Primary school students' full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 10 Characters You, Me, Him (1)
writing tips

We live in society, school, and family, and deal with all kinds of people every day.How can we write a character with distinctive personality, flesh and blood, and a person who can leave a deep impression on people?In addition to going deep into life and observing carefully, you should also pay attention to the following points:

[-]. Carefully select materials and grasp the characteristics of characters
The first is to determine the writing object.If the topic of the composition is "My Teacher", then among the many teachers who have taught you, you should carefully choose the teacher you know best and leave a deep impression on yourself to write.The second is to grasp the typical characteristics of the characters, pay attention to the combination of appearance, action, language and psychological description, so that people feel like hearing their voices and seeing them.The last is to reflect the characteristics of the characters.It is necessary to describe the characters in a certain event, write what the characters do, think and say, so that the characters in the pen can be full of aura and not dull.

[-]. Describe characters from multiple perspectives. To express characters through specific events, we must first grasp the descriptions of the characters' appearance, language, actions, and psychological activities, so as to better express the character's quality and describe the characters vividly.The second is to express the characters through specific events, and select typical events that can best highlight the ideological quality of the characters to write.Depicting characters from multiple angles and directions can make the characters more plump.

my self portrait

Self introduction
Sun Yang
Name: The same surname as Sun Wukong and the same name as the sun.

Gender: Same as Dad.

Age: I have spent 9 years on "Six Day" Children's Day.

Culture: fourth grade of elementary school.

Appearance: flat face and flat nose, big hands and feet like father, thick eyebrows and black eyes like mother, neither tall nor short, neither fat nor thin.

Advantages: On the day I signed up for school with the household registration booklet, the teacher wrote a question "3+1-5" to test me, and quickly said: "I made a mistake!" I answered "equal to minus 1".The teacher asked in surprise: "Do you know what a negative number is?" I said: "Negative numbers are not enough, and I owe you." The teacher stroked my head and smiled slightly.In the past three years, my report card has written: study well, love to work, and be flexible.My classmates often praise me: "I have two skills." I can climb trees and play table tennis.I take care of the drawing and writing on the blackboard in the class.I also like to read story books, and tell my friends after reading them.I love learning English more. In the past, every morning when I was still in a dream, I was awakened by the sound of my father reading English, and I clamored to learn.Dad said: "It's better to learn early." In this way, I insisted on learning from my father sooner or later. After learning the letters and phonetic symbols, I memorized many words and texts.Sometimes, my father deliberately mixed a few Chinese pinyin and English words to test me, and I could recognize them immediately.

Disadvantages: My disadvantages outweigh my advantages.In addition to the teacher's comments: inattentive in get out of class, noisy after class, proud and complacent, my father also summed up a lot of things for me: learn with a whip; ; Nose runny mouth also reluctant to wipe; uncivilized, open the door to stand on the side of the embankment to pee;One day during the holiday, I went to school to play, and I saw the postman inserting the letter through the door of the office. After he left, some of our friends used sticks to pick the letter out from under the door. .They tore off the stamp and I tore the letter in two with one hand.This caused a catastrophe and was beaten by my father.In the overall evaluation of this semester, my Chinese and mathematics scores have dropped to 90 points, which is no longer the previous double hundred points.For this reason, I did not get lucky money from my parents during the Spring Festival.These shortcomings of mine are forgotten in a blink of an eye.Are my brain cells really unbent and unable to remember things?
Desire: Get rid of shortcomings, learn consciously, and strive to become a great medical scientist when you grow up, specializing in the treatment of brain cells of disobedient children.

The small author arranges the full text in the form of a resume.The language of the article is fluent, humorous, authentic and credible, and conforms to the image of the characters. The young author narrates and discusses, explaining meticulously, and incorporating true feelings.

我 是 黑人
Dong Xiaoqi

When you see the title, you may ask: "You must be African?" Wrong, I am an out-and-out Chinese.I don't know why, maybe my mother ate black rice and black vegetables every day when she was pregnant with me. Anyway, I was very dark when I was born!
My mother called me "Little Heitan" since I was a child.I was not happy when I heard the boss: "It's all your fault! You always use bleach for washing clothes, and you never bleach for me. Humph!"

When I learned to listen to stories and read fairy tales, I realized that everything that is beautiful should be white. For example, a beautiful girl is called "Snow White", and a handsome boy is called "Prince Charming".Everyone doesn't like the black color, such as "black crow" and "black witch".

When I went to school, many uncles and aunts were very interested in me, and they smiled strangely when they saw me.Once, an aunt couldn't help asking me: "My little friend, do you have any relatives in Africa?" I knew what she meant, and immediately rolled my eyes at her!On the way back from school, I didn't like anything, and I kicked all the pebbles along the road into the river.When I got home, I yelled to my mother: "I'm going to Africa!" My mother asked me what happened.I cried all of a sudden: "Woo—so that others won't laugh at me for being black, woo—"

By the third grade, I no longer felt sorry for being black.Whenever someone calls me black, I will say: "Black, what's the matter? Is Gu Tianle black? Movie star! Bao Gong is black? An upright official!" Before they had time to refute, I added "no taste", angry They were stunned for a long time and couldn't recover.For this, my classmates gave me another nickname - "Old Bao".I heard it, and I felt very proud: it is really my luck to be associated with a famous upright official in history!
Now, my skin is darker because I train hard every day on the football field.Whenever there is a school football game, "Boom—boom—" My goals one by one can set off a wave of cheers throughout the playground.At the sports meeting, I can take the lead and let the other athletes get tired and lose their temper.

Now when someone asks me, "Do you think you're black?" I say, "Of course!"

"One word, cool! Because this is a fit skin tone! Fit, you know? The most popular in the world!"

The title of the article is "I am black", which is novel and unique.In fact, the little author just wants to write his distress through the pen in his hand-dark skin.From the depression of being black from birth to the depression of just going to school, and finally writing about the optimism of growing up.The young author has strong writing ability, grasps the chronological order, and expresses the personality of the characters to the greatest extent through the description of details and small things.

crying girl

武韬
From kindergarten to elementary school, my crying was famous in the whole class and even the whole school.Who doesn't know, there is a Lemon in the first class, but don't mess with her, or you will regret it later.Why?She will cry!Don't understand this?Make her cry, tears can wet your clothes and make you open an umbrella on sunny days!

The students joked, you should grow up to be an actor, specializing in tragedies, one person on stage, and a group of people crying off stage, make sure tears flow like a river, and play "fire" in one play.

On the weekend, I had a composition class, and because I missed the previous class, I asked the boy in the front row to borrow notes to copy.As a result, the negotiation failed and the loan was not obtained.I was anxious and angry, and committed an old problem, so I lay on the table and sobbed and "rained".My appearance frightened him, and he hurriedly passed the notes over.Boys are afraid of "bubbling", I didn't expect such a miraculous effect from crying, so I immediately burst into laughter.

I thought it was a trick, but my family didn't think so.My mother said I was "fragile"; my father thought I was "not grown up";

I don't want to cry myself.The kindergarten teacher said: "Crying is not a good baby, crying is not a good child!" My aunt frightened me and said: "If your face is swollen from crying, you will not be beautiful!" The unsatisfactory tears were like sweating in summer, and they couldn't stop flowing down.It seems that I am destined not to be a "strong woman" in my life.

Alas, there is no way!I only heard that there are furazolidone and scarring spirit, but there is no anti-crying spirit.However, there is an article that says "crying girls are cute", why should I change "cute"?At least, when the teacher criticizes me, he should teach me some methods. When my father hits me, I will be gentler, and when my mother scolds me, my tone will be softer.In this way, isn't it also very good?
According to Mr. Jia Pingwa's "Bald Head", "crying" can also list eight benefits: 1. Release emotions in time, and you won't get depression.

2. Consecrate yourself and touch others.

3. No need to wash your face.

4. It has the aesthetic feeling of "shui Lingling".

5. Drought resistance.

6. Remind people to bring umbrellas when going out.

7. "Crying children get milk", can get more benefits.

8. Guessing the anagram "upside down" can quickly associate with the word "tear".

Anyway, I'm not the only girl in the world who loves to cry. Sister Lin in "A Dream of Red Mansions" "has tears in her eyes all day long", and she has won widespread sympathy from people.

"Tenderness is like water" A girl who is accompanied by tears must be a gentle girl.

Of course, it is not enough for a girl to only "cry", but more importantly, she should have knowledge and taste. It is my goal to become a "talented girl" like Lin Daiyu or Li Qingzhao.

The young author uses witty and vivid language to describe a girl who loves to cry.Although the little author loves to cry, he is very optimistic. He is able to list eight benefits of "crying", showing us the innocent and lovely image of a crying girl.

I am a girl
Zhang Li
"I am a girl, a beautiful girl; I am a girl, a girl who loves to cry; I am a girl, a strange girl..." I really like Xu Huaiyu's "I am a girl", her song represents the voice of all girls, of course That includes me too.Although I'm not pretty, I don't cry, and I'm not weird, I'm just an ordinary little girl.

I'm not like a girl

From the time I was born, all I heard were words of praise, grown-ups saying that I was beautiful and spoke like a little grown-up.To be honest, I am really good-looking. Although I am beautiful, my personality is not like that of a girl.I am naturally mischievous and restless, and I will dare to do anything that others dare not do.Especially I want to learn martial arts. I love to play football, basketball, table tennis, badminton, etc. Every time I play sandbags, I like to play with boys. Because there are a few girls who like to talk about who they like, so I generally don’t like it. Being close to boys, without these, I would definitely regard myself as a boy and have a great time with them.

girl who doesn't cry

Crying is a girl's nature.I don't like to cry when my teacher criticizes me or when I feel ashamed.Just like Xu Huaiyu sang "tears are not my weapon", so what is my "weapon"?It is "ferocious" that has the momentum of "overwhelming"!

Almost every boy in the class is my opponent, because I am good, they all call me a "Tigress", I don't care!I remember one time when Bao Shaotong quarreled with me and I started to pretend to cry, he folded his hands together and said, "I'm sorry you cried!" With a sound, I covered the place where I was kicked with my hand. Seeing him like that made me so happy.Later, when I glanced at him sometimes, he was afraid (maybe it was pretending).

studious girl

I am very good, but I study very well, and I feel that I can enter the top ten of the class (all subjects).In the second semester of the fifth grade, I never thought that I would become the standard bearer.You will definitely say: "Of course you can be a standard-bearer if you study well." However, you must know how hard it is to get good grades.There are piles of homework every day, and there are also reviews, previews, recitations, and readings.It's not easy to get good grades, is it?
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How about it?Am I too un-girly?How to do it?Should I change myself and try to be a gentle girl?No, it's my personality and I won't change it.Because "I am a girl, a strong girl; I am a girl, a special girl; I am a girl, a hearty girl; I am a girl, a studious girl; I am a girl, a girl you don't understand".

The small author uses the form of subtitles to connect materials, with a rigorous structure and clear layers.The lyrics of the song "I'm a Girl" are introduced into the full text, and the lyrics are modified to end, so that the beginning and the end echo, and vividly portray a girl image that is not like a "girl".

i'm a sloppy kid
Zhu Yuxuan

I have one of the biggest shortcomings - "sloppy".For example: I forgot to bring a pencil to class, I forgot to write my name in the exam, and I forgot to lock the door when I went out... Teachers and parents often remind me to be more careful, but I still can't correct this shortcoming.The classmates gave me an "elegant title" - Miss "Sloppy".

The bad habit of "sloppy" is really harmful.There was a test, after I got the paper, I thought to myself: Be careful, don't be careless.It really worked. I didn't forget to write my name and class. After answering the paper, I checked it three times before handing it in.I thought that I was not sloppy in answering the paper this time, so I was very happy.

After a few days, the teacher handed out the papers, and I was taken aback. "Why don't you always pay attention!" The teacher said, "Look, I forgot to write the word 'answer' for these two questions, and why did you write 'be careful, don't be sloppy again' on the test paper here." 'How many words?" I looked at where the teacher pointed, and thought with shame: Oh, I'm so sloppy!I forgot to write the word "answer" that should be written, and I forgot to erase the words to remind myself when I handed in the paper, really!
When I got home, my father couldn't help laughing when he knew about it.I was so hot by his smile, it was really unpleasant.

"I'm not mocking you, because you wrote this sentence on the test paper, which shows that you have made up your mind to correct your shortcomings, but because of 'sloppy', you made a fool of yourself." After hearing what my father said, I also Can't help laughing.

"My 'sloppy' lady," Dad saw me laughing, and became serious again, "If you are an engineer, if you forget a decimal point in the design, what a loss it will cause!" After listening to my father's teaching, I further understand The danger of "sloppy". "From now on, I must completely get rid of this sloppy bad habit!" Thinking, I couldn't help but grabbed my schoolbag, took out the test paper that said "be careful, don't be sloppy again", and wiped it gently This sentence, it is firmly branded in the heart.

At the beginning, it introduces the various foolishness of "Miss Sloppy" in life and the origin of this nickname with examples.The little author writes some "ridiculous" mistakes he made in a test through specific examples, and then fully realizes the danger of "sloppy" and is determined to correct it.The language is simple, without any gorgeous rhetoric, but the content is very substantial.

12 years old me

Cao Lulu

When 12 colored candles were lit in front of me, I made a silent wish: to be an outstanding painter.At this time, I suddenly found that I seemed to grow up, like a bird with fuller feathers, and it will fly to the blue sky; like a small tree with more annual rings, it will become stronger and stronger.

At the age of 12, I don't want to rise and fall like a kite according to other people's intentions, but I want to fight in the sky like an eagle.Maybe I will still look back at you with a mischievous smile, and I will still be engrossed in the "big windmill"... At the age of 12, I stepped into the threshold of youth excitedly with one foot, but the other foot refused in my childhood dream come out.

When I was 12 years old, I didn't like to play games with my classmates. I always liked to carry a picture folder and a "treasure box" to sketch and pick tree species in nature.The scorching summer is the season for me to soar. When the cicadas sing, I can’t wait to change into short clothes, like a bird out of the cage, and rush downstairs with great interest to eat bamboo stamens and mulberries, go to Pick wicker and weave a flower basket..."A glass of water can also make waves", although I am not mature, but I also have a small world, with some small secrets, I often worry about trivial things, and enjoy the progress of my grades.

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