands of iron cavalry who were overwhelming the city.

The crown in the distance is the King of Han, and a burst of triumphant laughter shook the whole field, "King Xiang, do you know why you were defeated by me? You pretend to be a genius, and you can conquer the six kingdoms and level the world by yourself, but you are wrong! I If you are thirsty for talents, you are not suspicious of employing people, and you pursue Han Xin at night; you don’t know people, and you are not good at taking responsibility, and you are angry with Fan Zeng. In this way, you will betray your relatives, and I will gradually gain wings. Rongdi Huma destroyed the carved towers, and the first emperor extravagantly plundered the head of Guizhou. Zhang Liang asked me to apologize, and I escaped with my own life. King Xiang, King Xiang, from this point of view, it is only me who should be a big man to conquer the world, sweep Liuhe, encompass the world, and sweep the world." Overlord smiled blankly, full of bitterness and helplessness , I don’t know at this moment, is it the regret of overconfidence, the remorse for not listening to opinions, or the helpless "I will die in this day, it is not a crime of war".The rising sun is like fire, and what is like fire is not only the rising sun, but also the hot blood in the Overlord's neck.

Pulling the mountain out of the world,
The time is not good, and it never dies,
It's not going to die,
What is the concubine Yu concubine.

He fell.What is empty is the vast land behind him...

score review
The author uses the historical allusion of Xiang Yu's defeat in Gaixia to deduce the topic, and expresses the significance of being good at listening to other people's opinions, which fits the meaning of the title.The language is full of literary talent and artistic expression: at the beginning, words such as setting sun, slanting glow, and scorched black are used to describe the tragedy of the battlefield and exaggerate the tragic atmosphere; the main part uses a large number of parallel sentences to compare Xiang Wang and Liu Bang, which effectively expresses the theme; The description at the end is tragic and meaningful.

make coffee

(a candidate from Henan)

How to make a good pot of coffee?

First of all, you must have a pack of good coffee powder, or buy coffee beans yourself and grind them yourself. Only by ensuring its quality can your work not be based on wasting time.Just like us as human beings, no matter how fancy or charming your packaging is, you must first be called a boutique in your bones; otherwise, all external things will be in vain.Stand up for your own worth.Everyone has advantages, affirm it, give full play to it, don't hesitate because of other people's remarks, "Am I like this?" Insisting that you are a bag of high-quality coffee powder will surely determine your future recognition.If you stick to it, congratulations!

Next, if you leave the ground coffee in the cup, you will never be without coffee.There must be hot water, which can turn the coffee powder into liquid, so that the sweetness of the coffee can be released.This scalding hot water is like the ups and downs or changes in life experience. Don’t avoid it. Only by accepting it and letting it change your life will your life be promoted to a new height. Your coffee cup emits It will be the sweetness of humanity.

If coffee powder is what you stand firm on, then scalding hot water is someone else's advice to you.We will meet many kind-hearted people like this. They point out the direction for us at the crossroads of our lives, enlighten our hearts, make us suddenly enlightened, and our rationality can be sublimated.We are grateful to these people who have given us hot water, they are our mentors in life.

However, not all people provide you with hot water. When you are holding the coffee pot around, someone hands you a pot of water. You take it with gratitude, rinse it, and give that person a cup respectfully. Only then do you realize that the water is warm. , Wasting your fine coffee powder in vain.

This requires us to have a choice and treat the advice or advice given to us differently by others.Maybe some of us benefit for life; maybe some are not suitable for us at all.So, next time, you must keep your eyes open to see which pot of water is steaming and the water splashes are dancing like dancing. Maybe it is the pot of hot water in your life.

It turns out that listening to other people's opinions is so important.

After all this is done, although the coffee is a bit bitter, it is the best time to refresh yourself. If you want to add sugar, you can do whatever you want, it will make your coffee richer and sweeter.oh!Someone is pointing next to you, "Add two yuan." "Add three yuan."...Whose opinion do you listen to?Um!Pushing away their long fingers, you added two yuan confidently and calmly.You tell me, this is the most suitable for your taste, not very sweet, and you can taste a hint of coffee bitterness.You take a leisurely sip, and your brows relax.

This is how a pot of good coffee is brewed. How about you try it too!
score review
The wonderful metaphor argument is a major feature of this article.Candidates use good coffee powder as a metaphor for self-worth, and hot water as a metaphor for other people's advice. They advocate the combination of the two, so that coffee can exude a human aroma, with rigorous argumentation, rich in philosophical thinking, language image, and rigorous thinking.

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