Primary school students' full score composition classification Daquan

Chapter 12 Characters You, Me, Him (3)
The young author uses six natural paragraphs to explain "I am a little net bug".The structure of the full text is neat and rigorous, and the sixth natural paragraph is the end. Others introduce your general situation, interest in computers, strong curiosity, careless faults, and lofty ideals in turn.Among them, four natural paragraphs have central sentences, which are clear to read and the center is also very clear.

warm family
Mom =! +? +0
杜雪
"Ugh!"

There is another big "×" in my math homework book!
My mother was furious when she saw it, and slapped me hard!

"Why is it wrong! I told you last semester that '×' cannot appear in the math homework book. Say, why is it wrong? Is it because I didn't understand it?"

"I...I...understand it, but...careless..." I said while touching my hot face, feeling a little wronged.

"How many times have I said it! Don't be careless! Don't be careless! Forget it, this is the first time, forgive you. If I see '×' next time, be careful!"

I nodded resignedly.

Ugh!
The exam is over.

Mom started asking questions again, like firing a cannonball.

"Did you check carefully after the exam?"

"Checked."

"What's wrong with the exam?"

"There are pinyin, word formation, judgment..." I was a little impatient.

"What is the composition? How many points do you think you can get in the test? How did Wang Zhen and Chen Kai do in the test?..."

God!This series of question marks made me dizzy!
"Beef, winter bamboo shoots, braised chicken feet..."

I scanned the restaurant windows.

Because I was bitten by a dog, I was not allowed to eat these things for half a year. Looking at these good things that cannot be eaten, I felt itchy in my heart.When I got home, I saw a plate of sausages in an inconspicuous corner of the table.My face immediately turned from cloudy to sunny.

"Xuexue, mom knows you can't eat those, so she specially steamed some sausages for you, you should eat more."

At this time, my mother was so kind again.

The title of this article is very creative.The young author uses punctuation marks to portray the mother's contradictory and unified character.The development of the storyline is promoted through character dialogue, which embodies the essence of maternal love.The language is simple and natural, and the writing technique is flexible.

mother at home
Hu Yanwen

I am the only child in my family, and my mother was born when she was 40 years old, so my mother "cared" me very much!
In the morning, as soon as I woke up, my mother came into my room with her shoelaces and socks: "Baby, Mommy will dress you!" My eyes are still blurred, and my mother's eyes are still blurred. Dressed me up as "handsome and unrestrained". "Baby, come, eat. Mommy made you a rich breakfast, and it's all your favorite food!" Every breakfast, I eat very "hard".

"My mother is good at everything, but it's just too annoying. She takes me as a pet every day, helping me do this and that, alas..." I sang the song that I must sing every day, and went home from school in fear.As soon as I opened the door, my mother rushed out of the kitchen with a kitchen knife: "Baby, you are back! Come, Mommy will get you slippers!" My mother scared me half to death: "Ah Oh my god, I killed someone——" "Oh, baby! I scared you, I'm sorry! Come on, let's go into the house and do your homework!" Mom held my schoolbag in one hand and supported me in the other (like the maids supporting the queen mother in the past) Into the house.I just started doing homework, and my mother nagged again: "Thirsty? Do you want watermelon? Eat an apple? Turn on the air conditioner..." I was annoyed, and there were many little angels circling on my head: "Mom! I’m here alone, OK?” “Honey, Mommy is doing it for your own good too! Well, I’ll make you dinner and wait! Be good! Ba——” Mom gave me a kiss on the face and went out .

I breathed a sigh of relief.Unexpectedly, within 2 minutes, the mother in the kitchen started to ask me this and that loudly while cooking...

Alas, there is a troublesome mother at home!

The mother in the article is indeed "annoying".The mother written by the author may have many similarities with the mothers of the classmates. They spoil the children too much, and as a result, the children lose any opportunity to exercise themselves.The young author expresses his personal feelings in humorous and lively language, which makes people think deeply after reading.

I wash my mother's feet
Chen Xin
Today is March [-] Women's Day, and my mother was preparing to wash her feet at night. I hurried over and said to my mother: "Mom, today is your holiday. Let me wash your feet, okay?" He looked at his mother.My mother couldn't believe her ears, she froze for a moment, and said happily: "Okay, okay, my daughter is sensible!"

I poured some cold water first, then poured boiling water into the basin, tried it with my hands, it was neither cold nor hot.I took off my mother's socks and looked at them: my mother's feet were very wide, with thick and short toes, and there were yellow calluses on each toe, which was hard to the touch.I asked curiously: "Mom, why are your feet so wide?" My mother said emotionally: "When I was a child, my family was very poor and couldn't afford shoes. I could only wear cloth shoes made from old clothes. In rainy and snowy days, the road was muddy. Unbearable, in order not to get my shoes wet, I often went to school barefoot and put them on in the classroom. At that time, my feet were as cold as buns..." I was washing, listening to my mother telling stories, and my eyes couldn't help getting wet up.I thought to myself, how happy I am now!

I helped my mother wash her feet, and my mother smiled from ear to ear. This is the first time I have seen my mother smile so happily.I took a towel and scrubbed it gently, and I couldn't help but think of one afternoon last year, when I ran out to play alone without even saying hello.When my mother and father saw that I was missing, they called me everywhere to look for me, but they couldn't find me nearby.Mom called again and looked everywhere, but couldn't find it.My mother was so anxious that she went to the streets and alleys to look for it... I didn't think of going home until the evening.On the path leading to home, I saw my mother dragging her tired body limping towards the house in the afterglow of the setting sun.I yelled loudly and ran to my mother...

"Xinxin, the water is going to be cold." My mother looked at me kindly. After hearing this, I came back to my senses and quickly wiped my mother's feet dry.

After pouring the footwashing water, I walked to my mother's side, ready to beat her back.My mother took me into her arms and said excitedly: "Xinxin, you gave my mother the most precious gift today, thank you!"

Lying in my mother's arms, I feel so happy.

"March [-]th" Women's Day is a mother's day, and the author's gift to her mother is to help her wash her feet.Through this kind of behavior, the communication and understanding between mother and child are enhanced, and the two feelings of "maternal love" and "filial piety" are subtly harmonized.

The language of the article is fluent, and the tone is friendly and natural.The language description is vivid and accurate.The breath of life is strong, full of mother-daughter affection.

my fool dad
Anonymous
My dad is a fool, and I love my fool dad.

It is not false to say that my father is stupid.My mother talked all day long, saying that my father was a fool, a fool and a blessing.I also know that my dad is a bit silly.People often do wrong things at home... Either forget to put salt or forget to put MSG in cooking.The rice is either burnt or not cooked.Once, he actually ate buns with ink, and we all laughed, but instead of laughing, he said in a silly voice, "It's delicious, it's delicious."

One morning, we were eating breakfast. Dad just took a bite, looked up at his watch, and hurriedly picked up his clothes and ran to the factory.Mom said: "It doesn't matter, he will be back in a while." As expected, after a while, Dad came back.It turned out that he had forgotten that today was Sunday.

One day during the summer vacation the year before last, our whole family was having lunch when suddenly dark clouds rolled over and it rained cats and dogs all at once. My father hurriedly picked up the only raincoat at home and ran outside. My mother and I kept yelling "Doujiang..." Dad didn't seem to hear it, and kept drilling into the rain.We had to watch helplessly as the heavy rain washed away the pot of bean paste on the wall.After a while, the rain stopped, and my father was like a drowned rat, and he rushed in the door panting and asked, "how are you?" Mom said angrily, "we, us, you don't have us in your heart!" He took off his shirt and twisted the water, and said with a smile on his face: "The two bags of raw materials imported by the factory were placed by the window. I suddenly remembered that I didn't close the window when I got off work. Fortunately, I arrived in time. Otherwise, or... oh ——Fortunately, you are still a party member! Is my factory with thousands of people more important, or your pot of bean paste? This is a matter of principle!" What is "principle"? I whispered in my heart.

Now, I know that Dad is not stupid at all.He is the leader in the unit, and I am the leader in the class.Teacher Wu, the class teacher, often said: "When you are a cadre, you have to suffer, and you have to be a fool. When things happen, you have to bear hardships first, and enjoy them later..." When I was working, I always rushed to do the dirty work, handing out books When I was young, I always kept the old ones for myself.Therefore, some students said I was stupid.How did he know that compared with my father, I am still far behind.When I grow up, I want to be a big fool like my father.

My dad is a fool, and I love my fool dad.

After reading this article, you must also say: "Is this dad really stupid?" This shows that the author has put a lot of effort into the word "stupid", reflecting the father's love through "eating buns and dipping ink" and "forgetting that it is Sunday". He is so cute and stupid, and it shows that his father is so stupid because he forgets his own selfishness on business and leaves his family for everyone.The narration of this article is smooth and natural, with progressive layers.The selection of materials is typical, which well expresses the characteristics of the characters.

surrogate dad
Rong Xudong

I am 13 years old, but I have been a "father" at a young age, can you believe it?

Last Sunday afternoon.I was lying comfortably on the bed and dealing with "Tom and Jerry". I will leave this little guy to you if the unit does some work. Remember, don’t wake up your father, diapers and ready-made milk powder are on the small table in the Westinghouse." Then, the mother threatened again (like a cat to Like a mouse): "Be careful, or your uncle will come and pick your head." Before my mind turned around and I didn't understand what was going on, my mother had already slammed the door and left.

Oh my God!I, an upright little man, actually want to "degenerate" to this point.But mother's life is hard to break!I moved a bench and sat obediently next to the "little emperor", praying silently in my heart that this little guy would sleep until his mother came back.Thinking about it, I almost fell asleep in a daze. "Wow——" a loud and long cry made me fall off the bench in fright.The young master is awake!I was so excited that I rolled and crawled to the side of the cradle, shook the cradle lightly, and he immediately became quiet.Hey, this little guy is so easy to pass away, I let go of my hand happily.Unexpectedly, "Wow--" the kid opened his voice again. "You bastard, you want to exhaust me to death!" While shaking the cradle, I grimaced angrily at him, and he grinned with only two front teeth.This "little emperor" is only 8 months old, but his weight is comparable to mine. His whole body is plump, especially his arms, which are no different from lotus roots.The little guy's eyes look like my uncle's, they are round and bright, very beautiful.Under my service, the kid sucked his fingers contentedly and babbled to himself.

Hey, there seems to be something wrong, is there a leak somewhere?I touched the kid's buttocks, "Ah!" I couldn't help but panic, this little guy actually urinated in the cradle and dripped on my feet in broad daylight.I hurriedly changed his diaper with a sad face, but he refused to cooperate. He kicked his two "beauty legs" vigorously, accompanied by hoarse crying, as if I was abusing him. "Oh, baby, don't cry, it will be fine soon!" Listening to his crying, I was really scratching my heart.Is he hungry? "Okay, don't move, I'll get you something to eat!" I hurriedly found a baby bottle from Westinghouse, held up his head, and carefully stuffed the nipple into the little ancestor's mouth, feeding him little by little. he drinks.The little guy swallowed a few mouthfuls, then burst into tears again, no matter how much I coaxed and lied to him, it was useless, and I was so anxious that I couldn't control my legs. "Cry, cry, you're the only one who can cry!" The more I watched, the more I felt wronged and helpless, and I burst into tears too.

The sonorous duet finally attracted Papa.He rushed to the cradle, picked up the baby skillfully, patted him a few times, and he stopped crying immediately.Hmph, obviously bullying people!Dad wiped away my tears with a smile: "Son, didn't you come here too? Come on, come on, smile, how old is he!" After listening to what Dad said, I burst into laughter.

It's just that my "surrogate dad" who did it for 1 hour and 20 minutes failed completely.

At a young age, the young author was forced to act as a "surrogate father" once in order to complete the tasks assigned by his mother.The article is written around the word "cry". First, the little cousin cried, and finally coaxed the little cousin, and then cried again because the little cousin was wet. This time, the little author tried all kinds of "martial arts", but never I didn't coax my little cousin well.In the end, the little author couldn't help himself and cried.

The whole text has clear ideas, fluent language, and sincere feelings. It makes people feel a childish innocence full of childishness when reading it.In addition, the delicate psychological description is also a major feature of this article.

"Successful People" in My Family

Xie Zhiqiu

Dad walked with his chest and stomach straight, his shoulders were flat, his elbows were slightly bent, and he was very stable.He always imagined himself to be a high-profile celebrity, and my mother and I respected him as "successful person."

Dad especially likes to read books related to success. The bookcase is full of books with the words "success", such as "There must be a way to success", "The Law of Success That Never Says Die", "Confidence Makes the Future" and so on. .He can read these books all day without feeling tired.If I'm on the sidelines, he looks more seriously.Sometimes I also explain to my mother and me. "I am a qualified father, and even more so, an excellent man." Dad's casual words are famous epigrams.

Once, my father came back from a lecture given by an appreciation education expert, and his attitude was very kind.That night, when I was going to bed, my mother blamed me for dawdling, predicted that I would not get up the next day, and yelled at me.Dad suddenly said: "No——I believe you will get up very happily tomorrow." My mother and I froze for a moment, laughed, and said in unison: "Appreciate education..." Dad also laughed: "Having a baby is very difficult." It’s easy, but it’s hard to raise a child. In the eyes of every parent, their child is a genius.” You see, it’s another “famous saying and aphorism”, and it’s two!
Recently, Dad started exercising regularly every night.He was shirtless, showing white fat, first punched, left punch, "Hey!" Twenty—I call it "frog legs"; the last is push-ups, and I can only do a few in the first few days. Dad is determined to increase one every day, and the goal is [-]!My mother and I admired it very much.

Dad announced that he would write a book in the future, and the title of the book was already thought of - "Growing Up with Daughter".I really wish I had read this book earlier, when my dad would really be a well-known successful person!
Writing about people with things is a notable feature of this article.No one is isolated and cannot be separated from specific events. The young author portrays the book from various aspects and angles of deeds, words, and thoughts, and the language is humorous and full of life.

"Cool" Dad
梅颖
Seeing this topic, you may wonder, how could Dad be connected with "Cool Brother"?In fact, "Cool Brother" is my father.To be honest, my dad is quite "cool". Every winter, my dad likes to wear a pair of black police boots, a black coat, a pair of sunglasses, and a cigarette in his hand.The more you look at him, the more he looks like a bad boss...

(End of this chapter)