College entrance examination full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 76 Vision (1)
(Tianjin Volume 2006)

composition test questions
"Modern Chinese Dictionary (5th Edition)" has included a new word - vision, the meaning of which is: the longing for prospect.

Please write an article of no less than 800 words with the title "Vision", and the style is not limited.

Question Analysis
According to online surveys, the 2006 Tianjin Juan essay questions ranked first among all college entrance examination essay questions in the same year. The proposition in Tianjin in 2006 is another new attempt based on the continuation of the form of the 2005 test. The word "vision" is widely used in Hong Kong and Taiwan. In April 2005, Lien Chan, chairman of the Chinese Kuomintang, visited the mainland. Used more and more.It can be seen from this that the Tianjin proposition has the intention of moving closer to caring about social hotspots.In fact, the meaning of "Vision" has already been written in the examination questions. The purpose of this is to lead the topic to break through the topic, so as to stimulate students' thinking in composition and help students determine the "scope" of writing.It should be said that these attempts and attempts to think are full of humanistic care and goodwill to students, and hope to play a good teaching-oriented role on the basis of objectively examining students' composition ability and level.

Judging from the situation of Tianjin composition answer sheets, there are very few excellent compositions. As a novel word, "Vision" embodies the sense of the times, but for most candidates, this word is very unfamiliar, and they feel that they have no way to start writing.Therefore, most candidates use words they are familiar with, such as "ideal" and "expectation" to secretly change concepts. Many candidates directly apply the articles they wrote before, but this causes most candidates to have no new insights and no own Thoughts, rote, poor style awareness and other criticisms.

Writing Ideas Tips
The stem of the question suggests that the word "vision" is interpreted as "aspirational prospect", which is the prospect of the future, the prospect of development, the scene that one hopes and wants to see.The key to composition is to interpret this meaning.The meaning of this word mainly focuses on three aspects: "yearning", "prospect", and "subject of vision".It has similar meanings with words such as "wish", "wish", "ideal", "prospect" and "dream", but in some contexts, vision focuses on the prospect and the future.When conceiving, you should focus on two questions: [-]. Who is the subject of the vision?Whose vision am I writing about?Is it personal, group, national, social, or national?[-]. What kind of vision does this subject have?Thinking about these two questions will basically solve the content basis of writing.When writing, it should be noted that the focus should be on the "prospect" and focus on describing "some kind of beautiful scene" to reflect the specific content of the vision.

Full score sample essay
愿景
(Candidate No. [-] in Tianjin)

May people regard "harmony" as their scenery, wish their families to regard "harmony" as their scenery, and wish the country to regard "harmony" as their scenery.

——Testimonial
Pingxiang means "peace", and "peace" means Pingxiang.

grassland.Under the banyan tree.Stone chessboard.

One person is dressed in brocade clothes, but his face is full of sorrow, complaining endlessly; sitting opposite is a Zen master, although plain clothes and cold clothes, his expression is peaceful and at ease.

"Master," the man with a sad face sighed, "I have been in business for decades, step by step, conscientiously, like walking on thin ice. Although I have a small profit, I can't dominate the shopping malls. I hope the master will give me advice and advice."

The Zen master smiled calmly, put his hands together, "Amitabha, if the benefactor does not dislike it, how about playing a game with Lao Na?"

"Master please."

"Please, benefactor."

Jia Ren held his breath and focused, not listening, not squinting, his eyes were calm and focused, every step was considered, with murderous intentions inside, he pressed on every step, but was easily resolved by the old Zen master's seemingly unintentional attack.

Jia Ren persevered, taking every step steadily and being more cautious.

The Zen master remained calm and said with a smile: "Bodhi does not have a tree, and a bright mirror is not a stand. There is nothing in the first place, where is the dust. I hope the benefactor will let it go." Jia Ren was not moved by the Zen words, and only To win chess.

The Zen master tapped lightly, and the son fell, and the Jia people lost their troops and lost their generals.

Jia Ren frowned and looked up at the Zen master, "Master, why?" The Zen master sat upright, playing chess with a smile on his face.Jia Ren seemed to have realized something, and said loudly: "But because 'the onlookers are clear, and the authorities are confused'?" The Zen master smiled knowingly, and said, "You can't say it. The Buddha said, 'You can't say it.'" Jia Ren looked at the green bamboos and yellow flowers in the mountains, suddenly Suddenly enlightened, he said lightly: "Green and green bamboo is nothing but Prajna, and lush yellow flowers are all wonderful truths. Master, let's make peace."

The Zen master gently placed the chess pieces on the board, smiled knowingly, and said, "Amitabha."

The Zen master smiled and played the chess without saying a word, just as the Buddha said on the Lingshan Mountain, because of the smile, the flowers bloom from the smile, and hope that the people in the world will enjoy peace as a scene, and obtain great spiritual liberation, spiritual freedom, and great opportunities in life. Interest, the great realm in life.

"Harmony" is the state of life, the fun of life, the freedom of spirit, the liberation of soul, and the vision of life.

Pingxiang means "harmony".

The mean is called "harmony".

"Harmony" is the realm of life.

"Harmony" is the wisdom of life.

"Harmony" is the vision of life.

What we yearn for is the harmony of people, family and country.May we take "harmony" as the scene-home and everything will prosper.

score review
This article is full of the magic of Zen, without the enlightenment of high-spirited talk, and without the connection of fashion hotspots. Candidates wittily intersperse their feelings and understandings in a game of Zen master and Jia Ren, so that people can find the resonance in life experience by themselves. This is also the greatest beauty of the article.

愿景
——Eternal hope, eternal goal
(Candidate No. [-] in Tianjin)

I don't know what my fate will be like in this life. The quarter of the journey I have just taken is really immeasurable.But the vision tells me that fate is not arranged by God, but can only be held in my own hands.To obtain happiness and brilliance, you have to cultivate and forge, you have to control yourself, and be the master of your destiny!
I don't know how many setbacks there are on the way forward. Although I was young, the experience of being stuck in the mud and being hit by wind and rain has taught me the changes in the world.But the vision taught me that the ups and downs of fate are favored by God. Only by leaving footprints on this difficult and dangerous shoal can I be qualified to appreciate the colorful colors of the bright moon and proudly declare: my life is not boring!
I don't know if I can stand up after falling down. My parents often comfort and caress my immature shoulders, but the vision faces me. If I lie down, the fire of passion will be extinguished, and the road of hard work will be interrupted. As long as there is still a belief There is no reason to be a coward of life, a prisoner of fate, if the lamp of light shines.The God of success favors fearless warriors, and he personally passed on the secret of taking the olive branch: breaking the frozen ice in the heart!

I don't know if there will be any harvest after farming, and the dream of what I want has always stayed in my pillow.But the vision inspired me: a person's life is like the four seasons, spring planting, summer plowing, autumn harvesting, and winter storage.What is planted is hope, what is sown is vitality, hope makes life full and colorful, vitality drives away weeds and desolation in the heart, always thinks that the warmth of the world comes from the sun, but in fact the seeds in the heart will transmit magical energy!
I don't know if I will be intoxicated by the flowers and applause thrown at me. The joys and sorrows of gains and losses have taught me the mysteries of human nature.But the vision enlightened me: honor and fame are like opium, taking the right amount is a good medicine, sinking in it will destroy the bones and destroy the soul.It's just a short break, a gasp for tinkering and debugging.People are on the journey, not returning to others, but just a smug passer-by!

I don't know if showing sincerity wins friendship.The vulgarity of the lucrative market has stained the millennium civilization.But the vision taught me: the value of honesty is like the gold of Zuse, and it will never depreciate. Being with it, what you pay is steadfastness and confidence, and what you get is pure warmth. The definition of a confidant is the joy in magnanimity and the happiness in understanding.Any utilitarian welcome and response will only leave you with aching repentance.

I don't know if the real investment will win the heart.Yuhu Bingxin's nobility once drove me to a lonely and cold embarrassment.But the vision blesses me: when the opportunity comes your way, you must attack quickly, and the motto to show your charm is "brave + try".Decisiveness makes you not regret, persistence gives you luck, daring to love and hate achieves a true and complete life.

The vision dispels the dense fog in my heart, and the vision depicts a clear blue sky for me.That is my eternal hope, my eternal goal...

score review
The article is rich in speculative color and full of incisive metaphors. The passionate description of "fire of passion", "road of hard work" and "light of faith" is a microcosm.In addition, it is developed with a parallel structure, which is catchy to read, with cohesive language and full of emotion, which is indeed a masterpiece in the examination room.

wonderful words
People are on the journey, not returning to others, but just a smug passer-by!

The definition of a confidant is the joy in openness and the happiness in understanding.

愿景
(Candidate No. [-] in Tianjin)

The vision is the smiling face of a sunflower facing the sun, and each chapter blooms with the transmission of life information.Vision is the teardrops that fall when you are moved, each of which contains the most sincere feelings from the bottom of my heart.

Roaming in the mountains, surrounded by mist, I ran into a Taoist priest in plain clothes.Seeing my distressed face, he asked in a low voice, "Benefactor, why are you depressed?"

"Life is becoming more and more bitter, rough, and full of thorns. I was born ordinary, not outstanding. I have ordinary looks, limited wisdom, and I have achieved nothing for many years. There are very few friends around me. Life is hopeless. Shouldn't I be heartbroken ?”

The Taoist smiled slightly and said, "Look at the cicada chrysalis on the branch, it still has its vision, it is waiting quietly, and one day it will break out of its cocoon and become a butterfly, leaving behind its beautiful figure. Why don't you give yourself some space, A hope?"

"But with a vision, do dreams come true?"

"Although I can't really yearn for it, it's not bad!"

As the sun sets, the Taoist goes far away...

In the face of setbacks and misfortunes, don't talk about disappointment, don't talk about giving up, because the longing is in our palms, raise your palms to the sun, the bright red mixed with blood and sunshine will boil in your heart, surge in your eyes, that feeling It is hope, it is dream, it is vision.

The eagle has its vision - to soar in the blue sky and look down on the earth fearlessly forever.

The fish has its own vision - immersed in the clear blue water, kissing the shore freely forever.

The little bird has its vision - to travel through the quiet forest and sing happily forever.

Don't be afraid of difficulties because of setbacks and failures, because hope is in the palm of your hand and vision is in your heart.Don't give up life because of the disappointment after waking up from a beautiful dream, because hope is in the palm of your hand and vision is in your heart.Don't feel at a loss because of the troubled life of luxury and money, because hope is in the palm of your hand and vision is in your heart.

I firmly believe that there is hope in the world where there is love, a world with hope can turn decay into magic, and a life with vision will add a bit of splendor to the ordinary.So wipe away the tears shed for nothing, brush off the exhaustion of body and mind, face the road ahead with a smile, and hold on to the vision in your heart.

score review
The conception and materials of the article are unique, the vivid and vivid expression is just right, the fluent sentences imbue the artistic conception, and the narrative is integrated into strong emotions.The sentence patterns are variable, the paragraphs are well-proportioned, and they are also quite ingenious.

愿景
(Candidate No. [-] in Tianjin)

In the dead of night, sitting alone at the table, I adjusted the brightness of the desk lamp to the minimum.Play a soft music, drink a cup of light tea, through the hot air, I seem to see my vision of life again: longing for maturity, longing for plainness.

When I was in high school, I came to the city to study, and the comrades in the dormitory came from all corners of the country.Every time I do it without hurting one person, and all members get along in harmony, but I always suffer from being unable to achieve it.Those who share the same interests will have a tacit understanding even if they are thousands of miles apart;My father told me: "Life is not always gorgeous and colorful, but ordinary life is the truth. You are still young, son!"

In order to mature myself as soon as possible, I observed the surrounding environment: the sun rises and sets day after day, the moon waxes and wanes again and again, the same mountains are tall and the rivers are long, the sun and the moon are shining, the same grass grows and the warblers fly, the willows are green and the flowers are red... …Not to mention "sitting on the ground and traveling [-] miles a day, surveying the sky and looking at a thousand rivers in the distance", just the seemingly indistinct growth of the Himalayas in a day will gather into such a height, and the great power will be flat, and it will be Gather the true meaning of life.

I used to cheer for my age and step into adulthood, and I used to be complacent about the little progress I made, and I often looked at the future on the small slope of life... But when the hard work time after time is changed into regret Compared with the past, when the sailboat full of confidence and dreams ran aground on the sea of ​​life, I would always feel dejected and sigh.But life is still going on, and life has returned to another starting line, and the pain and helplessness will eventually disappear.Su Dongpo was demoted to Huangzhou after the Wutai Poetry Case. He was poor in material and depressed in spirit, but the suffering finally cheered him up and made him mature.The screaming mountain wind is stopped at the mouth of the valley and turns into a gentle Hexu; the turbulent river slows down at the mouth of the river and turns into a vast expanse;So Su Dongpo broke through from Huangzhou, and finally became the second Fu of Chibi, the word Dajiang, which has been passed down through the ages and has benefited countless scholars and poets in later generations.

(End of this chapter)